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31Rachel Noelle
Sounds like this is going to be longer than two chapters, then. Awesome. I think you have a cute story developing. I hope you continue soon! It would appear that there's probably a cutesy scene coming up at Orihime's apartment, with lots of cuddles and making out. Hahaha, I'm excited. :)
-Rachel Noelle
31Rachel NoelleSounds like this is going to be longer than two chapters, then. Awesome. I think you have a cute story developing. I hope you continue soon! It would appear that there's probably a cutesy scene coming up at Orihime's apartment, with lots of cuddles and making out. Hahaha, I'm excited. :)
-Rachel Noelle
6/4/2014 c1 Rachel Noelle
You know, I honestly have never considered this pairing. It's cute, and I like it, though. I noticed you had your note about the lyrics in the story; I would suggest making them a note, instead. It will help keep your story consistent. It took me a few seconds to realize there was more to the chapter.
It's cute so far! I think you captured a lot of Orihime's feelings well. (I've been in her shoes several times, and it's not easy.) I did notice a few spots here and there where a sentence kind of felt like it could have been constructed better, but overall it's good. If you don't already, having a beta just to read over things and give you feedback might be a good idea. Not that I'm trying to say anyone here expects perfection, just that it can definitely help you grow as a writer.
Keep writing! I look forward to seeing more of your work!
-Rachel Noelle
You know, I honestly have never considered this pairing. It's cute, and I like it, though. I noticed you had your note about the lyrics in the story; I would suggest making them a note, instead. It will help keep your story consistent. It took me a few seconds to realize there was more to the chapter.
It's cute so far! I think you captured a lot of Orihime's feelings well. (I've been in her shoes several times, and it's not easy.) I did notice a few spots here and there where a sentence kind of felt like it could have been constructed better, but overall it's good. If you don't already, having a beta just to read over things and give you feedback might be a good idea. Not that I'm trying to say anyone here expects perfection, just that it can definitely help you grow as a writer.
Keep writing! I look forward to seeing more of your work!
-Rachel Noelle
4/2/2013 c1 81Tia-Chan18
I recognized the song right away! I love this song. And I feel it suits Orihime quite well! Her character matches! I love this story! And I like this pairing! Good job :D
81Tia-Chan18I recognized the song right away! I love this song. And I feel it suits Orihime quite well! Her character matches! I love this story! And I like this pairing! Good job :D
11/24/2012 c1 12Bakugods
Yeah, win Renji's heart! :) Haha. Well, flames mean negative comments. Ignore them. They don't matter. Cute oneshot. Though, I felt it straight to the heart. And it was deep. Deeeeeeeeeeep, I tell you.
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12BakugodsYeah, win Renji's heart! :) Haha. Well, flames mean negative comments. Ignore them. They don't matter. Cute oneshot. Though, I felt it straight to the heart. And it was deep. Deeeeeeeeeeep, I tell you.
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11/21/2012 c1 Guest
Uh nice pairing never been seen them as a
Uh nice pairing never been seen them as a
11/20/2012 c1 A reviewer
Wow, I love your story :) You talked about Orihime's feelings, thoughts and such and it was good! :DDD The thing is you just have to fill in something in between the hug part and the part when Orihime wanted to have Renji as her boyfriend. Actually, even if you don't do that it's fine too! :DDD Your story's pretty good! I love it! :D:D:D!
(Sorry about the negative part)
Wow, I love your story :) You talked about Orihime's feelings, thoughts and such and it was good! :DDD The thing is you just have to fill in something in between the hug part and the part when Orihime wanted to have Renji as her boyfriend. Actually, even if you don't do that it's fine too! :DDD Your story's pretty good! I love it! :D:D:D!
(Sorry about the negative part)
11/19/2012 c1 8xSeireiHime
awesome! DAMN YOU ICHIGO AND RUKIA! I like renhime and ichihime and renruki XD
8xSeireiHimeawesome! DAMN YOU ICHIGO AND RUKIA! I like renhime and ichihime and renruki XD
11/19/2012 c1 Michiko Burel
Stupid ichigo and rukia being teenagers... pfft emotions... go renji and orihime... cheera
Stupid ichigo and rukia being teenagers... pfft emotions... go renji and orihime... cheera