for 03 All Creatures Great and Small2/2/2014 c20 LifeIsAGreatAdventure
An interesting chapter. I am often surprised by how unplanned your characters' actions seem to be. Given my own physical challenges I know that I am extraordinarily carefully planned as compared with most people and know from others with significant challenges that I am far from alone in this. Your characters are consistent and continue to develop along paths that are consistent if seemingly hard to credit at times. As always, I thank you for your hard work on this and will look forward to future installments.
An interesting chapter. I am often surprised by how unplanned your characters' actions seem to be. Given my own physical challenges I know that I am extraordinarily carefully planned as compared with most people and know from others with significant challenges that I am far from alone in this. Your characters are consistent and continue to develop along paths that are consistent if seemingly hard to credit at times. As always, I thank you for your hard work on this and will look forward to future installments.
1/25/2014 c19 Athla
Well, holy fliipity flakis! Morinth?
was not expecting that... oh abby, have you caught morinths eye of all people?
Always happy to see another chapter.
Well, holy fliipity flakis! Morinth?
was not expecting that... oh abby, have you caught morinths eye of all people?
Always happy to see another chapter.
1/24/2014 c19 bluemarlin
Outstanding chapter. Morinth surviving and captured by Kenson is not good. Wonder what Hannah will think of the Normandy crew. Please continue.
Outstanding chapter. Morinth surviving and captured by Kenson is not good. Wonder what Hannah will think of the Normandy crew. Please continue.
1/24/2014 c19 
58HK-Revan
Oh my god. Morinth. Samara. Together! Er, well in the same room.
Also I love your OC's. They are too adorable and how you use all the random snippets from the game. Amazing. Please continue.
58HK-RevanOh my god. Morinth. Samara. Together! Er, well in the same room.
Also I love your OC's. They are too adorable and how you use all the random snippets from the game. Amazing. Please continue.
1/23/2014 c19 LifeIsAGreatAdventure
Well, the Morrinth twist was a bit unexpected. I'm curious to see how you'll get Shepherd and Samara out of this mess without destroying the galaxy but suspect one of the key pieces of this action is now on the board in Omega. Looking forward to the next installment and glad you think my comments thought provoking even when they can be not exactly critical but not exactly positive either. Thanks as always for your hard work on this, I hope your travels were fun.
Well, the Morrinth twist was a bit unexpected. I'm curious to see how you'll get Shepherd and Samara out of this mess without destroying the galaxy but suspect one of the key pieces of this action is now on the board in Omega. Looking forward to the next installment and glad you think my comments thought provoking even when they can be not exactly critical but not exactly positive either. Thanks as always for your hard work on this, I hope your travels were fun.
1/23/2014 c19 2ki's
I've loved this story since genesis and with each progressing chapter that love grows more! Especially this last chapter... Samara turning super saiyan for Jane was just... Ahhh no words! Asura and Abby have been two of my most favorites. I'm glad they've started communicating because I was stressed while they were at odds lol! Anyway, just wanted to drop a few lines just to say I love this!
I've loved this story since genesis and with each progressing chapter that love grows more! Especially this last chapter... Samara turning super saiyan for Jane was just... Ahhh no words! Asura and Abby have been two of my most favorites. I'm glad they've started communicating because I was stressed while they were at odds lol! Anyway, just wanted to drop a few lines just to say I love this!
1/23/2014 c19 Dalish Elf
My reviews are short Sorry for that.
Anyway, intense chapter! I thought morinth was dead, apparently not. Also wonder what will happen to Shep.
I always liked Hannah Shepard :)
My reviews are short Sorry for that.
Anyway, intense chapter! I thought morinth was dead, apparently not. Also wonder what will happen to Shep.
I always liked Hannah Shepard :)
1/23/2014 c19 Liahna T'Riah
when morinth came into the story at the end of the chapter i glared at my screen when i realized the chapter ended shortly after...
when morinth came into the story at the end of the chapter i glared at my screen when i realized the chapter ended shortly after...
1/8/2014 c18 murdrax
hmm very interesting storylinhe you got here just finished other 2 and caught up with this. those idiots don't know what they are about to face laughs insanely!
hmm very interesting storylinhe you got here just finished other 2 and caught up with this. those idiots don't know what they are about to face laughs insanely!
1/4/2014 c18 Athla
Oh I like what this chapter I doing. From vet to vorcha doctor maybe? That would certainly be a unique occupation and seem to fit abby well.
"fantasies about a hoard of gratefull varren and vorcha following abby around omega."
...yeah, I'm drunk.
Looking forward to more.
Oh I like what this chapter I doing. From vet to vorcha doctor maybe? That would certainly be a unique occupation and seem to fit abby well.
"fantasies about a hoard of gratefull varren and vorcha following abby around omega."
...yeah, I'm drunk.
Looking forward to more.
1/4/2014 c18 LifeIsAGreatAdventure
Great chapter, definitely adding to the suspense. Looking forward to future installments. Thanks loads for your hard work on this.
Great chapter, definitely adding to the suspense. Looking forward to future installments. Thanks loads for your hard work on this.
12/2/2013 c17 Zim.A.Bu. E.Ter
I enjoyed this chapter!
I look forward to finding out what EDI is up to and how the Commander is going to handle her current predicament.
I really liked being able to see Miranda show so much emotion. It was nice getting an insight into how she feels and cares for Jane. It was a nice touch.
I look forward to the next chapter.
Please post soon!
I enjoyed this chapter!
I look forward to finding out what EDI is up to and how the Commander is going to handle her current predicament.
I really liked being able to see Miranda show so much emotion. It was nice getting an insight into how she feels and cares for Jane. It was a nice touch.
I look forward to the next chapter.
Please post soon!
12/1/2013 c17 bluemarlin
Outstanding chapter. Excellent writing on the Miranda, Garrus and Chakwas scene. Looking forward to more.
Outstanding chapter. Excellent writing on the Miranda, Garrus and Chakwas scene. Looking forward to more.
12/1/2013 c17 jaelin910
two small problems with this chapter; first, the use of the word 'bullets' is inaccurate. mass effect weaponry works by shaving a tiny fragment off a solid block before firing that fragment using mass effect fields and, as I understand it, magnetic propulsion of the same type used in a rail or coil gun (this renders ammo a non-issue in almost all situations) this is true in all the games; mass effect two and three merely implement cooling solutions that are limited in supply. in mass effect one, guns cooled down as one would expect; emitting heat into the surrounding area. during the period shepard spent 'dead' a new method of cooling was implemented; guns required 'thermal clips' which absorbed the heat produced from firing the gun before being ejected. the reason for this is that a higher rate of fire was deemed more important than the ability to shoot endlessly (decent idea but it would have been better if the guns didn't stop working when you ran out of clips)
this is only a minor issue and is easily fixed/ignored
the second problem is the apparent presumption that indoctrinated individuals would be easily identified. as is shown by rana thanoptis (if she is allowed to live through to mass effect three) indoctrination is necessarily noticable even to an expert on the subject (rana was hired specifically to study the effects and yet she never seems to have considered the possibility that she was already compromised.) indoctrination can be applied quickly or slowly, with the slower option being the less damaging; when quickly applied, indoctrination destroys the afflicted mind at an increased speed.
this is a minor issue that could be explained as an in-universe mistake (the characters made the mistake rather than the author)
two small problems with this chapter; first, the use of the word 'bullets' is inaccurate. mass effect weaponry works by shaving a tiny fragment off a solid block before firing that fragment using mass effect fields and, as I understand it, magnetic propulsion of the same type used in a rail or coil gun (this renders ammo a non-issue in almost all situations) this is true in all the games; mass effect two and three merely implement cooling solutions that are limited in supply. in mass effect one, guns cooled down as one would expect; emitting heat into the surrounding area. during the period shepard spent 'dead' a new method of cooling was implemented; guns required 'thermal clips' which absorbed the heat produced from firing the gun before being ejected. the reason for this is that a higher rate of fire was deemed more important than the ability to shoot endlessly (decent idea but it would have been better if the guns didn't stop working when you ran out of clips)
this is only a minor issue and is easily fixed/ignored
the second problem is the apparent presumption that indoctrinated individuals would be easily identified. as is shown by rana thanoptis (if she is allowed to live through to mass effect three) indoctrination is necessarily noticable even to an expert on the subject (rana was hired specifically to study the effects and yet she never seems to have considered the possibility that she was already compromised.) indoctrination can be applied quickly or slowly, with the slower option being the less damaging; when quickly applied, indoctrination destroys the afflicted mind at an increased speed.
this is a minor issue that could be explained as an in-universe mistake (the characters made the mistake rather than the author)