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3darknessDemon
Blockhead? Seriously? Why Blockhead? Then again, this is coming from the guy who has Sam I Am in his darker and more serious sequel...
Who is Clarissa? Hmm? And why does she have a CB deck? 3
Awesome, a reference to Bluey, but more importantly...AHAHAHAHAHA! I BEAT YUMA! Ahh, I feel as invincible as Superman.
Also, a bit pot-and-kettling going on with Koukin calling Serena egotistical.
PS: I think a bit of you went into my dialogue, because I never say 'thats a thing'.
3darknessDemonBlockhead? Seriously? Why Blockhead? Then again, this is coming from the guy who has Sam I Am in his darker and more serious sequel...
Who is Clarissa? Hmm? And why does she have a CB deck? 3
Awesome, a reference to Bluey, but more importantly...AHAHAHAHAHA! I BEAT YUMA! Ahh, I feel as invincible as Superman.
Also, a bit pot-and-kettling going on with Koukin calling Serena egotistical.
PS: I think a bit of you went into my dialogue, because I never say 'thats a thing'.
1/24/2014 c5 darknessDemon
Hmm, just to correct you on something, Naturia Beast is green, not white. Also, your version of MST is really weird. Its a blue twister/whirlpool, not a mini-thunderstorm.
Ahahaha, Zero beat her wife, although she used a very interesting (if niche) combo beforehand.
Also, why does Maya look like Psychic Lifetrancer, and isn't Lea really named Axel? Its nice to see a non-OC or YGO opponent use a real deck for a change.
You should REALLY fix your summary, because that could be a reason why you aren't getting other readers, they could see it and think "This dummy thinks he owns YuGiOh and Kingdom Hearts characters!"
Hmm, just to correct you on something, Naturia Beast is green, not white. Also, your version of MST is really weird. Its a blue twister/whirlpool, not a mini-thunderstorm.
Ahahaha, Zero beat her wife, although she used a very interesting (if niche) combo beforehand.
Also, why does Maya look like Psychic Lifetrancer, and isn't Lea really named Axel? Its nice to see a non-OC or YGO opponent use a real deck for a change.
You should REALLY fix your summary, because that could be a reason why you aren't getting other readers, they could see it and think "This dummy thinks he owns YuGiOh and Kingdom Hearts characters!"
12/4/2013 c4 darknessDemon
At first I thought that was a Jet Set Radio deck with some kind of Sticker Star crap going on, but when Sora and Riku appeared it was, 'Oh, Dream Drop Distance okay'.
I KNEW you were going to humiliate Catastor, one way or another.
I still don't understand how the hell Noise Combat works, and Joshua kind of pulled a Yugi by drawing into it right away and banishing 4 monsters with Mission Failure.
You were a bit inconsistent on Spy's gender, and it brings some bad implications by making the wannabee rapper Dark-attribute.
Wow, that really WAS an outdated build you were using, I don't even remembering running Scarecrow and United We Stand in my deck!
At first I thought that was a Jet Set Radio deck with some kind of Sticker Star crap going on, but when Sora and Riku appeared it was, 'Oh, Dream Drop Distance okay'.
I KNEW you were going to humiliate Catastor, one way or another.
I still don't understand how the hell Noise Combat works, and Joshua kind of pulled a Yugi by drawing into it right away and banishing 4 monsters with Mission Failure.
You were a bit inconsistent on Spy's gender, and it brings some bad implications by making the wannabee rapper Dark-attribute.
Wow, that really WAS an outdated build you were using, I don't even remembering running Scarecrow and United We Stand in my deck!
11/29/2012 c3 darknessDemon
Meh, not as satisfying as the previous chapter, especially the duel. Are those characters who are named after objects OCs?
Oh, and you got the description for Vampire Lord and Genesis wrong. Vampire Lord has leaf green hair and wears a standard vampires cape, Genesis has the face of a monster with big teeth and a spiked frill all around his body, not wings.
Meh, not as satisfying as the previous chapter, especially the duel. Are those characters who are named after objects OCs?
Oh, and you got the description for Vampire Lord and Genesis wrong. Vampire Lord has leaf green hair and wears a standard vampires cape, Genesis has the face of a monster with big teeth and a spiked frill all around his body, not wings.
11/23/2012 c2 darknessDemon
Well that was certainly an interesting duel! Although, multiple duels per chapter would be great, assuming this one was used just to "introduce" the whole concept. What exactly is the theme of Koukins deck? It seems part D.D., part warrior, and then there is Uria! (a nod to Raviel by me would've been nice! :) I look forward to chapter 3!
Oh, and why the hell did Haze ditch us? Was it because we lost in the Animated Duel?!
Well that was certainly an interesting duel! Although, multiple duels per chapter would be great, assuming this one was used just to "introduce" the whole concept. What exactly is the theme of Koukins deck? It seems part D.D., part warrior, and then there is Uria! (a nod to Raviel by me would've been nice! :) I look forward to chapter 3!
Oh, and why the hell did Haze ditch us? Was it because we lost in the Animated Duel?!
11/23/2012 c1 darknessDemon
First of all, I think you meant to say you DON'T own all non-OCs in the story (obviously) in your summary. Also, I would personally remove the first part in the summary since, in no offense, nobody is going to "care" that its a revival and it leaves room to flesh out your summary.
ANYWAY...
I loved the nod to the Aliens, and the inclusion of the YuGiOh casts (outside of Zexal, since nobody cares about them...) is a pleasant surprise!
First of all, I think you meant to say you DON'T own all non-OCs in the story (obviously) in your summary. Also, I would personally remove the first part in the summary since, in no offense, nobody is going to "care" that its a revival and it leaves room to flesh out your summary.
ANYWAY...
I loved the nod to the Aliens, and the inclusion of the YuGiOh casts (outside of Zexal, since nobody cares about them...) is a pleasant surprise!