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4/13/2014 c1 6EmeraldStorm7
Sounds like an interesting character you created, good job!
11/28/2013 c1 mums the word
really enjoyed your story, keep going, I like your character... Love forward to reading more :)
2/10/2013 c1 BeckyBoo12221
Hey, I said I'd get round to it and I have, it was good, you need to work on your grammar and punctuation, but other than that it was great for a one-shot, I'm now going to move on to you other stories, bye,
-Becky
1/31/2013 c1 7kie1993
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12/27/2012 c1 Guest
You need to work on your punuation
12/26/2012 c1 6Yosie Skywalker
I really like this story alot! Now I am going to read the NewMoon pne. You are such an excellent writer! :-)
11/27/2012 c1 7Fire and Ash
It's good, but you could put proper spaces between the sentences and go over it to correct the punctuation because at a few points in the chapter you've put - J"acob did you do this" - you should put the speech marks before the J :)

and there are some errors, that i could help you with if you'd like?

I hope you don't think that i'm insulting your story, but i have a huge thing about spelling mistakes and grammar! :)

sorry!
11/23/2012 c1 301Luigifan
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11/4/2012 c1 5CoolCat15
I'm not really a big fan of Twilight, but that was good! Are you going to write more?
11/4/2012 c1 StarryNightxox
This is great! You should write it with more chapters, can't wait until new moon :)
11/4/2012 c1 guest Jacob fan
Not bad looking forward until the new moon
Could you write more or Is it a one shot
10/31/2012 c1 team jacob
Not bad shame one shot see you hate bella so jacob won't be pining after her focosing on jamie sweet looking forwar to new moon
10/30/2012 c1 4dream lighting
not bad needs a bit of work wonder how new moon will play out
dreamer

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