5/8/2013 c1 NeonJiwachi
I liked the story! It was nice, sweet, warm & even had blushing in it, making it very cute. (1)


I didn't find any spelling errors, punctuation or grammer errors either. (1)

3. Details
The setting could have been more detailed, as well as the characters. People who haven't played Harvest Moon won't know any of these people or places, so you could have incorporated info in the story on the setting & characters. (0)

Choice

Word choice was good, i saw some words that could have been changed, but most were good enough. (.50)


The story was a nice, little one-shot so it doesn't matter if it was 1k words, 10k words or 50k words. (1)

So, I rate this fanfic 3.5! That's actually not bad out of 5. I personally liked the cuteness of the story as well! Can't wait to read the others! -

1/2/2013 c1 17Aero-Dragon's-Sky
Aw, that was cute! I'm so surprised I'm not the only one to think of Hiro and Laney together! I actually have two fics in a rough draft stage about them :D The only thing I didn't like was them being so young. Ten seems a bit too young for them at that point, maybe more like 13? Then again, that's only me :D Also, when they got to Laney's place it went a bit too fast. It was still a pleasant read though, and the grammar was great.