for Shinobi's Creed2/16/2022 c50 Guest
Great chapter! Keep it up!
Great chapter! Keep it up!
2/15/2022 c50 
6ethanthedragon
Awesome chapter! Can't wait to see what happens next. Fuu is now in Konoha! That's surely gonna shake things up a bit. The other villages are not gonna like that Konoha now has three jinchuuriki and will probably do something really stupid... can't wait to see that.
Glad to see Neji apologize to Hinata for being such douch-bag and finally got that 'fate' stick out of his ass LOL.
Naruto has a long road of recovery ahead before he can truly forgive Jiraiya and I'm glad you're really giving him time to heal instead of just forgiving the man like nothing happened. Our ramen loving boy deserves all the love in the world!
Once more, glad you're back and hope you and your family are feeling better, and can't wait for the next chapter!
6ethanthedragonAwesome chapter! Can't wait to see what happens next. Fuu is now in Konoha! That's surely gonna shake things up a bit. The other villages are not gonna like that Konoha now has three jinchuuriki and will probably do something really stupid... can't wait to see that.
Glad to see Neji apologize to Hinata for being such douch-bag and finally got that 'fate' stick out of his ass LOL.
Naruto has a long road of recovery ahead before he can truly forgive Jiraiya and I'm glad you're really giving him time to heal instead of just forgiving the man like nothing happened. Our ramen loving boy deserves all the love in the world!
Once more, glad you're back and hope you and your family are feeling better, and can't wait for the next chapter!
2/15/2022 c50 101VFSNAKE
Awesome! Naruto is healing and Jiraiya is coming to terms with his negligence. He still deserves a kick to the nuts via Naruto's foot. But that's me. And Tsunade becoming Hokage? Kami help us. LOL!
101VFSNAKEAwesome! Naruto is healing and Jiraiya is coming to terms with his negligence. He still deserves a kick to the nuts via Naruto's foot. But that's me. And Tsunade becoming Hokage? Kami help us. LOL!
2/15/2022 c50 4Haxorus knight
I hope that your sister gets better and good luck with the next chapter!
4Haxorus knightI hope that your sister gets better and good luck with the next chapter!
2/15/2022 c50 5Gamelover41592
Epic work on this chapter, Mejia trying to make things right with Hinata, Sauske on the border of what he should do and amazing fight scene welcome back
5Gamelover41592Epic work on this chapter, Mejia trying to make things right with Hinata, Sauske on the border of what he should do and amazing fight scene welcome back
2/15/2022 c6 Guest
Idk if naruto will end up in team with her and shino but if its the case the story will be awesome
Idk if naruto will end up in team with her and shino but if its the case the story will be awesome
2/14/2022 c8 Guest
Should've said: Hope you're not writing a "fix-it"-story (as in the writer fixes everything and all goes well, all the time except for throwing a few punches, for the protagonist) and I'm glad to see that you stopped (or at least reduced) those incessant, overly detailed classroom-descriptions (as in how it's learnt in school, for written reports). They end-up irrelevant or, worse, over-shadow the story-telling.
When describing keep in mind: whose pov, what do they notice, why and what it says about them! Readers can and should be patient, it's more interesting if we can gather the info and aren't given it all in a block-paragraph. Authors can help by reiterating and repeating things they want to draw attention to. (True or false and confirmation is up to you ;)
Should've said: Hope you're not writing a "fix-it"-story (as in the writer fixes everything and all goes well, all the time except for throwing a few punches, for the protagonist) and I'm glad to see that you stopped (or at least reduced) those incessant, overly detailed classroom-descriptions (as in how it's learnt in school, for written reports). They end-up irrelevant or, worse, over-shadow the story-telling.
When describing keep in mind: whose pov, what do they notice, why and what it says about them! Readers can and should be patient, it's more interesting if we can gather the info and aren't given it all in a block-paragraph. Authors can help by reiterating and repeating things they want to draw attention to. (True or false and confirmation is up to you ;)
2/14/2022 c7 Guest
Well this is quite the disappointment.
An assassin is not a guard, they are (civilian) servants. A hidden danger, like a sheathed spring-blade, to be underestimated or even overlooked. I expected protest, at the very least.
Where is the low-key sabotage against Naruto?
I'm seeing an unfortunate trend here that'll likely end in boring, self-jerk wish-fulfillment. Hope I'm wrong...
Well this is quite the disappointment.
An assassin is not a guard, they are (civilian) servants. A hidden danger, like a sheathed spring-blade, to be underestimated or even overlooked. I expected protest, at the very least.
Where is the low-key sabotage against Naruto?
I'm seeing an unfortunate trend here that'll likely end in boring, self-jerk wish-fulfillment. Hope I'm wrong...
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