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22Yami Luna Kitsune
FINALLY managed to get to the current ending for this chapter
I must say, I did NOT expect some of the things you put, though they were rather enjoyable, for the most part
hope you add the next chapter, soon
eager for it
22Yami Luna KitsuneFINALLY managed to get to the current ending for this chapter
I must say, I did NOT expect some of the things you put, though they were rather enjoyable, for the most part
hope you add the next chapter, soon
eager for it
12/21/2024 c49 The Dude Himself
I really enjoyed the story. I look forward to future updates and a possible conclusion.
My only complaint has to do with your edgy/dark tones early on in the series. That said, you said it was going to be vengeful/dark so that falls on me, but I just wasn’t a fan of it.
Good job!
8/10
I really enjoyed the story. I look forward to future updates and a possible conclusion.
My only complaint has to do with your edgy/dark tones early on in the series. That said, you said it was going to be vengeful/dark so that falls on me, but I just wasn’t a fan of it.
Good job!
8/10
9/28/2024 c39 TheGoodDoctor13
"That seal blinds him and thus protects him from any genjutsu that require eye contact to affect him" Kotoamatsukami dosent need eye contact to work. As long as the caster is looking in the victims general direction it will work, so Minato being blind shouldn't matter. Also why is Minato able to hit Itachi with Amaterasu through a susanoo, that also isnt possible. And speaking of, why does Minato have Amaterasu, Tsukuyomi, and some supercharged Kamui on Implanted sharingans? And he doesn't go blind without eternal mangekyo or hashirama cells either, wtf?!
"That seal blinds him and thus protects him from any genjutsu that require eye contact to affect him" Kotoamatsukami dosent need eye contact to work. As long as the caster is looking in the victims general direction it will work, so Minato being blind shouldn't matter. Also why is Minato able to hit Itachi with Amaterasu through a susanoo, that also isnt possible. And speaking of, why does Minato have Amaterasu, Tsukuyomi, and some supercharged Kamui on Implanted sharingans? And he doesn't go blind without eternal mangekyo or hashirama cells either, wtf?!
9/27/2024 c32 TheGoodDoctor13
"not to mention the Wave Daimyo still was upset with Kuramamaru and Hinata" this is an error I think. Zabuza and Naruto killed the wave daimyo in the early chapters without anyone alive knowing. They made it so it looked like Gato killed the daimyo so no one should be upset with Naruto or Hinata. The current daimyo wouldn't know of them either
"not to mention the Wave Daimyo still was upset with Kuramamaru and Hinata" this is an error I think. Zabuza and Naruto killed the wave daimyo in the early chapters without anyone alive knowing. They made it so it looked like Gato killed the daimyo so no one should be upset with Naruto or Hinata. The current daimyo wouldn't know of them either
9/27/2024 c24 TheGoodDoctor13
How is Minato able to escape his soul being absorbed/destroyed, after it was already ripped out of him in the first place, using kamui?! Kamui dosent open a portal to mindscapes and stop soul damage, hell he shouldn't even be able to use kamui in the first place as an absorbed soul. You could make a case if they were his eyes so he was bron with them in his soul but they ARENT his. He got implanted sharingans, that shouldn't be possible. It's just extending the story just because
How is Minato able to escape his soul being absorbed/destroyed, after it was already ripped out of him in the first place, using kamui?! Kamui dosent open a portal to mindscapes and stop soul damage, hell he shouldn't even be able to use kamui in the first place as an absorbed soul. You could make a case if they were his eyes so he was bron with them in his soul but they ARENT his. He got implanted sharingans, that shouldn't be possible. It's just extending the story just because
9/27/2024 c20 TheGoodDoctor13
This chapter sets it up so Nejis dad was killed in a ploy setup by the hokage so he wouldn't endanger minatos plans, using a ninja they had outside Konoha for they're plan. But it backfired and he got killed and so the whole kumo thing starts, but it's entirely setup by Konoha and kumo apparently had no real involvement and didn't send that ninja there. This whole reveal dosent ass up because when Naruto and Hinata invaded Kumo, Yugito Nii specifically confirmed the Raikage sent that guy there to kidnap Hinata after she saw her. Now it's revealed that never happened and it was all Konoha, despite Yugito and the Raikage saying they did it? Dosent add up
This chapter sets it up so Nejis dad was killed in a ploy setup by the hokage so he wouldn't endanger minatos plans, using a ninja they had outside Konoha for they're plan. But it backfired and he got killed and so the whole kumo thing starts, but it's entirely setup by Konoha and kumo apparently had no real involvement and didn't send that ninja there. This whole reveal dosent ass up because when Naruto and Hinata invaded Kumo, Yugito Nii specifically confirmed the Raikage sent that guy there to kidnap Hinata after she saw her. Now it's revealed that never happened and it was all Konoha, despite Yugito and the Raikage saying they did it? Dosent add up
9/27/2024 c18 TheGoodDoctor13
How is Orochimaru able to escape Kushina's chains using Jutsu? Her gold chains could hold kyuubi down and now she has even stronger red chains. These red chains suppress ALL chakra, bijuu and normal, as stated in their explanation. Tsunade, Jiraiya, Yugito, raikage, hiruzen, and everyone else caught so far couldn't escape the chains at all. But once she gets orochimaru and intends to kill him, he uses a substitution and snake jutsu to escape even though he shouldn't be able to use any chakra at all and stronger people couldn't do anything to escape from them. Massive plot hole
How is Orochimaru able to escape Kushina's chains using Jutsu? Her gold chains could hold kyuubi down and now she has even stronger red chains. These red chains suppress ALL chakra, bijuu and normal, as stated in their explanation. Tsunade, Jiraiya, Yugito, raikage, hiruzen, and everyone else caught so far couldn't escape the chains at all. But once she gets orochimaru and intends to kill him, he uses a substitution and snake jutsu to escape even though he shouldn't be able to use any chakra at all and stronger people couldn't do anything to escape from them. Massive plot hole
9/27/2024 c17 TheGoodDoctor13
Why didn't they kill Hiruzen? They just killed Jiraiya not long ago and then trapped Hiruzen but didn't do anything besides let him know for sure they're alive and planning against him. Really missed a big opportunity there for no gain
Why didn't they kill Hiruzen? They just killed Jiraiya not long ago and then trapped Hiruzen but didn't do anything besides let him know for sure they're alive and planning against him. Really missed a big opportunity there for no gain
9/27/2024 c10 TheGoodDoctor13
"The guy killed Uchiha Madara, someone even the Shodai Hokage couldn't do" this really isn't worth mentioning. Obito said before that Madara was old, crippled, and only alive because of the gedo statue tubes. I don't see why Obito is trying to hype Minato up using that when a civilian child probably could've killed Madara at that point
"The guy killed Uchiha Madara, someone even the Shodai Hokage couldn't do" this really isn't worth mentioning. Obito said before that Madara was old, crippled, and only alive because of the gedo statue tubes. I don't see why Obito is trying to hype Minato up using that when a civilian child probably could've killed Madara at that point
7/31/2024 c48 Might Guy 8G MG8
Está historia la sigo hace como 3 años, y espero con ganas cada capítulo del mismo. Lo supiste llevar con el pasar del tiempo absolutamente todo los capítulos, además de ser bastante entretenido. Por suerte que me recomendaron este fanfic
Está historia la sigo hace como 3 años, y espero con ganas cada capítulo del mismo. Lo supiste llevar con el pasar del tiempo absolutamente todo los capítulos, además de ser bastante entretenido. Por suerte que me recomendaron este fanfic
6/26/2024 c49 bastidaswilliam2005
Thanks for the chapter i read from the first again to remember better the plot
Thanks for the chapter i read from the first again to remember better the plot
6/10/2024 c20 1TiredofDownloadingRoms
The ending of chapter 20 had me gaping like a fish out of the water lol
1TiredofDownloadingRomsThe ending of chapter 20 had me gaping like a fish out of the water lol
5/28/2024 c49 7SilentSinger948
So happy to finally see this story update! It's been years since the last chapter.
Looks like Kuramamaru is going to try becoming friends with his allies and not be so single minded in taking down Namikaze.
Sad to see Roshi go. At least he hindered Namikaze's plans.
Namikaze is losing his sanity more and more. I love it!
7SilentSinger948So happy to finally see this story update! It's been years since the last chapter.
Looks like Kuramamaru is going to try becoming friends with his allies and not be so single minded in taking down Namikaze.
Sad to see Roshi go. At least he hindered Namikaze's plans.
Namikaze is losing his sanity more and more. I love it!