for A Veil of Passion3/7 c41 Guest
Responding to your note at the end of this chapter. It's probably better you didn't kill off Seo here. Hikari and Hibiki just left the scene, presumably to get "cursebroken" by Chiho. Unless you had them magically teleport, they likely would died en route, still being bound to Seo that they were.
Responding to your note at the end of this chapter. It's probably better you didn't kill off Seo here. Hikari and Hibiki just left the scene, presumably to get "cursebroken" by Chiho. Unless you had them magically teleport, they likely would died en route, still being bound to Seo that they were.
10/17/2024 c47 Obsidian Dreamweaver
Hello,
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Lydia Crazy
Professional Commission Comic Artist
Hello,
I hope this message finds you well. I recently had the pleasure of reading your story, "A Veil of Passion," and was truly captivated by its unique narrative and creativity. The depth and imagination in your work inspired me, and I believe it would translate beautifully into a visually compelling comic book.
As a professional comic artist, I would love to collaborate with you to bring your vision to life as a fully illustrated comic. This project would be commission-based, and I would work closely with you to ensure that every page captures the essence of your story.
If this opportunity excites you, I’d be happy to discuss the process in more detail, including pricing, timelines, and any creative ideas you have in mind.
Please feel free to reach out to me via any of the following:
Discord: lydiacrazy
Instagram: lydiacrazy1
Twitter: Lidi18337530019
Email: lydiacrazy88 gmail . com
Thank you for considering this collaboration. I look forward to the possibility of working together to create something truly extraordinary!
Best regards,
Lydia Crazy
Professional Commission Comic Artist
7/8/2024 c47 
64Kerlongsj Evert Orlejov
Hard to believe that it’s now over. After 47 chapters and nearly 11 years, this fic has run its course.
As for the ending that she had, it’s the wish that they all had been hoping for. Bring back those the ones they had lost. That is all too fitting for them.
Not that it is all as before the Plan had ended. It just means that they can retake their lives and figure their way around it.
Also happy that Chiho and Uzume got Minato back. It’s funny on how they are acting out there in the open.
It’s good they are all back and they decided to keep the Inn up and running until Miya returns back home. It doesn’t mean they have to follow her rules. Without the Pillar in the Inn, they can now start to have their great shares of fun.
It’s all too ironic that they are doing it in Miya’s room. A bit to spite her, a bit to have fun at her.
I understand why you didn’t have the lemon when the others joined in.
He got quite a few more to enjoy in his bed now.
Don’t ask me why but the song “To the Skies And Beyond” of “Brothers Of Metal” was playing through my head when I was reading through this chapter. They have just begun when I was thinking about it.
I am so looking forward to the sequel that you have in mind but it appears that this year, is going to be one of finishing stuff.
Apologies for taking a bit on it but the weekend got busier. I am all too happy that normalcy and routine are in for the next few weeks after June has been one hell of a rollercoaster.
Saluut.
64Kerlongsj Evert OrlejovHard to believe that it’s now over. After 47 chapters and nearly 11 years, this fic has run its course.
As for the ending that she had, it’s the wish that they all had been hoping for. Bring back those the ones they had lost. That is all too fitting for them.
Not that it is all as before the Plan had ended. It just means that they can retake their lives and figure their way around it.
Also happy that Chiho and Uzume got Minato back. It’s funny on how they are acting out there in the open.
It’s good they are all back and they decided to keep the Inn up and running until Miya returns back home. It doesn’t mean they have to follow her rules. Without the Pillar in the Inn, they can now start to have their great shares of fun.
It’s all too ironic that they are doing it in Miya’s room. A bit to spite her, a bit to have fun at her.
I understand why you didn’t have the lemon when the others joined in.
He got quite a few more to enjoy in his bed now.
Don’t ask me why but the song “To the Skies And Beyond” of “Brothers Of Metal” was playing through my head when I was reading through this chapter. They have just begun when I was thinking about it.
I am so looking forward to the sequel that you have in mind but it appears that this year, is going to be one of finishing stuff.
Apologies for taking a bit on it but the weekend got busier. I am all too happy that normalcy and routine are in for the next few weeks after June has been one hell of a rollercoaster.
Saluut.
7/5/2024 c47 Guest
What’s going to happen in the sequel because I’m not sure what to expect from the characters in space?
What’s going to happen in the sequel because I’m not sure what to expect from the characters in space?
7/5/2024 c47 6Jakeros
Well, it's finally over.
Closing the book on this monstrosity feels bittersweet at best. On one hand, now I can go back through and read it knowing what's in store, and what it'll all entail. I will admit that near the end the quality took a sharp nose dive but I'm hardly one to talk - my work has suffered much the same. Writing has become more difficult in recent years.
This story single-handedly inspired me to start writing my own and I am ever so thankful for it, and its author for all the support it lent me throughout. And I look forward to the sequel as well, naturally.
As raring as you are to get going however, I would advise you hold off on this to let it all sink in. Not a week like some others have said, but at least a month. Make sure everything is shipshape when time comes to release it.
That's just my advice of course. You do you and I'll offer my thoughts all the same.
Till then,
Write on!
6JakerosWell, it's finally over.
Closing the book on this monstrosity feels bittersweet at best. On one hand, now I can go back through and read it knowing what's in store, and what it'll all entail. I will admit that near the end the quality took a sharp nose dive but I'm hardly one to talk - my work has suffered much the same. Writing has become more difficult in recent years.
This story single-handedly inspired me to start writing my own and I am ever so thankful for it, and its author for all the support it lent me throughout. And I look forward to the sequel as well, naturally.
As raring as you are to get going however, I would advise you hold off on this to let it all sink in. Not a week like some others have said, but at least a month. Make sure everything is shipshape when time comes to release it.
That's just my advice of course. You do you and I'll offer my thoughts all the same.
Till then,
Write on!
7/5/2024 c47 Temsen
It's nice to see this finished, good job!
Though following you is kinda moot right now, what with the alerts not working, story follows you can at least see in your settings.
It's nice to see this finished, good job!
Though following you is kinda moot right now, what with the alerts not working, story follows you can at least see in your settings.
7/5/2024 c47 codywhite162
This was an incredible story from start to finish. I'm very excited to read the sequel!
This was an incredible story from start to finish. I'm very excited to read the sequel!
7/2/2024 c46 Jakeros
Climactic for sure, though it felt a bit off to me in some places. The overuse of flowery prose here kinda undercut the tension that the fight was supposed to be made of, and it felt a little too short in my opinion. Could've tried to draw it out a bit more though that's just me - perhaps this was the best outcome, since Uzume never considered Miya an enemy, just a prudish obstacle.
But the use of gpt is prevalent here so in the future, you might try to tweak the words a bit so they reflect your style more than the AI. Uzume's opening lines for example were a bit too classy for her character, as at least to me. You can easily get away with it with Miya though, let alone Tsukiumi.
Either case, what's done is done and now it's time to wrap things up. Hard to believe I started reading this almost 4 years ago - feels like a lifetime since then. I will say that this fic singlehandedly inspired me to not only hurry up and finish the manga already, but eventually try to craft my own take on the series. I have by no means given up on it but I'm too busy these days to really commit to anything apart from other, less time-consuming projects.
It's also helped me with some of biases towards certain issues like same sex couples. I avoided both originally since I was raised in a traditionalist household but now I've grown to appreciate pairings like this for what they're worth. They provide a new perspective on how two people in love come together, and show their worth throughout. So thanks for kicking younger me in the teeth with that - you owe my dentist a fortune for it. lol
Uzume is still the best Sekirei to me - period, with Tsukiumi being a damn close second.
I eagerly look forward to the final layer of Veil and hope to see this story evolve even further wherever you lead it next.
Till then,
Write on!
Climactic for sure, though it felt a bit off to me in some places. The overuse of flowery prose here kinda undercut the tension that the fight was supposed to be made of, and it felt a little too short in my opinion. Could've tried to draw it out a bit more though that's just me - perhaps this was the best outcome, since Uzume never considered Miya an enemy, just a prudish obstacle.
But the use of gpt is prevalent here so in the future, you might try to tweak the words a bit so they reflect your style more than the AI. Uzume's opening lines for example were a bit too classy for her character, as at least to me. You can easily get away with it with Miya though, let alone Tsukiumi.
Either case, what's done is done and now it's time to wrap things up. Hard to believe I started reading this almost 4 years ago - feels like a lifetime since then. I will say that this fic singlehandedly inspired me to not only hurry up and finish the manga already, but eventually try to craft my own take on the series. I have by no means given up on it but I'm too busy these days to really commit to anything apart from other, less time-consuming projects.
It's also helped me with some of biases towards certain issues like same sex couples. I avoided both originally since I was raised in a traditionalist household but now I've grown to appreciate pairings like this for what they're worth. They provide a new perspective on how two people in love come together, and show their worth throughout. So thanks for kicking younger me in the teeth with that - you owe my dentist a fortune for it. lol
Uzume is still the best Sekirei to me - period, with Tsukiumi being a damn close second.
I eagerly look forward to the final layer of Veil and hope to see this story evolve even further wherever you lead it next.
Till then,
Write on!
6/26/2024 c46 64Kerlongsj Evert Orlejov
Many updates in the last few days. It’s unfortunate that I was not at home but at Graspop. So it’s time for me to catch up on the last few updates.
That was one tough fight with Uzume and Miya. The Veiled Sekirei was right to call her out on the bullshit. She could have stopped this entire Plan if she only thought about acting out on that and stopped the whole heartache.
And with the other issues that were going on. She didn’t allow for any sort of vulgarity which only proved to be a detriment.
Still, Uzume got the upper hand but it’s been a relatively short fight but they are good that they have found each other as Chiho acts as conduit for the two.
With Minato talking and hoping that she would find another love after Takehito had perished.
And now, this fic is reaching his ending. I look forward to the rest of it. I just hope you catch it after notifications have been down.
Again. Saluut.
64Kerlongsj Evert OrlejovMany updates in the last few days. It’s unfortunate that I was not at home but at Graspop. So it’s time for me to catch up on the last few updates.
That was one tough fight with Uzume and Miya. The Veiled Sekirei was right to call her out on the bullshit. She could have stopped this entire Plan if she only thought about acting out on that and stopped the whole heartache.
And with the other issues that were going on. She didn’t allow for any sort of vulgarity which only proved to be a detriment.
Still, Uzume got the upper hand but it’s been a relatively short fight but they are good that they have found each other as Chiho acts as conduit for the two.
With Minato talking and hoping that she would find another love after Takehito had perished.
And now, this fic is reaching his ending. I look forward to the rest of it. I just hope you catch it after notifications have been down.
Again. Saluut.
6/18/2024 c46 codywhite162
Great chapter and I am glad Miya will finally chase after her own happiness for a change. She deserves it :)
Great chapter and I am glad Miya will finally chase after her own happiness for a change. She deserves it :)
6/16/2024 c45 6Jakeros
I've said it before and I'll say it again: you should really take up painting, since you are an artist when it comes to presenting a vivid setting we can sink our teeth into.
Well, I'll admit, this chapter threw me for a minute since some sequences didn't make sense. Matsu's lines cleared it up - I think - so all's good but it was jarring still. Interesting way to segue.
The fight with Uzume and Karasuba ended pretty much how I expected it to, realistically speaking. Karasuba trounced her in every way imaginable, though she put up a good fight all throughout. Karasuba was simply stronger than her to an arrogant extent. Had it not been for that last minute ass-pull on Minato and the girls' part, she really would've left Uzume to die.
And speaking of dying... degloving. Excruciating, deliberate and messy - I AM SATISIFIED. Having Uzume top it off with that final fuck you on Minato's behalf was just, *mwha*, chef's kiss.
Now we have the mother of all showdowns to take place. Sadly, no matter what kind of power-up she got, I sincerely doubt Uzume has a prayer in hell against the mother of all sekirei but, you have a way of surprising me.
I've stuck on this long and I jumped in rather late, admittedly, but I'm here for the ride for however long it takes. After all, it's not the destination but the journey and it has fun as hell all the way.
till then,
Write on!
6JakerosI've said it before and I'll say it again: you should really take up painting, since you are an artist when it comes to presenting a vivid setting we can sink our teeth into.
Well, I'll admit, this chapter threw me for a minute since some sequences didn't make sense. Matsu's lines cleared it up - I think - so all's good but it was jarring still. Interesting way to segue.
The fight with Uzume and Karasuba ended pretty much how I expected it to, realistically speaking. Karasuba trounced her in every way imaginable, though she put up a good fight all throughout. Karasuba was simply stronger than her to an arrogant extent. Had it not been for that last minute ass-pull on Minato and the girls' part, she really would've left Uzume to die.
And speaking of dying... degloving. Excruciating, deliberate and messy - I AM SATISIFIED. Having Uzume top it off with that final fuck you on Minato's behalf was just, *mwha*, chef's kiss.
Now we have the mother of all showdowns to take place. Sadly, no matter what kind of power-up she got, I sincerely doubt Uzume has a prayer in hell against the mother of all sekirei but, you have a way of surprising me.
I've stuck on this long and I jumped in rather late, admittedly, but I'm here for the ride for however long it takes. After all, it's not the destination but the journey and it has fun as hell all the way.
till then,
Write on!
5/29/2024 c45 64Kerlongsj Evert Orlejov
It’s been a while since last update. Been in your shoes as well where I’d struggle over a chapter.
Yume is the connection that ties Minato’s Flock with Chiho’s Flock.
The memories were fun but the fight was another good part to see that and how Uzume is furious for what she has done with Minato and his Flock.
With Sanada and Mikogami, she can ask that of them and she is the tougher negotiator of them all. She is the strongest, expect for Minaka, Karasuba and Miya.
The fight on Karasuba was a long time coming and I think you have done an awesome job at it! It’s a pretty long one but I believe you have pretty much enjoyed yourself on it. I can’t say how the rest is going to go but they have sacrificed more than enough.
Let’s hope that it will go well. I think you have found great ways as to help out on the end Arc. Thank you for the tip, even after so long, we all can use it. Hard to believe it’ll be coming to an end very soon.
I look forward to the sequel.
Saluut.
64Kerlongsj Evert OrlejovIt’s been a while since last update. Been in your shoes as well where I’d struggle over a chapter.
Yume is the connection that ties Minato’s Flock with Chiho’s Flock.
The memories were fun but the fight was another good part to see that and how Uzume is furious for what she has done with Minato and his Flock.
With Sanada and Mikogami, she can ask that of them and she is the tougher negotiator of them all. She is the strongest, expect for Minaka, Karasuba and Miya.
The fight on Karasuba was a long time coming and I think you have done an awesome job at it! It’s a pretty long one but I believe you have pretty much enjoyed yourself on it. I can’t say how the rest is going to go but they have sacrificed more than enough.
Let’s hope that it will go well. I think you have found great ways as to help out on the end Arc. Thank you for the tip, even after so long, we all can use it. Hard to believe it’ll be coming to an end very soon.
I look forward to the sequel.
Saluut.