for The Deathly Uzumaki11/30 c5 SMB
What was the f**king point of making Naruto OP and then doing exactly as they did in canon? All that training and all that power meant f**king nothing. F**k you for wasting my time reading all that buildup to reach this point and it's f**king crap. Everyone read canon instead! It's the same thing! An idiot MC that doesn't do anything to change anything. Before he was an underdog that didn't do anything and now he's an arrogant asshole that stands by and does nothing. What a f**king waste.
What was the f**king point of making Naruto OP and then doing exactly as they did in canon? All that training and all that power meant f**king nothing. F**k you for wasting my time reading all that buildup to reach this point and it's f**king crap. Everyone read canon instead! It's the same thing! An idiot MC that doesn't do anything to change anything. Before he was an underdog that didn't do anything and now he's an arrogant asshole that stands by and does nothing. What a f**king waste.
9/9 c8 Guest
Massive points with me. You actually added Yakumo. Not just mentioning her as a throw away comment and wasting her despite such an opportunity setup to actually add her.
I'm genuinely surprised sadly, more so that this doesn't even have a dozen chapters. Still some big props for actually using her when nearly no one would.
Massive points with me. You actually added Yakumo. Not just mentioning her as a throw away comment and wasting her despite such an opportunity setup to actually add her.
I'm genuinely surprised sadly, more so that this doesn't even have a dozen chapters. Still some big props for actually using her when nearly no one would.
9/9 c6 Guest
Well well it turns out her curse seal was dealt with. Hurray for that.
Well well it turns out her curse seal was dealt with. Hurray for that.
9/9 c5 Guest
Thats actually really irritating. An indirect mention of what could be a power house in Yakumo instead of leaving her out like nearly everyone else. Yet with people like the Hollow King, Minato, Kushina, and Tsunade all there to fix her issues and bring her into the story nothing was done.
Zabuza should know better since Naruto owned him though obviously at least to the readers holding back and allowing Haku to run off with him. He shouldn't even or asked Haku if he could take on Naruto and Haku saying he can handle someone that owned her teacher is just off.
Its a waste Baraggan didn't pluck Orochomarus soul from Ankos curse mark. Also can't understand why there's no mention of Naruto's parents not looking at the curse mark either. Especially if she's his sensei.
Thats actually really irritating. An indirect mention of what could be a power house in Yakumo instead of leaving her out like nearly everyone else. Yet with people like the Hollow King, Minato, Kushina, and Tsunade all there to fix her issues and bring her into the story nothing was done.
Zabuza should know better since Naruto owned him though obviously at least to the readers holding back and allowing Haku to run off with him. He shouldn't even or asked Haku if he could take on Naruto and Haku saying he can handle someone that owned her teacher is just off.
Its a waste Baraggan didn't pluck Orochomarus soul from Ankos curse mark. Also can't understand why there's no mention of Naruto's parents not looking at the curse mark either. Especially if she's his sensei.
9/9 c3 Guest
Sadly too forced with Uzu. Who would be there stopping anyone's forces from just pillaging it themselves? What would what remained of Kiri, Iwa, and Kumo's armies have left that was obtainable after the losses suffered that caused them to be unable to continue the 2nd war allowing Konoha to call it their win?
If anything was still there the forces could've sat on it and continue to this day to try and take it unless Konoha has a substantial force sitting on it at all times.
On the other side if Konoha sent in an army to sit on and protect it. Who would notice or say anything with Konoha ninja guarding and not letting anyone near if they tried a hand at pillaging what the armies couldn't strip themselves?
This gimmick about buying it sounds severely forced.
Sadly too forced with Uzu. Who would be there stopping anyone's forces from just pillaging it themselves? What would what remained of Kiri, Iwa, and Kumo's armies have left that was obtainable after the losses suffered that caused them to be unable to continue the 2nd war allowing Konoha to call it their win?
If anything was still there the forces could've sat on it and continue to this day to try and take it unless Konoha has a substantial force sitting on it at all times.
On the other side if Konoha sent in an army to sit on and protect it. Who would notice or say anything with Konoha ninja guarding and not letting anyone near if they tried a hand at pillaging what the armies couldn't strip themselves?
This gimmick about buying it sounds severely forced.
9/9 c2 Guest
Heck of a chapter.
Heck of a chapter.
9/9 c1 Guest
It doesn't make sense for it to be sealed in his corpse. Obviously it went with Minato into the Shinigami.
Otherwise interesting.
It doesn't make sense for it to be sealed in his corpse. Obviously it went with Minato into the Shinigami.
Otherwise interesting.
9/5 c11 
1aitor.rosell.torralba
Gonna be honest, I do not know why this story has soo many follows and the like, It's pretty trash, I mean the concept is fine and dandy but the execution... ughh... It is too much wanking and very little story.
1aitor.rosell.torralbaGonna be honest, I do not know why this story has soo many follows and the like, It's pretty trash, I mean the concept is fine and dandy but the execution... ughh... It is too much wanking and very little story.
5/10 c11 Cthul
See you guys in ten years
See you guys in ten years
4/3 c5 Guest
For fuck's sake either learn how to spell or get a beta reader. Hear and here are two totally different words.
For fuck's sake either learn how to spell or get a beta reader. Hear and here are two totally different words.