11/4/2014 c1 56ForeverDreamer12
*sniffs* That was absolutely beautiful... I could really feel the emotion...

My only critique is that when different people are talking, seperate it into different paragraphs. For example:

"Lucy," Natsu said. "Yes?" she replies.

Is harder to read then:

"Lucy," Natsu said.

"Yes?" she replies.

Not only is it easier to distinguish who's talking, it's easier to read :)

Ever :D

7/13/2013 c1 14Pikaskye
aw cute. *had died of fluffiness* i like the lyrics of the song it fit VERY well with the story. 3

10/16/2012 c1 4NalUlove4ever
cute!