
12/18/2012 c1
4LurkxReptile
Okay, first off. Good start to things, having a normal routine of doing things for the day, chores homework ect. I would advise that when you are changing p.o.v. that you would put a line to seperate things out it helps us readers from getting confused. The dream was interesting as if the dream is going to play a special part in plot.
I do hope that you get out of your writers block, we (big arrow points at me) have all been there. A great teacher once told me, that to break from writers block, there are no special tricks. You have to force yourself to write, not just on your story, but maybe on anything in general.
I know that soon the inspiration will come and your mind will be once again filled with desire to write.
If you have questions or want advice, i am always available. I may not be the best and you may not like my ideas, what i can do is get you think and maybe give you some new inspiration.
I appogize for rambling and await for your next chapter.

Okay, first off. Good start to things, having a normal routine of doing things for the day, chores homework ect. I would advise that when you are changing p.o.v. that you would put a line to seperate things out it helps us readers from getting confused. The dream was interesting as if the dream is going to play a special part in plot.
I do hope that you get out of your writers block, we (big arrow points at me) have all been there. A great teacher once told me, that to break from writers block, there are no special tricks. You have to force yourself to write, not just on your story, but maybe on anything in general.
I know that soon the inspiration will come and your mind will be once again filled with desire to write.
If you have questions or want advice, i am always available. I may not be the best and you may not like my ideas, what i can do is get you think and maybe give you some new inspiration.
I appogize for rambling and await for your next chapter.
11/10/2012 c1
2dblackdire
Good chapter! It looks like it's set in the present (reference to whatching TV). Is this a prolouge?

Good chapter! It looks like it's set in the present (reference to whatching TV). Is this a prolouge?