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On Ash's End
"Okay Ash but if either of you want to talk just call me and I'll…." Lucy went quiet after that as Brock appeared alongside her, putting a hand over her mouth. The former Gym Leader was breathing heavily.
"Thanks for that Ash." Brock said, "I've been trying to catch Lucy since I told her something happened between you and May. Sorry, I didn't think she'd react like this when I told her." Lucy muttered something under Brock's hand that sounded suspiciously like 'Double Wedding' to May whilst Ash didn't understand what Lucy had said.
"It's alright Brock, don't worry about it. I know she's only trying to help but me and May need to get through this ourselves." Ash replied, Brock nodded.
"I'll try and keep Lucy from bothering you two again but that's like trying to stop Misty when she's angry." The former Gym Leader chuckled, Ash smiled.
"Thanks Brock, bye."
"Bye Ash."
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On Lucy's End
"Thanks Brock, bye."
"Bye Ash."
After the screen (whatever Lucy is using to talk to Ash) shuts off, Brock, still hand-gagging Lucy, turns to her now having an evil grin on his face. Standing behind her, Brock wraps an arm around Lucy's waist and begins dragging her backwards. "All this talking has put me in a good mood. Let's head back to our room and have "fun" together, sh
On Ash's End
"Okay Ash but if either of you want to talk just call me and I'll…." Lucy went quiet after that as Brock appeared alongside her, putting a hand over her mouth. The former Gym Leader was breathing heavily.
"Thanks for that Ash." Brock said, "I've been trying to catch Lucy since I told her something happened between you and May. Sorry, I didn't think she'd react like this when I told her." Lucy muttered something under Brock's hand that sounded suspiciously like 'Double Wedding' to May whilst Ash didn't understand what Lucy had said.
"It's alright Brock, don't worry about it. I know she's only trying to help but me and May need to get through this ourselves." Ash replied, Brock nodded.
"I'll try and keep Lucy from bothering you two again but that's like trying to stop Misty when she's angry." The former Gym Leader chuckled, Ash smiled.
"Thanks Brock, bye."
"Bye Ash."
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On Lucy's End
"Thanks Brock, bye."
"Bye Ash."
After the screen (whatever Lucy is using to talk to Ash) shuts off, Brock, still hand-gagging Lucy, turns to her now having an evil grin on his face. Standing behind her, Brock wraps an arm around Lucy's waist and begins dragging her backwards. "All this talking has put me in a good mood. Let's head back to our room and have "fun" together, sh
7/18/2018 c14 Guest
I don't get what kind of vocabulary Donni would have that puts a Vermillion City docker's to shame.
I don't get what kind of vocabulary Donni would have that puts a Vermillion City docker's to shame.
7/5/2018 c44 Ironmaidenaddict
I can see Draw doing something rash in the next chapter please don't rush out this story it deserves perfection considering how much effort your putting into it making sure its perfect like any full length story should be. please bring back the Sirens some point I thought they was good fun. I like the OC character Adam and u how u get his back story into it despite him being focus in only being 1 or 2 chapters still doesnt bother me. I'd love to see something where Ash gets Aura Guardian Promotion taken from him for doing something rash then learns from it
I can see Draw doing something rash in the next chapter please don't rush out this story it deserves perfection considering how much effort your putting into it making sure its perfect like any full length story should be. please bring back the Sirens some point I thought they was good fun. I like the OC character Adam and u how u get his back story into it despite him being focus in only being 1 or 2 chapters still doesnt bother me. I'd love to see something where Ash gets Aura Guardian Promotion taken from him for doing something rash then learns from it
6/24/2018 c23 Guest
OC ruins this fic. No need for him and he’s trash anyway
OC ruins this fic. No need for him and he’s trash anyway
6/19/2018 c44 Rey1992
A very good chapter bro I like how you correct your mistake and try ti improve your story. Keep it up
A very good chapter bro I like how you correct your mistake and try ti improve your story. Keep it up
6/17/2018 c44 
1Sasuke kuni
i'm glad you're back. if you want ideas i would like to share some regarding grand festival and pokemon league
1Sasuke kunii'm glad you're back. if you want ideas i would like to share some regarding grand festival and pokemon league
6/12/2018 c44 6Yaw6113
Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.
6Yaw6113Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.
6/10/2018 c44 2TheLoneMarauder
I was rereading the last chapters a bit and picked up on just one little anomaly.
You've been slowly turning Adam into sort of a Pseudo-MC. Like, he can do everything - fight, train, date etc. And Ash can't. Shouldn't the main character be more important? You're making it look as if he can't do anything in comparison to Adam.
Anyways, the plot and the writing is excellent and I'm glad to see you up and writing again.
2TheLoneMarauderI was rereading the last chapters a bit and picked up on just one little anomaly.
You've been slowly turning Adam into sort of a Pseudo-MC. Like, he can do everything - fight, train, date etc. And Ash can't. Shouldn't the main character be more important? You're making it look as if he can't do anything in comparison to Adam.
Anyways, the plot and the writing is excellent and I'm glad to see you up and writing again.