for 03 All Creatures Great and Small9/30/2015 c35 LifeIsAGreatAdventure
I liked how you framed the tendencies of both your Jane Shepard and Hannah to take responsibility for the Badak situation. Hoping to see some interaction wetween Jane and Samara soon and really glad that you're continuing to move forward on this piece. Hoping you're well and to see further installments soon.
I liked how you framed the tendencies of both your Jane Shepard and Hannah to take responsibility for the Badak situation. Hoping to see some interaction wetween Jane and Samara soon and really glad that you're continuing to move forward on this piece. Hoping you're well and to see further installments soon.
9/30/2015 c35 RheasHelm
I'm always looking forward to more Abby&Asura, but even though they were not part of this chapter, it still made for a good read. It felt like a small-stage play, with only 1 location, and 3 people having a discussion - an estranged mother-daughter pair trying to find common ground, with a mutual friend in the middle.
It must be weird having your mother as a nominally superior officer - even if Shepard has more actual authority due to her Spectre status, or would have, if she wasn't injured and in the infirmary - and having to deal with somebody who's generally used to make decisions, and who's also used to deciding things for you, in your best interest of course. So actually, both women were struggling to adjust to the situation. Well done.
I'm always looking forward to more Abby&Asura, but even though they were not part of this chapter, it still made for a good read. It felt like a small-stage play, with only 1 location, and 3 people having a discussion - an estranged mother-daughter pair trying to find common ground, with a mutual friend in the middle.
It must be weird having your mother as a nominally superior officer - even if Shepard has more actual authority due to her Spectre status, or would have, if she wasn't injured and in the infirmary - and having to deal with somebody who's generally used to make decisions, and who's also used to deciding things for you, in your best interest of course. So actually, both women were struggling to adjust to the situation. Well done.
9/27/2015 c35 
58HK-Revan
I love what you've done with this. I hope that Abby can help Shepard out. It's interesting how Abby's knowledge of the game doesn't really impact what's going on and how the story flows. It's very exciting to read. Please keep at it.
58HK-RevanI love what you've done with this. I hope that Abby can help Shepard out. It's interesting how Abby's knowledge of the game doesn't really impact what's going on and how the story flows. It's very exciting to read. Please keep at it.
9/25/2015 c35 2kill3rdarren
ah, great chapter. Wonder how hannah will take Shepard dating a justicar. also, hannah seems very tightly wound and for good reason. I'm curious at this point if Shep will be incarcerated for Bahak or if in this story she does not. Or maybe she is and then Hannah and Samara breaks her out and that's how Hannah finds out she and her daughter are dating? haha. ah well. nice story :)
2kill3rdarrenah, great chapter. Wonder how hannah will take Shepard dating a justicar. also, hannah seems very tightly wound and for good reason. I'm curious at this point if Shep will be incarcerated for Bahak or if in this story she does not. Or maybe she is and then Hannah and Samara breaks her out and that's how Hannah finds out she and her daughter are dating? haha. ah well. nice story :)
9/25/2015 c35 4vampirecheetah
I always look forward to these updates 3 I'm looking forward to whether or not Jane will eventually tell Hannah what Samara is to her. And very relieved our favorite asari will regain consciousness much earlier than anticipated.
4vampirecheetahI always look forward to these updates 3 I'm looking forward to whether or not Jane will eventually tell Hannah what Samara is to her. And very relieved our favorite asari will regain consciousness much earlier than anticipated.
8/11/2015 c34 RheasHelm
Jack sleeping at the foot of the bed of her mistress was too cute. She's obviously relieved to be back on the Normandy, but I wonder if she'll blow up in Shepard's face once they are both up and conscious again. I suspect, however, that once she learns of what Shepard's done, she'll only admire her even more for being so "badass".
Good thing that Miranda never has the time to really dig into her Abby problem. I bet that after seeing Abby predict Shepard's wishes correctly once more, Miranda's need to figure out this unknown factor can hardly be contained anymore.
Wow, Hannah planning to take the fall for Shepard. But with her (newfound) protectiveness towards her daughter, that's not even all that surprising.
Good chapter.
Jack sleeping at the foot of the bed of her mistress was too cute. She's obviously relieved to be back on the Normandy, but I wonder if she'll blow up in Shepard's face once they are both up and conscious again. I suspect, however, that once she learns of what Shepard's done, she'll only admire her even more for being so "badass".
Good thing that Miranda never has the time to really dig into her Abby problem. I bet that after seeing Abby predict Shepard's wishes correctly once more, Miranda's need to figure out this unknown factor can hardly be contained anymore.
Wow, Hannah planning to take the fall for Shepard. But with her (newfound) protectiveness towards her daughter, that's not even all that surprising.
Good chapter.
8/10/2015 c34 Athla
Aaarrrrgggg! Yes it matter who she is! I have been burning with curiosity for YEARS wondering what the hell happened to gabby. Is she real? an experiment? time traveler? Dimension jumper? Starbrats and harbingers lovechild?
I am obbsesivly curious!
Great chapter by the way.
Aaarrrrgggg! Yes it matter who she is! I have been burning with curiosity for YEARS wondering what the hell happened to gabby. Is she real? an experiment? time traveler? Dimension jumper? Starbrats and harbingers lovechild?
I am obbsesivly curious!
Great chapter by the way.
8/10/2015 c34 vampirecheetah
I've been waiting eagerly for this and it was worth it3 I am totally in love with Hannah's plan to take the blame. It's such an interesting diversion from what actually happened. It'll be interesting to see it play out if Jane can't stop her from doing it. And as always, you leave us on edge waiting for any sign of Samara waking up.
I've been waiting eagerly for this and it was worth it3 I am totally in love with Hannah's plan to take the blame. It's such an interesting diversion from what actually happened. It'll be interesting to see it play out if Jane can't stop her from doing it. And as always, you leave us on edge waiting for any sign of Samara waking up.
8/10/2015 c34 LifeIsAGreatAdventure
Interesting twist having Hannah take responsibility for Badak. Also that Jane would choose to (even temporarily) distance herself from Samara. One would think she might ask Morden to make a house call. Still, a well done chapter as always. I look forward to the next installment.
Interesting twist having Hannah take responsibility for Badak. Also that Jane would choose to (even temporarily) distance herself from Samara. One would think she might ask Morden to make a house call. Still, a well done chapter as always. I look forward to the next installment.
6/15/2015 c33 RheasHelm
All right, per your suggestion, I re-read chapters 28 and 29. Can't say that I noticed much of a difference though (even the same mistakes are still there), except maybe the end of chapter 29. In any case, the chapters were good back then, and they are good now. :)
The darkness of Asura's soul? I don't know, and Abby appears to agree with me on that, Asura seems to be a fundamentally decent person, despite her affliction.
As for the newest chapter, that was well done, too. I liked that Abby has finally figured out what Asura really means to her. So all should be peachy now, right? Then why is she still reluctant to meld when she clearly needs it? I guess I keep forgetting that it's a rather painful experience for her.
Shepard waking up and dreaming/fading in and out of consciousness was also a cool.
I have to say though that her reaction to the events in the Bahak system seems a bit severe. I suppose if you do something like that and are not completely dead inside, it'll haunt you. But I'd have expected her to rationalize it away quickly and move on to the tasks at hand. Maybe she needs reassurance of the melding kind. :)
Finally, I was impressed that you also showed how shaken the crew was by Bahak.
"all three of the people present with her were more comfortable with getting orders than receiving them" - that's the same, maybe you wanted to say "giving"?
All right, per your suggestion, I re-read chapters 28 and 29. Can't say that I noticed much of a difference though (even the same mistakes are still there), except maybe the end of chapter 29. In any case, the chapters were good back then, and they are good now. :)
The darkness of Asura's soul? I don't know, and Abby appears to agree with me on that, Asura seems to be a fundamentally decent person, despite her affliction.
As for the newest chapter, that was well done, too. I liked that Abby has finally figured out what Asura really means to her. So all should be peachy now, right? Then why is she still reluctant to meld when she clearly needs it? I guess I keep forgetting that it's a rather painful experience for her.
Shepard waking up and dreaming/fading in and out of consciousness was also a cool.
I have to say though that her reaction to the events in the Bahak system seems a bit severe. I suppose if you do something like that and are not completely dead inside, it'll haunt you. But I'd have expected her to rationalize it away quickly and move on to the tasks at hand. Maybe she needs reassurance of the melding kind. :)
Finally, I was impressed that you also showed how shaken the crew was by Bahak.
"all three of the people present with her were more comfortable with getting orders than receiving them" - that's the same, maybe you wanted to say "giving"?
6/12/2015 c33 Dalish Elf
Ah the feels, it literally bring tears to my eyes, I like the last paragraph the most! Even so, please please please keep Samara alive!
Ah the feels, it literally bring tears to my eyes, I like the last paragraph the most! Even so, please please please keep Samara alive!
6/12/2015 c33 vampirecheetah
This certainly was a reward for a long work week. I don't really think you have anything to apologize for in the pacing of Abby and Asura. I honestly thought you'd chosen to back off of their plot for a few chapters to keep the focus on the extreme elements of Samara and Shepard's escape. Since these chapters are updated with time between, that helped to keep readers on edge until the next one. Glad to see Jack's out of the shower though :p She's probably super pruney by now.
This certainly was a reward for a long work week. I don't really think you have anything to apologize for in the pacing of Abby and Asura. I honestly thought you'd chosen to back off of their plot for a few chapters to keep the focus on the extreme elements of Samara and Shepard's escape. Since these chapters are updated with time between, that helped to keep readers on edge until the next one. Glad to see Jack's out of the shower though :p She's probably super pruney by now.
6/12/2015 c33 LifeIsAGreatAdventure
Wow! Really powerful stuff at the end of this chapter. The scene with Jane and her mum is ... very well done. I also liked the interaction between Abigail and Jack but challenge you (as I often do), to have Abby work through her issues about Asura's support. Those are, as they often do, dragging to some degree. Thanks loads for your hard work on this, looking forward to further installments.
Wow! Really powerful stuff at the end of this chapter. The scene with Jane and her mum is ... very well done. I also liked the interaction between Abigail and Jack but challenge you (as I often do), to have Abby work through her issues about Asura's support. Those are, as they often do, dragging to some degree. Thanks loads for your hard work on this, looking forward to further installments.