for Champion of Champions2/12/2013 c4 
20Rose Duchess
This was a great chapter. I liked how you included Mewtwo in this. The Dragonite was a bit unexpected but still a great choice. Also liked the Gyrados in it too. I think that he could catch Larvitar (the one he befriended), an Umbreon, a Leafeon, and for an electric type, either a Jolteon or a Shinx.
For May, she could possibly find that Swablu she took care of. Also an Azurill, a Vulpix, an Espeon, and maybe a Charmander. I loved the fluffy moments with Ash and May and that May got an egg too. Overall, I think that this was a great chapter and I hope May is okay. Please update soon!
20Rose DuchessThis was a great chapter. I liked how you included Mewtwo in this. The Dragonite was a bit unexpected but still a great choice. Also liked the Gyrados in it too. I think that he could catch Larvitar (the one he befriended), an Umbreon, a Leafeon, and for an electric type, either a Jolteon or a Shinx.
For May, she could possibly find that Swablu she took care of. Also an Azurill, a Vulpix, an Espeon, and maybe a Charmander. I loved the fluffy moments with Ash and May and that May got an egg too. Overall, I think that this was a great chapter and I hope May is okay. Please update soon!
2/12/2013 c1 1MMJ.Rich
Wow this chapter was a long one. I enjoyed this very much, but a tip. When a different person is talking, start a new line. I kept getting confused as to who was talking. It will make suuch a better story.
1MMJ.RichWow this chapter was a long one. I enjoyed this very much, but a tip. When a different person is talking, start a new line. I kept getting confused as to who was talking. It will make suuch a better story.
2/9/2013 c3 1DizzyDiana
I really love it so far. I hope to see an update soon on this story. Can't wait for the next new chapters. Please! ASAP!
1DizzyDianaI really love it so far. I hope to see an update soon on this story. Can't wait for the next new chapters. Please! ASAP!
1/26/2013 c3 CharizardRules
Love The Story, Cant find any good ashXmay pairings these days
Ash:Shiny Elekid, Aredactyle, Deino, Black Dratini, Meloetta, Shiny Beldom, Larvitar if ash doesnt already have him,Shiny Bagon,Shiny Axew, Swablu, Flygon-from Jirach Movie, Absol, Meoth-team rocket, pochyena, Aron, Shiny Magicarp, Spiky shiny haired Eevee, Ninetails the psycho one who wanted brock, Shiny Growlith, Crystal Onix, Torchic, Castform, Psyduck, Pansear, Pansage, Panpour, Shiny Geodude, Shiny Crainidos, Darumaka from black/white episode, Rotom, Volcorona, Duskull, Spiritomb, Shiny Golurk, Ash's Primape, Machop rescued, Timburr, Breloom, Keldeo, Rescued Seel, his Lapras, Mudkip, Luvdisc, Basculin, Slowpoke, Chinchou, Wooper, Sharpedo, Boofulaunt, Zorua, Omnanite, Kabuto, Seedot, Chespin, Fennekin- ash discovers it first or rare, Ferroseed, Shiny Scyther, Togepi, Skarmory, Ninjask, Archen, Braviary, Tynamo, Magnimite, Minun, Joltik, Houndour, Solosis, Sneasel, Pawniard, Shieldon, Wormadam, Rhyhorn, Nidoking, Clefairy, Shiny Ditto, Porgon, Vigoroth, Kelceon, Glameow, Lillipup, Anorith.
May:Shiny Zorua, Pikachu's Sister Spiky eared-Nicknamed PikaGirl or what you can come up with, Magby, Darumaka from black/white episode, Manaphy Makes sense, Phoine, Shiny Misdreavus, Snivy, Shiny Charmander, Horsea, Mudkip, Shinx, Marill, Feebas, Clamperl, Luvdisc, Shiny Riolu for ash's Lucario, Froakie, Lapras, Oddish, Ducklett, Spheal, Vulpix, Cottonee, Petil, Tropius, Fennekin, Lileep, Deerling, Togepi, Natu, Swablu, Dratini, Tirtouga, Mandibuzz, Cubchoo, Plusule, Abra, Gallade, Munna, Vinilite, Froslass, Purloin, Mawile, Shiny Gible, Cubone, Phanphy, Nidoqueen, Venipede, Jiglypuff, Happini, Teddiursa, Milktank, Buneary, Kelceon, Audino, Minccino, Combee.
Love The Story, Cant find any good ashXmay pairings these days
Ash:Shiny Elekid, Aredactyle, Deino, Black Dratini, Meloetta, Shiny Beldom, Larvitar if ash doesnt already have him,Shiny Bagon,Shiny Axew, Swablu, Flygon-from Jirach Movie, Absol, Meoth-team rocket, pochyena, Aron, Shiny Magicarp, Spiky shiny haired Eevee, Ninetails the psycho one who wanted brock, Shiny Growlith, Crystal Onix, Torchic, Castform, Psyduck, Pansear, Pansage, Panpour, Shiny Geodude, Shiny Crainidos, Darumaka from black/white episode, Rotom, Volcorona, Duskull, Spiritomb, Shiny Golurk, Ash's Primape, Machop rescued, Timburr, Breloom, Keldeo, Rescued Seel, his Lapras, Mudkip, Luvdisc, Basculin, Slowpoke, Chinchou, Wooper, Sharpedo, Boofulaunt, Zorua, Omnanite, Kabuto, Seedot, Chespin, Fennekin- ash discovers it first or rare, Ferroseed, Shiny Scyther, Togepi, Skarmory, Ninjask, Archen, Braviary, Tynamo, Magnimite, Minun, Joltik, Houndour, Solosis, Sneasel, Pawniard, Shieldon, Wormadam, Rhyhorn, Nidoking, Clefairy, Shiny Ditto, Porgon, Vigoroth, Kelceon, Glameow, Lillipup, Anorith.
May:Shiny Zorua, Pikachu's Sister Spiky eared-Nicknamed PikaGirl or what you can come up with, Magby, Darumaka from black/white episode, Manaphy Makes sense, Phoine, Shiny Misdreavus, Snivy, Shiny Charmander, Horsea, Mudkip, Shinx, Marill, Feebas, Clamperl, Luvdisc, Shiny Riolu for ash's Lucario, Froakie, Lapras, Oddish, Ducklett, Spheal, Vulpix, Cottonee, Petil, Tropius, Fennekin, Lileep, Deerling, Togepi, Natu, Swablu, Dratini, Tirtouga, Mandibuzz, Cubchoo, Plusule, Abra, Gallade, Munna, Vinilite, Froslass, Purloin, Mawile, Shiny Gible, Cubone, Phanphy, Nidoqueen, Venipede, Jiglypuff, Happini, Teddiursa, Milktank, Buneary, Kelceon, Audino, Minccino, Combee.
1/24/2013 c3 Guest
I want ash to catch a electross or electabuzz. How about one of the new generation starter pokemon?
I want ash to catch a electross or electabuzz. How about one of the new generation starter pokemon?
1/22/2013 c3 5lucarioADV
Great story, you honestly have a great piece of work here, please update soon!
5lucarioADVGreat story, you honestly have a great piece of work here, please update soon!
1/7/2013 c3 1andrew4567
great story so far. update soon.
i really think ash should catch an elekid for another electric type.
pokemon i think they should catch
Ash: Bagon, Reunite with his old pokemon, a dratini and a few eevee evolution's.
May: a few eevee evolution's, a milotic, swablu and a female (either charmander or treeko)
1andrew4567great story so far. update soon.
i really think ash should catch an elekid for another electric type.
pokemon i think they should catch
Ash: Bagon, Reunite with his old pokemon, a dratini and a few eevee evolution's.
May: a few eevee evolution's, a milotic, swablu and a female (either charmander or treeko)
1/5/2013 c3 ashds
What can I say other than it was great.
I loved the appeals the battle and every thing in between (Lucy teaching ash had been a bit of a surpise which was good) and I think have an idea as to what pokemon will hatch from that egg
As for your question yes I would like Ash to have another electric type.
What can I say other than it was great.
I loved the appeals the battle and every thing in between (Lucy teaching ash had been a bit of a surpise which was good) and I think have an idea as to what pokemon will hatch from that egg
As for your question yes I would like Ash to have another electric type.
1/4/2013 c3 Guest
I love this chapter! The story about Gardevoir was so sad. I think that Ash should catch another electric type. He should also have larvitar( the one he befriended), a dratini, a leafeon, an umbreon, and a bagon. For May, she could catch a vulpix, a swablu, an espeon, a cinchinno, a charmander, and an azumarill. That is just my thought of it. Please update soon. I love your story.
I love this chapter! The story about Gardevoir was so sad. I think that Ash should catch another electric type. He should also have larvitar( the one he befriended), a dratini, a leafeon, an umbreon, and a bagon. For May, she could catch a vulpix, a swablu, an espeon, a cinchinno, a charmander, and an azumarill. That is just my thought of it. Please update soon. I love your story.
1/4/2013 c3 2razska'spromise
Dont let May catch any legendaries but i think that ask should get mew,latias and baby lugia also ash should get to become a ranger and have some of his old pokemon come back (Lapras, butterfree, charizard,larvitar..) and ash should get a overleffectionat Shiny absol, a dragonite and a heidreigon(Love this pokemon and your story so far but my personal favorite pairings are Ash/Cynthia and Ash/younger Sabrina(His age))
2razska'spromiseDont let May catch any legendaries but i think that ask should get mew,latias and baby lugia also ash should get to become a ranger and have some of his old pokemon come back (Lapras, butterfree, charizard,larvitar..) and ash should get a overleffectionat Shiny absol, a dragonite and a heidreigon(Love this pokemon and your story so far but my personal favorite pairings are Ash/Cynthia and Ash/younger Sabrina(His age))
1/4/2013 c3 B team98
Love dis story! I think Ash should catch Electrike as the electric type, I also think he should catch Deino, Dranti, Cubchoo, Trapinch, Mareep, and an Aron. For May Swablu, Lapras, Horsea, Frillish(Female), Shroomish, and Spheal. Also update soon! I love this story so so so so so much!
Love dis story! I think Ash should catch Electrike as the electric type, I also think he should catch Deino, Dranti, Cubchoo, Trapinch, Mareep, and an Aron. For May Swablu, Lapras, Horsea, Frillish(Female), Shroomish, and Spheal. Also update soon! I love this story so so so so so much!