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1/1/2013 c2 8Archangel's Blade
Oh, and Guest: "you" "aren't". "okay" should have a capital, and there should be a "." at the end. Don't comment on someone else's grammar unless yours is perfect.
1/1/2013 c1 Archangel's Blade
Yeah, basically.
It takes place after Time Paradox. Just pretend that Last Guardian and Atlantis Complex never happened.
12/30/2012 c2 Tawny
Is he still his normal appearance just shorter with pointier ears?
:) Cute.
12/30/2012 c1 Tawny
Some OOCness but sweet none the less! So this is after... which book exactly?
Onto the next -
12/30/2012 c2 Guest
okay this is so emotional...NOT! u suck at writing and u arent any better at grammar
12/30/2012 c1 Guest
this should be rated m. how much stupid twilight do u read
12/30/2012 c1 2Taladium567
It's looking pretty good,albeit for a few mistakes.

You could change the start of their dating to six months because one month seems

a bit soon for them to already be doing this.

Also,on the last paragraph,it stated:"Holly thought,a little breathlessly".

How do you think breathlessly?
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