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2/13/2013 c1 24Walker of Nothing
That what was funny lol
1/1/2013 c1 11roobaby2011
Cute!
11/1/2012 c1 118Taliax
This isn't bad for a first story, but there are a few places like the kiss that are a little cliché. TerQua fics in general are full of them, and they're hard to avoid... Maybe try out plot twists for some extra originality? I'd also suggest putting in more dialogue or detail to transition between the main plot points so they don't seem so sudden. I really liked Ven's appearance and the bit about him not bystanding enough (that was cute and non-cliché). :P You defininitely have potential; keep writing! C:
10/30/2012 c1 20pikachu203
Aw... That was so sweet! Thank you so much! :)

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