8/4/2017 c1 2willam and jack and jake
uh oh and can't wait to read more

3/26/2013 c1 Frost2130674
Great so story idea hopefully naruto and sakura get to together and that sakura can use all of nel's powers and change back when using nel's relase form. Hope Naruto gets Zangetsu.

3/15/2013 c1 73Dis Lexic
More of this please

1/18/2013 c1 2Lucas H. Garrett
Very good beginning. The intro was astonishing, as well, vividly put. I did notice one slight problem. I don't know whether it's because Sakura is having an internal conversation with Nellel in the beginning, but I didn't see any words to indicate that. The italicizing used for the conversation between Nellel and Sakura, was unnecessary.

The dialogue was excellent, however. The conversing between the characters felt real and alive. Not something forced or weird. The plot was excellently broken down, and I felt as if though I was reading a real back with some slight complications, but that's solely, because the story needs some minor grammatical corrections.

I loved how you described Sakura and Nellel, throughout the story. From the part of them meeting each other, to the point where they see one another in Sakura's head, and then back to the real world. I admit, at first I was a little overthrown on the part where the battle engagement went by quickly, but then when it finished, I realized that maybe it was to show Sakura's new development and power.

Overall, only a scale of one-to-ten, this story, in conjunction with the theme, plot, setting and characters display, I'll give it a nine out of ten. A point knocked off from some grammatical mistakes, and a few parts that were repetitive. I don't even know what Naruto is, but I feel as if I already know how some of the characters are in the show (assuming no OCness was used) without watching it.

Very good story, although I'm wondering why you haven't continued it? Unless... it isn't supposed to be continued. I, only, assumed because of the, "to be continued," end of the story. You have great skills in realistic dialogue, vivid imaging, and great character portrayal. Hope you're are motivated to continue this story some day.

10/7/2012 c1 nekozr
these are just ideas and i hope you read this review

Coyote Stark nara shikamaru- although stark is he most powerful Espada and the is also the most lazy. i think he gotten so strong is because Hueco Mundo is a hard place to live in. it's basically kill or be killed. and shikamaru is like super smart if he put the effort to it, like stark did to survive he could so strong but he's to lazy and has no reason to get get stronger. and even if they are both lazy and rather sleep all day they would both fight for they'er friends. i think shika should meet stark is when Konohagakure is attack. when he is holding back the sound and sand nins for sakura and naruto as they chase after sasuke, he got stark to help defeat the enemy ninja so he could live. so he should be the second to get a sword.

Grimmjow Jeagerjaques not sasuke, Grimmjow is to wild and reckless for him. he could go to kiba but his a cat so i don't think so or he could go to gaara make him go to gaara. don't know why but i think he would be great for gaara. he could meet Grimmjow after his fight with naruto.

Ichigo Kurosaki uzumaki naruto-they would do anything for they're love ones. and they are both the main hero. nel like ichigo. they could meet when naruto first meet itachi and kisame, to protect sasuke from itachi.

Rangiku Matsumoto senju tsunade-they both hate paperwork and rather have other people do it,they both love to drink a LOT, they both lost the man they love, they both have big boobies, they would anything to protect the one the love. tsunade meet Rangiku when she turns downs Orochimaru offer and take the role of the 5th hokage and fights him.

Kyouraku Shunsui Jiraiya-they both pervert. don't know when they could meet,i leave that to you.

sakura wears to much pink i mean her hair is pink, her clothes are pink, and her attack are pink. that is to much pink not that i have anything against the color but that to much. so please make her clothes white. also ino should get jealous new look. and sakura should pass the chunin exam with shikamaru.

i think sasuke should still go to Orochimaru. he is the whole reason for naruto to train so hard. he get jealous of anyone stronger the also is hungry for more power.

10/6/2012 c1 Guest
I love it & I hope you're going to use Ichigo's for naruto or maybe Grimmjow's ether one would work but make Grimmjow nicer.

10/6/2012 c1 3RHatch89
intriguing... i wonder who the others are, and will Sakura be able to use Nel's resureccion, Gamuza