for Living in America12/23/2017 c4 Guest
Wow love the story! Michi! Please update.
Wow love the story! Michi! Please update.
3/4/2013 c4 
12Vigatus
I think I understand Melody's deal. There is a person I work with who declared that they liked me the first day we met. I found this weird and ignored them. Then this weekend they started chatting up my roommate and I was' WTF I thought you were into me", even though I never returned the person's interest. human's a strange creatures, right?
12VigatusI think I understand Melody's deal. There is a person I work with who declared that they liked me the first day we met. I found this weird and ignored them. Then this weekend they started chatting up my roommate and I was' WTF I thought you were into me", even though I never returned the person's interest. human's a strange creatures, right?
3/3/2013 c4 2Lucas H. Garrett
Ooooooooooooooooooooooooooo, I see some trouble brewing. Seriously, I cannot wait fort he next update. This is actually juicy. Poor tai though. Mimi's all like, Pshsh not this girl... or something like that. What am I saying?
2Lucas H. GarrettOoooooooooooooooooooooooooo, I see some trouble brewing. Seriously, I cannot wait fort he next update. This is actually juicy. Poor tai though. Mimi's all like, Pshsh not this girl... or something like that. What am I saying?
3/3/2013 c2 Lucas H. Garrett
The story is actually really good. Admitting this however, I have a hard time going through a few parts due to the lack of consistency. Although, you really have me hooked despite this.
The story is actually really good. Admitting this however, I have a hard time going through a few parts due to the lack of consistency. Although, you really have me hooked despite this.
3/3/2013 c1 Lucas H. Garrett
First comment, it's negative so... I'm sorry? The dialogue and grammar need some work (more for the grammar). Also, you jumped between scenes rather quickly, without evidencing that it was switching.
Other those tidbits, the story is fine. I can't wait to read further on. I like Michi.
First comment, it's negative so... I'm sorry? The dialogue and grammar need some work (more for the grammar). Also, you jumped between scenes rather quickly, without evidencing that it was switching.
Other those tidbits, the story is fine. I can't wait to read further on. I like Michi.
1/12/2013 c3 3Jenificent3007
This has been cool so far, I'd like to see how this continues so update when you can please & remember to check your work :-)
3Jenificent3007This has been cool so far, I'd like to see how this continues so update when you can please & remember to check your work :-)