for Cold Fire Kiss9/28/2017 c2 angelmvidales
I'm so excited please continue it with the story I'm in LOVE with it and on the edge of my seat in it
I'm so excited please continue it with the story I'm in LOVE with it and on the edge of my seat in it
11/23/2012 c2 Lyre
Woay, what a cute beginning. :) I cannot wait to read more, though I mus say, the characters get too fast to their point in my opinion. It would be better if you'd describe the facial expressions and so on a little more, but love it anyways
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Woay, what a cute beginning. :) I cannot wait to read more, though I mus say, the characters get too fast to their point in my opinion. It would be better if you'd describe the facial expressions and so on a little more, but love it anyways
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10/28/2012 c2 Elizabeth
Good start! I think just a dash more details would help it more though, seemed a little rushed towards the end.. But other than that I thought it was nicely done and that the story is very interesting.
I can't wait for more!
:)
Good start! I think just a dash more details would help it more though, seemed a little rushed towards the end.. But other than that I thought it was nicely done and that the story is very interesting.
I can't wait for more!
:)
10/24/2012 c2 
7Fullmetal Knight
Hrm. I like the concept. Though I did feel Jon just gave in to willingly to Daenerys. He has more honor than just to give in to the daughter of the Mad King. And a side note being that Jon is not invulnerable to heat, and fire, either. He threw the lamp, which was hot since it was being used, at the Other that was coming at him and Mormont.
But otherwise a great story thus far! :)
7Fullmetal KnightHrm. I like the concept. Though I did feel Jon just gave in to willingly to Daenerys. He has more honor than just to give in to the daughter of the Mad King. And a side note being that Jon is not invulnerable to heat, and fire, either. He threw the lamp, which was hot since it was being used, at the Other that was coming at him and Mormont.
But otherwise a great story thus far! :)