for Dear Diary3/3/2013 c1 
33DarkPriestessOfHyrule
What if I was wandering around and saw the tempting description and read it? And what if I liked this? ...why am I asking you this? I love it! Great job. Reminds me of the Robin Maxwell tarzan thing mr. ral conrath (clayton) will always be a perv! What a wonderful read.
33DarkPriestessOfHyruleWhat if I was wandering around and saw the tempting description and read it? And what if I liked this? ...why am I asking you this? I love it! Great job. Reminds me of the Robin Maxwell tarzan thing mr. ral conrath (clayton) will always be a perv! What a wonderful read.
12/22/2012 c1 52LionshadeSC
well. . .. that escalated quickly xD
it felt like everything was going really, really fast. it felt like i was reading a summary of a story rather than a single chapter.
you could easily, EASILY turn this into a chapter story, and a pretty good one too. you have the base of it, and it could at least be a few chapters long :D
it was good though, even if it moved along a little too quickly. it felt like i didn't get to really understand the emotions and the suspicions of the characters before ZIP- everything was wrapped up and done.
if you ever do want to turn this into a continuing story, pm me and i'll beta it for you if you want :D
52LionshadeSCwell. . .. that escalated quickly xD
it felt like everything was going really, really fast. it felt like i was reading a summary of a story rather than a single chapter.
you could easily, EASILY turn this into a chapter story, and a pretty good one too. you have the base of it, and it could at least be a few chapters long :D
it was good though, even if it moved along a little too quickly. it felt like i didn't get to really understand the emotions and the suspicions of the characters before ZIP- everything was wrapped up and done.
if you ever do want to turn this into a continuing story, pm me and i'll beta it for you if you want :D