for Ciel X Reader Chapter 1: Welcome Home, My Lady7/24/2013 c1 poisoned sweetness
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poisoned sweetness
Entries not allowed:
1. Non-stories: lists, bloopers, polls, previews, challenges, author notes, and etc.
2. One or two liners.
3. MST: comments inserted in between the flow of a copied story.
4. Stories with non-historical and non-fictional characters: actors, musicians, and etc.
5. Any form of interactive entry: choose your adventure, second person/you based, Q&As, and etc.
6. Chat/script format and keyboard dialogue based entries.
Your story is in violation of section five of the guidelines. For your story to comply with the guidelines of this site, you would need to turn the Reader based insert into an original character. Please make the appropriate adjustments or remove this from the archive before it gets reported.
poisoned sweetness
7/8/2013 c9 Guest
your links don't do anything! FIX. IT.
your links don't do anything! FIX. IT.
5/19/2013 c9 Rosie
Omg that was the best story i ever read T.T please make a sequel i will die if you don't soon so i am moving to DC tomorrow and i would like to tell all my friends that i married Earl Ceil Phantomhive *evil laugh* ha ha ha ha ha *laughs so starts to cry T.T*
Omg that was the best story i ever read T.T please make a sequel i will die if you don't soon so i am moving to DC tomorrow and i would like to tell all my friends that i married Earl Ceil Phantomhive *evil laugh* ha ha ha ha ha *laughs so starts to cry T.T*
5/21/2013 c9 
1Ladytraciana
SQEE! I loved it! Thank you for writing such a wonderful fanfic! You're a genius!
1LadytracianaSQEE! I loved it! Thank you for writing such a wonderful fanfic! You're a genius!
4/26/2013 c1 Guest
OOGLY, OOGLIEST I VE EVER READ
OOGLY, OOGLIEST I VE EVER READ
4/21/2013 c4 1KawaiiOtakugirl
I loved the part "I could tell him after you get married with him and have a few little Phantomhives running around." xDD! I could imagine thatw Kawaii!:)) I love your stories BTW:3
1KawaiiOtakugirlI loved the part "I could tell him after you get married with him and have a few little Phantomhives running around." xDD! I could imagine thatw Kawaii!:)) I love your stories BTW:3
4/16/2013 c4 6SM.Hime
LoL Prince Soma and Agni is so funny! XD
Ciel choking for "2 minutes" O.O I can't imagine that at all! If I were in his place, I would lost my breathe and collapsed! XD
6SM.HimeLoL Prince Soma and Agni is so funny! XD
Ciel choking for "2 minutes" O.O I can't imagine that at all! If I were in his place, I would lost my breathe and collapsed! XD
3/9/2013 c9 Valerie
HOLY CRaP! ;'3 i am sk happy at the end... THANK YOU SO MUCH! :'D
HOLY CRaP! ;'3 i am sk happy at the end... THANK YOU SO MUCH! :'D
3/8/2013 c1 Valeri
;') oh my love... i nearly cried... 3
;') oh my love... i nearly cried... 3
2/26/2013 c9 metallic ink
There is so much that needs to be addressed I don’t know where to begin… I guess I’ll start by saying that you need to add a distinctive line break between your notes and the actual story. In some chapters, the story blends right in with your notes.
Your story contains numerous errors that are distracting and take away from your stories appeal: poor grammar, misspellings, improper punctuation and capitalization. You really should proofread your work before you post; nothing is more annoying and distracting than a story so full of grammatical mistakes that it interferes with your stories flow.
Your reader insert is a perfect replica of Elizabeth as she is usually portrayed by this fandom: annoyingly rambunctious, girly, childish, etc. If you want readers of all age groups and backgrounds to be able to associate with your insert, you should work toward building a personality that isn’t so underdeveloped and annoyingly childish, after all not everyone finds such personalities to be attractive.
On a personal note, I don’t usually like Character X Reader stories either; I read them simply because I’m interested in seeing how the writers choose to approach the subject. Just because I find the idea behind such stories unimaginative doesn’t mean I couldn’t be proven wrong and chances are I might actually find one that is really good. So your suggestion in chapter eight to avoid stories you don’t like is ridiculous, a person cannot know from the summary alone how the story itself is done and the only way to know for sure is to read it.
Furthermore, a mere suggestion to be more imaginative in your works is not “dumb” as you put it, there is a lot of material to work with in this fandom and pointing that out is not wrong or a call for rudeness on your part. If you don’t like something a reviewer says, simply ignore them and be done with it.
There is so much that needs to be addressed I don’t know where to begin… I guess I’ll start by saying that you need to add a distinctive line break between your notes and the actual story. In some chapters, the story blends right in with your notes.
Your story contains numerous errors that are distracting and take away from your stories appeal: poor grammar, misspellings, improper punctuation and capitalization. You really should proofread your work before you post; nothing is more annoying and distracting than a story so full of grammatical mistakes that it interferes with your stories flow.
Your reader insert is a perfect replica of Elizabeth as she is usually portrayed by this fandom: annoyingly rambunctious, girly, childish, etc. If you want readers of all age groups and backgrounds to be able to associate with your insert, you should work toward building a personality that isn’t so underdeveloped and annoyingly childish, after all not everyone finds such personalities to be attractive.
On a personal note, I don’t usually like Character X Reader stories either; I read them simply because I’m interested in seeing how the writers choose to approach the subject. Just because I find the idea behind such stories unimaginative doesn’t mean I couldn’t be proven wrong and chances are I might actually find one that is really good. So your suggestion in chapter eight to avoid stories you don’t like is ridiculous, a person cannot know from the summary alone how the story itself is done and the only way to know for sure is to read it.
Furthermore, a mere suggestion to be more imaginative in your works is not “dumb” as you put it, there is a lot of material to work with in this fandom and pointing that out is not wrong or a call for rudeness on your part. If you don’t like something a reviewer says, simply ignore them and be done with it.