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2/17/2013 c9 12twilight guardian
Well, it was nice. I think the language is honestly too strong to keep a K rating. I would also encourage you to invest in a spell-check. Also, some writing tips I would give would be to re-read this story in a few months and notice if there are any things you would make corrections to. After all, the more you write the better you become. It's always a good thing to correct work, even if it's completed. I would also encourage you to read aloud and record pauses in your speech with commas and other types of grammatical works. Reading it aloud can really be a benefit until you get an instinct for things.

I also don't think it's really necessary to break up the story into two separate fictions. If the story isn't done, it's not done. It would be fine if it's a sequel to a finished story arc, but if you're going to be continuing the story elsewhere, I don't understand the point.

Still, it was quite a good go for your first fanfic, so congratulations! Here's to writing more and improving your work! It's nice to see someone on the site willing to get critique.
12/8/2012 c9 14Celestia's Paladin
*facepalm* They are a bunch of idiots.
12/8/2012 c5 Celestia's Paladin
And of course they are two idiots..
12/8/2012 c4 Celestia's Paladin
So they are both surrounded by perverts.
12/8/2012 c3 Celestia's Paladin
Tai... you needs some new friends, ones that aren't a bunch of perverts.
11/12/2012 c9 HaveManners
love the story :) great job
11/5/2012 c9 12Vigatus
I think Mimi needs a smack to the head, Tai needs a kick in the ass and Sora needs a boot to the vagina.
11/5/2012 c9 MissMarii
Great! I love it! But I dont like Sora! And Taichi is so stupid ): I hope everything is gonna been okey between Mimi and Taichi. See you in the next story! 3
10/22/2012 c7 MissMarii
Next, Next, Next, Next! \o/ Love this chapter, like always, I will waiting for the next! :D
10/4/2012 c6 MissMarii
Excellent chapter! I was surprised with the fact that Sora maybe love Taichi, I didnt expect that. I really like this chapter, so I'm waiting for the next cap! So please updated soon
9/20/2012 c5 MissMarii
Great! Like always I love this chapter!
9/19/2012 c4 ines
one word: AMAZING!
9/18/2012 c4 MissMarii
Oh Thanks for the chapter, it really was funny, I cant wait for the date!
9/16/2012 c3 Kaname Langley
Wanna more!
9/14/2012 c1 MissMarii
I like this couple! Are so cute! Please continue updating!
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