for Champion of Champions10/12/2013 c15 WhiteEagle1985
A very solid chapter here. Looking forward to seeing what happens next!
A very solid chapter here. Looking forward to seeing what happens next!
10/5/2013 c14 BFG
enjoyed reading the chapter please continue writing and developing this story as i like many other readers will look forward to the new developments that happen to the characters during the future chapters
enjoyed reading the chapter please continue writing and developing this story as i like many other readers will look forward to the new developments that happen to the characters during the future chapters
10/4/2013 c14 5FngrDthPnch
Just found this story yesterday and I fell in love with it. I love the long chapters and the strong,smart, yet still dense around girls Ash. I have read a few good Pokemon stories. This is easily one of the best. I like how your chapters are long but aren't jammed pack with more detail then needed. Please keep this up I would really like to see you finish this story.
Just found this story yesterday and I fell in love with it. I love the long chapters and the strong,smart, yet still dense around girls Ash. I have read a few good Pokemon stories. This is easily one of the best. I like how your chapters are long but aren't jammed pack with more detail then needed. Please keep this up I would really like to see you finish this story.
10/2/2013 c9 
3Duncan0Idaho
I'd rather you do not add his dad to the fray, if he /until he shows up on the anime it's all OOC's trying to fit that mold.
3Duncan0IdahoI'd rather you do not add his dad to the fray, if he /until he shows up on the anime it's all OOC's trying to fit that mold.
9/21/2013 c14 1Pkmn Trainer Jean
Just finished reading this. Here are my thoughts:
First, it looks like the characters are too simple. Ash is pretty much perfect except when it comes to romtaic things. I get that, but it makes the battles pretty much one-sided and without any suspense. May is pretty much Ash's fangirl and sometimes enters contests. Otherwise she is pretty bland if you ask me. I also find it annoying that nobody mentioned to May to not be afraid of Ash doing dangerous stuff for her because they'd be an official couple because Ash is already ready to do anything for her so it wouldn't change anything. Adam, on the other hand, is a pure state Gary Stu. Comes in, knows every solution, is already a league champion, has the badass past and all of that stuff. The only "flaw" he has is his uncertainty about his future with Cynthia. I also hate the fact that it seems like every of May's pokemon must be in love with every of Ash's pokemon. Honestly, ruining 1 of the only 2 canon couples of the anime was a pretty bad move in my opinion. I also hoped that Pikachu wouldn't love Glaceon back, it would've added more depth, a love story that doesn't look like a pure copy/paste of Ash and May's situation. I know that these details may be sounding like major, the rest of the plot, stlye of writing, battle description and the fact that they're redoing Ash's steps is very interesting and has been why I've continued reading. I hope you see mine as too insulting. I loved the fic and hoping you'll keep up with the good work!
1Pkmn Trainer JeanJust finished reading this. Here are my thoughts:
First, it looks like the characters are too simple. Ash is pretty much perfect except when it comes to romtaic things. I get that, but it makes the battles pretty much one-sided and without any suspense. May is pretty much Ash's fangirl and sometimes enters contests. Otherwise she is pretty bland if you ask me. I also find it annoying that nobody mentioned to May to not be afraid of Ash doing dangerous stuff for her because they'd be an official couple because Ash is already ready to do anything for her so it wouldn't change anything. Adam, on the other hand, is a pure state Gary Stu. Comes in, knows every solution, is already a league champion, has the badass past and all of that stuff. The only "flaw" he has is his uncertainty about his future with Cynthia. I also hate the fact that it seems like every of May's pokemon must be in love with every of Ash's pokemon. Honestly, ruining 1 of the only 2 canon couples of the anime was a pretty bad move in my opinion. I also hoped that Pikachu wouldn't love Glaceon back, it would've added more depth, a love story that doesn't look like a pure copy/paste of Ash and May's situation. I know that these details may be sounding like major, the rest of the plot, stlye of writing, battle description and the fact that they're redoing Ash's steps is very interesting and has been why I've continued reading. I hope you see mine as too insulting. I loved the fic and hoping you'll keep up with the good work!
9/15/2013 c1 Sun
Keep up the great work. I can say now that this it probably the fourth time I've reread this story. Keep it up and I hope to read more of it soon!
Keep up the great work. I can say now that this it probably the fourth time I've reread this story. Keep it up and I hope to read more of it soon!
9/9/2013 c7 Guest
WTF Entai!?
WTF Entai!?
9/10/2013 c13 8KnightOfStoriesFlame
Review for chapter 13
I enjoyed the part where Ash was the same clueless boy he was before and it was really emotional to see the background story of Adam, and the part of where Giselle gives the number but to be rejected was funny almost like Misty's sisters but not as forceful as they were, great chapter
Review for chapter 14(continuation)
I like the nicknames of Pikachu and Glaceon although I think Pikachu's electricity is more then 9 V but I liked the sound of it, the story of the pink butterfree was good and the courtship dance of beutifly for butterfree was unexpectedly so soon and I enjoyed the emotional part and the punishment of Drew I didn't really like the guy, great chapter look forward to the next one.
8KnightOfStoriesFlameReview for chapter 13
I enjoyed the part where Ash was the same clueless boy he was before and it was really emotional to see the background story of Adam, and the part of where Giselle gives the number but to be rejected was funny almost like Misty's sisters but not as forceful as they were, great chapter
Review for chapter 14(continuation)
I like the nicknames of Pikachu and Glaceon although I think Pikachu's electricity is more then 9 V but I liked the sound of it, the story of the pink butterfree was good and the courtship dance of beutifly for butterfree was unexpectedly so soon and I enjoyed the emotional part and the punishment of Drew I didn't really like the guy, great chapter look forward to the next one.
9/8/2013 c14 Guest
Quick question: since Drew's pokemon are bugging May's pokemon, will there ever be a time where we see that?
Quick question: since Drew's pokemon are bugging May's pokemon, will there ever be a time where we see that?
9/6/2013 c14 4Shadowlord1295
best story i have read in a long time (i read almost all the time so it shows how good it is) please update also can u make ash a little less dense god no one can be tht dense like seriouisely
4Shadowlord1295best story i have read in a long time (i read almost all the time so it shows how good it is) please update also can u make ash a little less dense god no one can be tht dense like seriouisely
9/6/2013 c1 18STORYmaker2
Your story Seems very similar to mine. I like the first chapter a lot so far. Looking back I wish I had done mine in Kanto instead of Hoenn but my story is already 40 chapters in so yeah. Looking forward to reading more
18STORYmaker2Your story Seems very similar to mine. I like the first chapter a lot so far. Looking back I wish I had done mine in Kanto instead of Hoenn but my story is already 40 chapters in so yeah. Looking forward to reading more