9/25/2014 c29 RheasHelm
Careful, Abby, you're encroaching on Shepard's territory! ("Strays, homeless, injured. You weave us into your lives so effortlessly. Do you even understand what you mean to us?")
How cute that Abby suddenly feels like she needs to protect Asura from the evil justicars. I doubt that she really could, but it's sweet to see her develop this feeling.
It was good to see that Jack had accepted Abby's hospitality and that the two of them even managed to joke around a bit. But Abby and Asura will soon need to join again, and I fear what Jack's reaction will be when she realizes what a toll this takes on Abby.
Asura is suddenly supposed to be religious? Even more so than other Asari? Where did that come from?
Abby thoughtfully makes coffee for Asura because she knows that the Asari does not like tea, and then the stupid girl reaches for the tea anyway... aliens!
Asura's chat with Aria was quite strange, even more so than usual. I was reminded of Dune again, with people saying one thing out loud, but everybody knowing that they really meant something else. Neat.

Samara rampaging through the installation in search of Shepard was impressive. For a supposedly clandestine black ops in Batarian space that place seems to have a lot of personnel though. But at least the two of them are free now.

9/24/2014 c29 LifeIsAGreatAdventure
Another great chapter-more by our non-ffn connection but as always a well done job. Thanks for your hard work on it.

9/5/2014 c28 Dalish Elf
The revelation! Im eager to read the next chapter!

9/5/2014 c27 RheasHelm
Well done continuation of Abigail and Asura’s story, without the distraction of the Liara – Shepard conflict this time.
Although sometimes you confuse me – first you make it sound like they are not really getting along all that well, “taking it slow”, but then Abby is desperately trying to hang on to Asura so that she won’t abandon her. One moment it seems that Abigail is genuinely beginning to like Asura, then she appears to be barely able to tolerate her company for the (health) benefits. At other times she can hardly restrain herself from kissing Asura and it looks as if Asura is holding back, but then Abby runs out on the Asari when she mentions sex. I suppose that can be seen as a reflection of the conflicting emotions that Abigail continues to have with regards to their relationship, but still... In that context, the way you convey their feelings by having them hold hands or not is pretty neat.
But Abby torturing Asura by implying that she might leave when she does not actually want to leave was cruel. And then the “I love you but I don’t *love* you” talk... you should not do that to an alien. Or anybody, actually.
Poor Asura’s so concerned for Abigail and so protective of her, it’s quite cute. But she needs to restrain herself in public, or else she’ll cause an incident and draw attention to herself.
That Abby is fine with melding but balks at having conventional sex with Asura seems weird, I mean, melding sounds a lot more intimate... And I don’t quite get how sex is going to help Asura with anything, other than reassuring her that she and Abby really are an item, and not just mutual health care providers. You made it sound as if Asura suggested it as a means of allowing Abby to meld with her less often. I was under the impression that only melding will dampen Asuara’s Ardat Yakshi desires.
Their solution to separate further rather than giving it a try was kind of dumb I thought. And then Abby follows up her “no sex please, I am British” speech by cozying up to Asura and kissing her... talk about sending mixed messages.
Mordin monitoring them made for some really funny scenes, such as when he asks "tell me Dr. Gable, what is your current level of arousal". Although honestly, while that is funny, what's it going to tell him? That Asura easily provokes a physical reaction in Abby? How’s that going to help understanding their melding? Him watching them meld would probably yield better results, if they ever let him ("call me if you change your mind"). Asura might be willing, lol.
To have Asura be forced to work with a Justicar was a daring idea, but I think you pulled it off very well. Even if it strains credibility a bit that she was able to fool this accomplished Ardat Yakshi hunter. (Wow, what a character! She came across as a Samara x 2, without any of her compassion... until she had to leave, that is). And not just simply fool her, but impress her so much that she wanted to recruit Asura. Her recruitment methods were somewhat unconventional though, all that holding hands, kissing and crying... but maybe that’s just her, or an Asari thing, she behaved like that with Abby as well. I get the impression that Phora sees something of a kindred spirit in Asura, a soulmate of sorts, a potential friend and maybe even partner... which is of course ironic in the extreme. It made me wonder if the current Asari policy of cloistering or killing AYs really is the only way to deal with them. Maybe it is; Asura is a very special case because she has Abby to take the edge off here urge to kill. And once she’s gone... Asura’s promise to seek out Phora once she’s not longer bound to Abby validates Phora’s assessment of her character, even if Phora does not realize that Asura would just seek Death by Justicar. How tragic. The question is, when that time comes, will Phora maintain her high opinion of Asura and bemoan her wasted potential, or will she be outraged at having been deceived by an Ardat Yakshi?
It was good to see Samara making something of a comeback, although it remains to be seen whether her realization that she’s hopelessly in love with Shepard and cares about nobody else as much she does about Jane will survive her incarceration by the Reapers, and, more importantly, will lead to action. One can only hope.
Her talk with Morinth/the-Reaper-masquerading-as-Morinth was great. After initially weakening her resolve when faced with “Morinth’s” accusations/truths, now that Samara’s realized what she’s dealing with, she appears to be strengthened. I wish that she and Shepard can get out on their own before Shepard Sr. arrives... I’m so not looking forward to that clash, I’m afraid that Hannah will be a complete ass towards Samara (“how dare you alien witch hurt my precious baby...”).

Jack was excellent once more ("what's up bitches, I'm back"). Her and Shepard’s visit to Grissom Academy was too funny ("Fucking pansy, what the fuck are you teaching here? Cooking?”) And the way she talked to Hannah... (‘m glad somebody did, after Shepard Sr. steamrolled pretty much everybody else, including Miranda).
It was sad to realize once more just how much Cerberus have messed Jack up – her fear of abandonment makes it almost impossible for her to accept that Abby is not turning her back on her by going with Asura. I guess Jack’s an all-or-nothing kind of girl.

EDI is becoming quite good at creatively interpreting orders – following Shepard’s commands by denying Miranda, while disobeying her by contacting Samara. It can’t be long now until she actively lies to somebody.

Your Kelly Chambers seems to be a secret Asari... going out with Turians, Hanar, and who knows what else. Lol.

I did not understand what Phora meant when she tried to put down Humans (Abby) in Asura’s eyes by saying "Humans put a lot of value into their present lives. Into their physical bodies." The Asari do not? Their potentially long life span won't do them any good without their "present lives" and "physical bodies", so where’s the insult here?

I realize that this is your AU story and that you’re taking some liberties with canon, but doubling the Asari lifespan to 2k years seems a bit much.

How did Shepard get burned on her hands and head? Her weapons don’t use gun powder.

Since you keep making the same mistake let me mention it here - it's "disdain", not "distain" and "runes", not "ruins".

9/4/2014 c28 vampirecheetah
I hope you end up feeling better. Being sick and trying to write (or do any creative endeavor) is tough. While you may have struggled writing the chapter, you've done well laying out these three story paths. I didn't think anything of Jack being left behind before, but it's clear that she needed to be in order for the shaky grounds of Abby and Jack's friendship to get resolved. It'll be interesting to see how Jack will handle the hours away from the Normandy. And, it's always good to see Samara finally broken free. I'm really looking forward to how we'll see Jane next, as it's been some time since the perspective has focused on her. Looking forward to more.

8/29/2014 c27 SerraShaar
Come on Samara ! You can do it !
Argh , what did I tell ya . Mom shep is scary like hell . Damn it ! You delivered another master piece of a chapter .
The whole Phora thing . Goddess , I could almost feel the stress , the fear and everything Asura was feeling . The need to tell her who she really was and at the same time the pain at the ironi of it all . Talk about a cruel joke .
wait wait...did she call Asura 'My Love' What the...
AHH you tease us :D And Thats awesome haha

8/28/2014 c1 Avarenda
Why do i get the feeling that when Asura says she will seek Phora out after Abby dies, she doesnt mean that she will become a Justicar; but as a means to end her life.

Also, wth Phora, trying to seduce Asura? I thought Justicar had to forsake all family/lovers?

8/28/2014 c27 LifeIsAGreatAdventure
WowAs Bill and Ted say in their most Excellent Adventure, "Woooow, Dudes"!. What a great chapter. three high drama scenes all together one right after the other, each having tremendous impact on the plot and the characters. Great job. Thanks for an excellent read.
Looking forward to the next installment.