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9/22/2013 c2 19im.just.better.fictionally
Just a quick question where I get to the part where I tell you how exception you are blah blah blah... ;) Can you write shit stuff or does everything you write sound amazing and perfect? Because as of so far I am yet to read anything shit... just wondering.

OTHERWISE THIS WAS ALL SPECTACULAR! Seriously I love the Wizard of Oz tie in and I loved the anti-Brian comments which I also constantly express. I especially loved when Brian was all ‘don't be a baby’ and Will was all ‘back the fuck off buddy.’ I was in my robed reading to going ‘go Will, it's ya birthday, it's ya birthday.’

But yes, excellent, excellent story and you should write many more.

Shan x

P.S by many more I mean just quit school and your job and rededicate your life to writing for me :b
11/25/2012 c2 LoveMeryl
Love this! Ugh Brian is so annoying ;-) I love how Jim is trying to calm Will down. The ending is really beautiful.

Oh en je Nederlands is heel goed hoor! :-)
11/23/2012 c2 37iworkwithpens
Amazing...so loved the backstory about Mac's family. And the Tin Man comments at the end...perfect! Yes Will, you still want a heart too.
11/22/2012 c2 14lilacmermaid33
The whole Tin Man thing is so freaking perfect for Will! Those last three lines of this are absolutely golden.

And you KNOW that you've created something you need to revisit in this ... maybe Mac telling Will about the crash for the first time? Or thanking him for not telling Brian?

(I told you I was greedy).
11/22/2012 c1 lilacmermaid33
Love it! (I'm just greedy, so I wish it was longer ;)

It sounds silly to say this, but I didn't really think about the fact that Brian would probably be in a fic with a prompt like this, and certainly not partly from his POV, but I love how it worked out ... I like that he's not completely evil, but Will, Mac AND Charlie all still got to get jibes in!

I really enjoy the way the Will/Mac dialogue plays off each other here, this line especially:

[Don't try and subdue me with musicals, just shut up and let me take care of you.]

And I LOVE LOVE LOVE the whole part with Will starting to talk about Mac's fear, and her making him stop. And Mac only staying awake for him.

This was definitely worth the wait!
11/22/2012 c2 9Jassic M
DAMNIT BRIAN SOMEONE IS INJURED HERE.

Nicely done, the control Will had - when someone wrongs Mac, he acts right away as if his life depended on it. :)

Lovely fic. As always. :)
11/22/2012 c2 1millie.zhang
WOW WOW WOW after two days of silence I know you will come and spoil us with new stories...

I absolutely love this fic!

Yeah, first of all, the description of Brian...a real asshole indeed...so in character...

But I'll never get tired of Will and Brian "fighting" with Will winning each time...hia hia hia hia hia...

Poor Mac...either attacked (in "what it takes to say I love u") or got terribly sick (in "In sickness and in health" and "between the raindrops") or got PTSD (in the reverse spooning story)...in our very nice fictions. But it is situations like this that bring out the caring side of Will and makes him realize how much he really loves her...so awesome job!

I love Jim in this fic, considerate and level-headed at the same time...I also like Neal's quick response coz he was the first one who called the ambulance

I was amazed by Mackenzie's ability to immediately start arguing with Will after she got consciousness

I melted at the line "can you come?". Of course Will will never say no...I think he will be there anyway even if she didn't ask.

I also love the context you set, about what happened to her childhood -it is sort of tragic, but it builds up Mackenzie's character and explains her distaste for hospitals.

And I really love the line "He was thinking about how that tiny, frightened little girl was now the woman before him: strong, passionate, loyal, loving and so full of life and imagination…and really, he doesn't understand how he could ever have allowed himself to suppress that part of her."

I really haven't seen Wizard of Oz, will check it out later. But I love that quote.

By the way, is your incomprehensible line at the beginning DUTCH? *smile*
11/22/2012 c2 30teanc09
Great job! I like how you explained her being frightened and relating it back to her trauma as a child.
11/22/2012 c1 9Katycat1970
Oh - do you know what I love about this story more than anything - even more than Will being a total cutie throughout the whole thing ? do you know what I LOVE?
I LOVE not only Will telling pathetic Brian to get lost... Charlie telling the same and then Mac telling him to get lost - infront of Will... HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA!

Have I ever told you I can't stand Brian? Have I mentioned it?! I'm not sure I have... All that was missing was a punch to the face by Will! But I suppose he may have got there if Mac hadn't stopped him...

Also like Charlie telling them both that neither had a claim yet... Glad Will realised that was aimed at him too!

Matey - LOVE IT! And anything around the Wizard of Oz and the Tin Man is just fine by me... I shall be singing it all night now...

"I'd be tender, I'd be gentle, and awful sentimental -regarding love and art...
I'd be friends with the sparrows, And the boy that shoots the arrows... If I only had a heart"... AWWWW...

Anyway, I digress... back to the story... I love how that it's only Will & Jim that know about her hate for hospitals and love how cute Will was about going with her...

Also love Will taking over the food situation (you eat when I eat - like it)! and how he calls her 'Kenz' in our stories when he's lovey dovey with her (would love to see him have a pet name for her on the show)...

Sad at the little bit in chapter 2 about the car crash... :( but as I say - love the tinman bits and pieces... and LOVE the last line...

Absolutely bloody brilliant as always my friend...
Can't wait for more from you - you know that...

(Wish it was 30 stories by the time you are 20)!
xxx

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