for Champion of Champions12/16/2018 c45 The Shining Fury
Haha, love the bit of comedy thrown in there with the reference to HTTYD (second favourite franchise after Pokemon for me), but as you admitted yourself, the quality did go down, but that’s understandable if you say you felt rushed on the chapter. I’d imagine it’d be harder to write for contests too, considering it’s all about visualization, which can be tricky to write. So with that said, looking forward to what you’ve got for future chapters, and, considering that May has all the ribbons required for the Grand Festival, the focus will return to what you’ve been best at, the main plot of the whole story, crazy legendaries.
Haha, love the bit of comedy thrown in there with the reference to HTTYD (second favourite franchise after Pokemon for me), but as you admitted yourself, the quality did go down, but that’s understandable if you say you felt rushed on the chapter. I’d imagine it’d be harder to write for contests too, considering it’s all about visualization, which can be tricky to write. So with that said, looking forward to what you’ve got for future chapters, and, considering that May has all the ribbons required for the Grand Festival, the focus will return to what you’ve been best at, the main plot of the whole story, crazy legendaries.
12/16/2018 c45 Black Lotus15
yea... there was a lot wrong with this in comparison to your other chapters and it was pretty disappointing but I understand not everyone can pop out a master piece everytime and if u ever plan to rewrite the chapter i hope to be the first to read it and if not then I hope the next 1 won't be so rushed
yea... there was a lot wrong with this in comparison to your other chapters and it was pretty disappointing but I understand not everyone can pop out a master piece everytime and if u ever plan to rewrite the chapter i hope to be the first to read it and if not then I hope the next 1 won't be so rushed
11/2/2018 c44 Guest
Any updates? I really love your story
Any updates? I really love your story
9/17/2018 c44 Ironmaidenaddict
I think you should give Drew and Ash one big showdown where Ash reveals himself to Drew as an Aura Guardian of Kanto and uses Lucario and Gardivour to battle against Flygon and Absol then Gardivour has a moment when she gets damaged by a dark type move and she wrecks havok
I think you should give Drew and Ash one big showdown where Ash reveals himself to Drew as an Aura Guardian of Kanto and uses Lucario and Gardivour to battle against Flygon and Absol then Gardivour has a moment when she gets damaged by a dark type move and she wrecks havok
9/3/2018 c6 
2Andrux0821
When you tried the french accent in ch 7 it sounded more German than it did French, however i appreciate the effort.
2Andrux0821When you tried the french accent in ch 7 it sounded more German than it did French, however i appreciate the effort.
8/10/2018 c1 Guest
On Ash's End
"Okay Ash but if either of you want to talk just call me and I'll…." Lucy went quiet after that as Brock appeared alongside her, putting a hand over her mouth. The former Gym Leader was breathing heavily.
"Thanks for that Ash." Brock said, "I've been trying to catch Lucy since I told her something happened between you and May. Sorry, I didn't think she'd react like this when I told her." Lucy muttered something under Brock's hand that sounded suspiciously like 'Double Wedding' to May whilst Ash didn't understand what Lucy had said.
"It's alright Brock, don't worry about it. I know she's only trying to help but me and May need to get through this ourselves." Ash replied, Brock nodded.
"I'll try and keep Lucy from bothering you two again but that's like trying to stop Misty when she's angry." The former Gym Leader chuckled, Ash smiled.
"Thanks Brock, bye."
"Bye Ash."
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On Lucy's End
"Thanks Brock, bye."
"Bye Ash."
After the screen (whatever Lucy is using to talk to Ash) shuts off, Brock, still hand-gagging Lucy, turns to her now having an evil grin on his face. Standing behind her, Brock wraps an arm around Lucy's waist and begins dragging her backwards. "All this talking has put me in a good mood. Let's head back to our room and have "fun" together, sh
On Ash's End
"Okay Ash but if either of you want to talk just call me and I'll…." Lucy went quiet after that as Brock appeared alongside her, putting a hand over her mouth. The former Gym Leader was breathing heavily.
"Thanks for that Ash." Brock said, "I've been trying to catch Lucy since I told her something happened between you and May. Sorry, I didn't think she'd react like this when I told her." Lucy muttered something under Brock's hand that sounded suspiciously like 'Double Wedding' to May whilst Ash didn't understand what Lucy had said.
"It's alright Brock, don't worry about it. I know she's only trying to help but me and May need to get through this ourselves." Ash replied, Brock nodded.
"I'll try and keep Lucy from bothering you two again but that's like trying to stop Misty when she's angry." The former Gym Leader chuckled, Ash smiled.
"Thanks Brock, bye."
"Bye Ash."
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On Lucy's End
"Thanks Brock, bye."
"Bye Ash."
After the screen (whatever Lucy is using to talk to Ash) shuts off, Brock, still hand-gagging Lucy, turns to her now having an evil grin on his face. Standing behind her, Brock wraps an arm around Lucy's waist and begins dragging her backwards. "All this talking has put me in a good mood. Let's head back to our room and have "fun" together, sh
7/18/2018 c14 Guest
I don't get what kind of vocabulary Donni would have that puts a Vermillion City docker's to shame.
I don't get what kind of vocabulary Donni would have that puts a Vermillion City docker's to shame.
7/5/2018 c44 Ironmaidenaddict
I can see Draw doing something rash in the next chapter please don't rush out this story it deserves perfection considering how much effort your putting into it making sure its perfect like any full length story should be. please bring back the Sirens some point I thought they was good fun. I like the OC character Adam and u how u get his back story into it despite him being focus in only being 1 or 2 chapters still doesnt bother me. I'd love to see something where Ash gets Aura Guardian Promotion taken from him for doing something rash then learns from it
I can see Draw doing something rash in the next chapter please don't rush out this story it deserves perfection considering how much effort your putting into it making sure its perfect like any full length story should be. please bring back the Sirens some point I thought they was good fun. I like the OC character Adam and u how u get his back story into it despite him being focus in only being 1 or 2 chapters still doesnt bother me. I'd love to see something where Ash gets Aura Guardian Promotion taken from him for doing something rash then learns from it
6/24/2018 c23 Guest
OC ruins this fic. No need for him and he’s trash anyway
OC ruins this fic. No need for him and he’s trash anyway