for Young Justice: Breather3/27/2014 c18 
45Black' Victor Cachat
Great read thank you! Really helped fill in some gaps, some of which were not even apparent at first, in the shows.
I see here you are also not much of a La'gaan fan, though that just makes what you did for in Darkness Falls better (still do not like him either, but he sure gets a lot of hate).
One thing though is that for the story summaries for this and Darkness Falls you might want to mention how they are essentially prequels and sequels, or at least a lot of character development in Breather flows into Darkness Falls. Granted if I had looked closer I would have read this first and avoided a bunch of review questions I asked, but it would still help a bit.
45Black' Victor CachatGreat read thank you! Really helped fill in some gaps, some of which were not even apparent at first, in the shows.
I see here you are also not much of a La'gaan fan, though that just makes what you did for in Darkness Falls better (still do not like him either, but he sure gets a lot of hate).
One thing though is that for the story summaries for this and Darkness Falls you might want to mention how they are essentially prequels and sequels, or at least a lot of character development in Breather flows into Darkness Falls. Granted if I had looked closer I would have read this first and avoided a bunch of review questions I asked, but it would still help a bit.
3/20/2014 c3 Black' Victor Cachat
Really like what you did for this chapter, showing Conner's development into a stealth operative; in the show it was mostly head on or disguised as one of the enemy soldiers, here you see him sneaking around and dealing with threats in a precision manner. Also great work with Gar.
Really like what you did for this chapter, showing Conner's development into a stealth operative; in the show it was mostly head on or disguised as one of the enemy soldiers, here you see him sneaking around and dealing with threats in a precision manner. Also great work with Gar.
9/12/2013 c19 4NollasBlack
Hey, hi, how are you?
So I saw the season 2 finale and I was angry because it was canceled, that I first though "Very well then, in fanfiction must be a sequel for YJ so I will look up for one" and I ran across you, then on your first AN you mention this story that I needed to read it first to understand somethings that were on the sequel of YJ... So here I am
And I love it! Seriously, I really do!
I liked a lot the first official unofficial mission of them! It was so hilarious!
I really like your writing. And well, see you in a couple of chapters in the Darkness Falls
Read you soon
4NollasBlackHey, hi, how are you?
So I saw the season 2 finale and I was angry because it was canceled, that I first though "Very well then, in fanfiction must be a sequel for YJ so I will look up for one" and I ran across you, then on your first AN you mention this story that I needed to read it first to understand somethings that were on the sequel of YJ... So here I am
And I love it! Seriously, I really do!
I liked a lot the first official unofficial mission of them! It was so hilarious!
I really like your writing. And well, see you in a couple of chapters in the Darkness Falls
Read you soon
6/19/2013 c18 2KingHollow666
I seriously loved this story. The Teams "first mission" was priceless and everyone's reaction to wally's death brought tears to my eyes
2KingHollow666I seriously loved this story. The Teams "first mission" was priceless and everyone's reaction to wally's death brought tears to my eyes
5/17/2013 c19 Nini Hearts
I love how well this just seems to fit into everything especially with the series, I'm reading your second story now but I just had to tell you how much I enjoyed this piece of work,too. I think you captured everything and I kinda hate L'Gann,too. He got in the way. But, I'm so made no more seasons are coming up, I wish the didn't cancel it.
I love how well this just seems to fit into everything especially with the series, I'm reading your second story now but I just had to tell you how much I enjoyed this piece of work,too. I think you captured everything and I kinda hate L'Gann,too. He got in the way. But, I'm so made no more seasons are coming up, I wish the didn't cancel it.
4/27/2013 c18 Bluehope13
Ok so I stopped reading to write that last one. And when I resumed I was almost crying again
When dick started to cry I just got so choked up...
And is Artie pregnant? If so add that to your third season that'd be so cool! Please?
Ok so I stopped reading to write that last one. And when I resumed I was almost crying again
When dick started to cry I just got so choked up...
And is Artie pregnant? If so add that to your third season that'd be so cool! Please?
4/27/2013 c18 Bluehope13
PI was listing to the song " i cry" by flo rider
And when dick yelled his name was wally, I was doing all I could not to cry. Beautiful work
PI was listing to the song " i cry" by flo rider
And when dick yelled his name was wally, I was doing all I could not to cry. Beautiful work
4/26/2013 c13 Bluehope13
* it's Barry not berry
Like Barry ( bear-ie)
And berry is ( bur-ie
* it's Barry not berry
Like Barry ( bear-ie)
And berry is ( bur-ie
3/25/2013 c18 DeadSpyder
Just wanted to let you know this probably the best Young Justice fic I have read. The ideas are good and well though out, the dialogue is believable, character mannerisms are spot on (L'gann truly acted like a jerk most times during the season), and you give your readers snippets of what they want but not going overboard (Conner comforting Megan but no true decision to get back together).
Also your attention to detail makes the story come alive. Pointing out was gear characters are wearing every so often, pigeon poop on top of the McDonald's, etc. Also you are very good at writing fight scenes, most just avoid it.
Whether you decide to do a season 3 themed fic or not, I hope you continue to write for this series.
Just wanted to let you know this probably the best Young Justice fic I have read. The ideas are good and well though out, the dialogue is believable, character mannerisms are spot on (L'gann truly acted like a jerk most times during the season), and you give your readers snippets of what they want but not going overboard (Conner comforting Megan but no true decision to get back together).
Also your attention to detail makes the story come alive. Pointing out was gear characters are wearing every so often, pigeon poop on top of the McDonald's, etc. Also you are very good at writing fight scenes, most just avoid it.
Whether you decide to do a season 3 themed fic or not, I hope you continue to write for this series.
3/19/2013 c18 Guest
Okay first off, obviously Artemis is pregnant. Don't have to guess who the dad is, er was. Oh please write your version of season 3. You did good on Young Judtice Downfall during the hiatus so why not go for it for season 3?
Okay first off, obviously Artemis is pregnant. Don't have to guess who the dad is, er was. Oh please write your version of season 3. You did good on Young Judtice Downfall during the hiatus so why not go for it for season 3?
3/20/2013 c18 iliketoread20003
Please! Season 3! Luv the story! Wallly bring him back before I kill CN.
Please! Season 3! Luv the story! Wallly bring him back before I kill CN.
3/19/2013 c18 25Infinite Alpha-Omega 1
Please bring Wally back in a third season please, I don't think Dick would stay alive much longer if you didn't exspecially since they never showed him grieving in the show probably means that off screen he's screaming his head off... MY POOR BABIES!
25Infinite Alpha-Omega 1Please bring Wally back in a third season please, I don't think Dick would stay alive much longer if you didn't exspecially since they never showed him grieving in the show probably means that off screen he's screaming his head off... MY POOR BABIES!