for Within Temptation12/30/2013 c1 UnorthodoxDreamer
Are you ever going to update this? It seems really interesting. I'd be your beta for it to, if I could, but sadly I'm unqualified to do such a glorious task, by the sites conditions. Sad, I know. Anywho! This is real cool, and I love the idea behind it, you just need to update. Becouse I want I want I want!
Are you ever going to update this? It seems really interesting. I'd be your beta for it to, if I could, but sadly I'm unqualified to do such a glorious task, by the sites conditions. Sad, I know. Anywho! This is real cool, and I love the idea behind it, you just need to update. Becouse I want I want I want!
1/20/2013 c1 dragonlady222
I feel bad for the children. I hope the find Shizuka again. I am so sorry the children were ripped from their parents. I hope you update Rage and Grace soon.
I feel bad for the children. I hope the find Shizuka again. I am so sorry the children were ripped from their parents. I hope you update Rage and Grace soon.
1/19/2013 c1 
9Darkminx
Nice... im interested to see what you are going to do with this. Preferably having Yugi give Atemu a run for his money but that depends on which parts of Yugi's personality you'll play into in this story. And Atemu's... of course. Update soon please :)
9DarkminxNice... im interested to see what you are going to do with this. Preferably having Yugi give Atemu a run for his money but that depends on which parts of Yugi's personality you'll play into in this story. And Atemu's... of course. Update soon please :)
1/16/2013 c1 10Ireadtomuch
ok this first chapter alone has me hooked. This chapter is well written, flows well and the only way I would find something wroung with it would be to nit pick. I enjoyed reading and can;t wait to read more of this wonderful story. I will forward your story to my friends for them to read.
Good luck!
10Ireadtomuchok this first chapter alone has me hooked. This chapter is well written, flows well and the only way I would find something wroung with it would be to nit pick. I enjoyed reading and can;t wait to read more of this wonderful story. I will forward your story to my friends for them to read.
Good luck!
11/26/2012 c1 5Phoenix0192
A brilliant start, I am enthralled! Sorry the reviews so short but it's about 1 am here. Tell you what, if you get another chapter out I'll write you a big constructive one. :)
Keep up the great work
Phoenix
5Phoenix0192A brilliant start, I am enthralled! Sorry the reviews so short but it's about 1 am here. Tell you what, if you get another chapter out I'll write you a big constructive one. :)
Keep up the great work
Phoenix
11/24/2012 c1 Zambino
Nice and exciting setup for the story. I hope it is explained why Egypt thought Arcana was responsible for the Queen's death. The weird upside-down quotations are a little distracting though.
Nice and exciting setup for the story. I hope it is explained why Egypt thought Arcana was responsible for the Queen's death. The weird upside-down quotations are a little distracting though.
11/24/2012 c1 kate
Please put up chapter 2 soon and hurry
Please put up chapter 2 soon and hurry