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1/22 c13 Guest
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1/23 c1 1Dark White Fang
Yo, I'm giving this fic a second try. I hope, I manage to finish it this time. To be honest, I only have one really serious difficulty with this fic... I hate the Heaven's Feel route. I have multiple reasons for why. First, for me it's a route without good end. Second, I am a David Gemmel fan and my definition of a hero comes from his work : " A boy is drowning in a river, but that boy is fated to become a monster and tyrant who would become a a blight for mankind. What would a hero do knowing the Fate of the child ? He would jump in the river and save the child. Why ? Because that's what Heroes do." , you can understand that with a definition like that of choosing either his ideals or saving Sakura appear stupid. From my point of view, Shirou can't choose his ideals and NOT save Sakura. A Hero doesn't kill or let innocent die to save others. So putting saving Sakura and his ideals has two different things is a stupid thing for me. Third, I just plainly don't like Sakura as romantic interest for Shirou. It's not helped by the fact her route only end in what are for me bad ends. It gives the impression she is such a burden that Shirou can't achieve anything good. That feeling is not helped by the fact Shirou was forced to "let go" of his ideals (something I still find stupid), like Shirou in making that choice lost the edge, the unbreakable willpower which enabled him to achieve good ends in the others routes. Another thing that makes me feel like Sakura is a burden is that she is the only one requiring him to let go of the ideal at the very base of his person, what makes him who he is. Like she is unable to pull her own weight so he has to do it but she is such a burden that doing it comes at the price of who he is. Because that's what Shirou does when letting go of his ideals, he kills himself. He drestroy what is at the centre of everything that make Shirou Emiya. That is the last reason why I don't like the Heaven's Feel route and Sakura, where the others route show Shirou growing, tempering himself and generaly improving himself, in this Shirou destroy himself. Which is fitting, self-destroying and self-sacrifice being a recurring theme of the route which end on this very thing done by either Shirou or Ilya.

So, yeah not a fan of Heaven's Feel so I have some difficulty sometimes while reading this fic. But I will still do my best to persevere because aside from that, I do find this fic really interesting and amusing.
1/20 c1 Guest
1st page and I'm already hooked
1/21 c44 Alberto Cubas Tovar
Sinceramente me encanta esta historia, mi primer contacto fue a través de Wattpad, cuando está haciendo un viaje de tres horas por tierra y dejadme decirte me entretuvo, la pelea de Perseo el primer contacto con un dios del universo campione fue un espectáculo porque como lo narras fue como sumergirse en el Shiro que estás escribiendo, descubriendo su nueva naturaleza de ser un campione y como lo afectaba estos nuevos impulsos de luchar contra seres divinos.
Luego llegó Hades para entrar del todo en lo que era su nueva especie, llegó a Japón y nos dimos cuenta cómo lo afectó la fusión completa de los recuerdos alternativos, después de algo de inacción pero un desarrollo de mundo bastante entretenido.
Llegó el arco sun wukong y me sentí un poco traicionado porque capturaste a Shirou por la distracción de goudo, pero esa pelea de mordret fue algo que disfruté como un buen trago de algo frío después de un día caluroso.
Llegó el complot del dúo de Lolis inmortales, y con ello Venus. Creo que aquí fue donde comenzó lo que sea que tengas en la cabeza, para hacer de tu MC una mutilación bastante grave. Porque seamos sinceros, el que los instrumentos de un campione no empiecen a latir por su enemigo natural que está a tu lado; es algo que no puedo creer, además porque un incidente terrorista tenía signos o rastros de un incidente mágico y el comité no detectó nada divino en el asunto; cuando en capítulos posteriores dices que tienen talismanes para detectar o reaccionar a tales elementos divinos (llegada de ahriman a una costa inventada). Bueno y eso de que dejara avanzar una compulsión mental a tal estado cuando los recuerdos de Archer están en la mesa de cartas de poder de Shiro, si fue llevarlo un poco al límite.
La pelea, esa fue la pelea un Shirou que considera todo lo que tiene al alcance como un autómata, puedo ver a Archer sumergirse en ese estado mental, para prepararse para cuando es llamado al deber de un counter guardián.
Aquí se consigue la mayor parte de poder que pudo conseguir tu MC la unlimited blade works (pd: lo más poderoso del Shirou face nasuverse es el noble phamtas de muramasa) básicamente esto hace que su hechizo personal de gradation aire sea mucho más económico y abre las puertas a la idea de crear una malla de cuchillas debajo de los músculos para la protección.
Con eso fuera llegó esa idea, que creo nos llevó a un paralelismo que sucedió con un manga de culto Berserk; el enemigo cobarde Ulises y lo que parece ser, el momento en mutilaste enserio a tu MC. Flechas con veneno y Shirou no dándose cuenta de que está siendo perjudicado, ya no es para creerse, más aún cuando tosió sangre no se le pasó mi por la cabeza ver su manga, fue el colmó. Además de ver como un enemigo tiene la capacidad de movimiento instantáneo, además de que lo hiciste reflexcionar sobre cómo sus conocidos e illya están siendo atacados también. Creo que eso ameritaba ya el uso de su mayor as bajo la manga.
Si la excusa de falta de maná es una razón, Archer utilizó su np para secuestrar a Rin en el anime, estando ya si. Maestro para suministrar el maná necesario (se que es un error usar el maná para referirse a la energía de un Magus pero entiendes). Para distraer a toda en área pequeña. Ahora con las reservas de un campione, un enemigo o dos, sus aliados en peligro, no es algo que haría retener a emiya shirou.
Regresando a la metáfora de Berserk, creo que los lectores de esta historia están frustrados porque debido a los largos espacios de actualización nos muestras a un Shirou bastante pasivo y receptivo a lo que le rodea, esa parte en el combate de ahriman, donde se niega a aceptar que no es Angra manyu, sabiendo que están en un mundo diferente fue donde terminaste mutilar el intelecto del MC, ahora no sé cuánto tiempo paso entre las actualizaciones de los últimos tres capítulos, pero el hecho de que hallas dado más tiempo en pantalla a godou y al pesado de ahriman que la pelea de mordret vs Shirou debe ser frustrante y estoy frustrado. Han subido este fic en Youtube y son siete horas de godou contra ahriman. Donde la mejor pelea de Shirou en el fic fue menos de la mitad que eso.
Debido al largo periodo de espera y el extensión de la batalla de godou, fue que creaste la ilusión de que godou es más importante que que tú MC(Shirou).
Hasta donde se de tu revisión la batalla con el dios cobarde Ulises, no es más que una persecusión y una ejecución debido a todas las desventajas de mal karma que aplicaste contra el. No me dejó satisfecho, sinceramente creó que el fin Ulises fue algo que has retrasado por demasiado tiempo. Esperaré a más actualizaciones en el futuro, para terminar de leer este increíble trabajo.
Muchas gracias por tu esfuerzo y espero que ese libro tuyo sea un jodido y rotundo éxito, porque tienes talento para esto.
1/20 c47 Oka Nieba 1
Overall it’s been a pleasant experience having reading this fic up to this point, props to you for demonstrating impressive determination and skill at writing. At some points it feels tediously long though, I feel like you can get your points across without sidetracking too much and thus improving the pacing of the story.

Aside from that I just have to ask though, do you dislike Shirou? The poor lad has been left at the brink of death after every fight, also has been raped and psychologically scarred enough that some 10 chapters later he’s still suffering from it. And for all his struggle he gets nerfed? The hybrid Excalibur may initially seem like a power up but from the looks of it Shirou won’t be able to wield it for a looong time so it’s undoubtedly a nerf. Then he was even further nerfed a great deal by disabling his tracing and his recently acquired reality marble. I can’t see the reason for giving him both Arondight and his RM and then taking them away soo quickly that he barely used them. His authorities aren’t even that OP since his more powerful ones have smartly designed limitations. Maybe I’m a being biased but if you see the whole picture practically everyone in your story has been getting stronger while you continue stripping Shiloh of his powers
1/11 c9 Capt. Schroller
Now I wish Arturia's Mordred would appear to fight this male Mordred.
1/9 c47 1Daetor
Yo.

Long time reader, first time reviewer here. First of all, I want to thank you, the author, for all the time and effort you spent in writing this and delivering it to us readers, for free. Regardless of flaws, because everything has flaws, it's still a very good, and very well researched story. The passion is visible in every chapter and every author note, and while RL and your efforts to become a published author has slowed things down, and may one day stall this before it's completed... what is already here is worth appreciating.

I'm not an expert on either Fate or Campione. I liked the original Fate and Fate/Zero, but a lot of what came after, especially FGO, I disliked. Campione, I read for good bunch of volumes until around a certain time shenanigans arc, but certain translations were taken down and I have yet to find the time to track down the complete series. As such I won't comment on how accurate this story is in regards to either story. For that matter, I don't care that much either. Cross-overs are inevitably flawed and impossible to perfect. Unless both worlds are stupidly well documented, it's impossible to be absolutely sure how elements from one setting would work in another. As such, the most important element is how entertaining the story is, not the accuracy of the "facts".

In terms of entertainment, you've definitely done a good job. The arcs were interesting. There was commedy and misunderstandings, there was action, there was conflict, both martial and emotional. Plenty of variety to be had. The style may be wordy, but I personally like it a lot. I personally don't care if brevity is the soul of wit, give me nice long stories I can while away with for days on end. Save the brevity for work emails or something.

That said, as I said, there are of course flaws. As far as my non-expert eyes can tell, most of them are more of a subjective nature. It's the typical 'you can't please everyone' effect. In my case, I have to admit that I absolutely hated the Venus arc, and the Ahriman possessing Illya arc even more so. The Venus arc at least came with the satisfaction of her getting stabbed by Shirou at the end, that came with some catharsis. There wasn't much of that with Ahriman...

Don't get me wrong, the arcs were well written, well executed, and they definitely achieved your goal of altering the nature of the conflicts in question. I just hate those sorts of situations, and hate those sort of villains. If anything, it's proof that your writing is amazing, because in spite of how much I hate the mind-control and body-snatching tropes, I still stuck with the story, and will continue to stick to it to the end, if you will continue it until the end.

I just hope there won't be a third instance of this sort of thing. Third time might be too much even with the quality of the writing presented here.

Regardless of what you do in the future, how you handle the story and whatnot, I shall wish you luck. Hopefully your dreams as an author will be realized and you will find much success in the future, if you haven't found it already. No matter what happens next, this story is a true work of art, and one of the best fanfics on this site, and likely when compared with stories on many others. Perhaps I'm not an expert or some great authority of things related to writing, but I'm someone who's day was made a little bit better, a little bit more interesting, a little bit more fun, thanks to your work. I think that counts for something.
1/8 c47 ladrod23wo
Bueno me tomo un poco tarde la reseña pero para empezar me a gusta tu fic no solo la temática si no la forma como lo muestras hay veces que me divierte lo e llego a ver 3 veces y con todo estás tomando la escénica del shirou ruta Sakura que ya no le importa su sueño si no proteger a su amada aunque lo veo un poco raro verlo separarse tan rápido de el pero no me quejo al final me a agradado lo unico que espero es ver a un shirou más activo y si no es en el verso campione que sea en nasu espero hasta el otro capítulo (si puedes que sea rápido estoy ansioso)
1/4 c47 Ryoji Mochizuki
interesting.
1/3 c47 Sonic2610
Honestly, with the exception of The Second Invitation I like all Odysseus' Authorities and I would have liked that Shirou got one of those on top of the one that he got. For some reason I think that if he battle and defeat Odysseus again he would got more than one Authority from him.
1/2 c4 Khavros
has someone who's reread GSBW several times... since we are still in Book 1 Sakura fails as the love interest due to the trope "I'm on a never ending quest to save my girlfriend"... don't get me wrong she's a strong motivator and good red herring... but for Book 1 we all know and can see that Illya is best girl. She literally runs the Rin card of ODC with a side of loli brocon. Illya covers all of Shiro weaknesses and he covers hers. I doubt he'd have been half as successful with Sakura instead of her. They'd have tried to establish a quiet life somewhere and then when things went down he'd have been disadvantaged every step. Sticking by Sakura is very Shiro tho so can't complain. But as of now Illya is best girl and it'll take a lot of Sakura content before that changes, and by now the lead Illya has seems insurmountable. anyways thanks again for writing and posting this. its totally a monster but always a fun reread!
12/26/2021 c47 5InsaneSmirkingRevenge
Please come back I want to see Shirou destroy the clocktower
12/22/2021 c21 Rodenmar
This story has an uncanny ability to have parts that I find annoying for no clear reason that I would stop reading it for a while but eventually comes back to read the rest of the story. Rinse and repeat. So far, you haven't particularly done anything interesting with Shirou aside from struggling to win fights with difficult opponents. You keep giving him new abilities but he didn't actually do anything memorable with them. For someone like Shirou, this iteration has a surprisingly pedestrian way of thinking.

The one major issue with using an established beloved character like Shirou Emiya as a crossover character is that you cannot stray too far from how people expected him to act without a good reason. At times, I caught glimpse of Shirou Emiya whenever you're not focusing on him as a campione. You keep stressing that he is different than other campione, but is he really? All he's been doing with his authorities so far is amassing power and wealth. That is something Rin and Illya would do, not him. He has all this power at his finger tips and yet he hasn't help anyone with it. At this point, he's like a red-headed Godou. Why is he bothering with school?

Why is Shirou in this story passive and reactive only?
12/14/2021 c47 Khanh1023
Amazing story my guy! One of the best world building stories I have read.
Ignore the haters this was really well written, stay safe!
12/14/2021 c47 Zero Vader Sparda Alucard
Ok been gone for awhile but glad to see you back at it again with this chapter.

First let's just get this out of the way. If you haven't already; ignore the childish bitching in the reviews. Whether you go for a more skill based battle or who has the bigger explosion based one it's your damn story (that you're writing for FREE no less) so write it how you damn well please. If others don't like it and want to be rude assholes about it they can leave anytime.

Ok mini rant over. Onto the review.

First shout out to best steed Snow. His sacrifice is never in vain.

Next the fight between Odysseus and Shirou was great.

Odysseus had a plan and back up plans and he had been executing them well. Unfortunately for him he wasn't able to account for how resourceful Shirou could be when backed into a corner nor all his preparations made since coming to campioneverse. Circe meddling and betraying him didn't help. In the end Odysseus in his obsession to be free failed to remember that no plan survives contact with the enemy.

As for Shirou he now sees how heavily he relied on UBW to carry him. Fighting as just a campione is exhausting on a good day. This was a prime example of NOT a good day. No back up, his other authorities either used up or sealed, and the pain inflicted onto him by ahriman (both physical-from having his circuits poisoned and mental-from illya being captured) not to mention Venus and her brand of bs still lingering around to stink up the place. But in the end he survived the night and can now start making countermeasures and recover. Maybe start carrying around fragments of worthy steel like he does his underworld bag.

Next Shirou's new authority. I'm mentally crying at all the authorities Shirou threw away. They all sound awesome especially that ship he almost accepted! I get why tho since his first priority is Sakura. Can't really protect her if he's not even in the same world as her. So Homeward Bound makes sense as the new authority. It even keeps with his war motif seeing as heroes, soldiers etc want to return home eventually after a campaign.

All that's left is the aftermath. Can't wait for that to happen. Nasuverse return seems right around the corner. It looks like we're in the endgame now. That's gonna be some entertaining drama to watch unfold.

Also I have to remind myself that Mordred and Athena are still a thing. Wonder what role they'll play in all this.

Keep up the good work and stay safe.
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