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3/13/2013 c3 11xXRainDaze.NiilaXx
Hi!
Sorry for not reviewing in so long.
Anyway, I like this chapter. It's a little short, and try to show not tell.
Other then that, good job
-Rain
2/5/2013 c3 3Grucy
Nice chapter! It was a little short, but I understand. My chapters are often short due to homework too.
1/22/2013 c1 Flashpaw
Super awesome story! I like the air of darkness to it. Please update soon!
1/8/2013 c2 11xXRainDaze.NiilaXx
Great chapter!
PoppyxWhite.
Next time, try to show that Whitepaw loves Poppypaw,instead of telling. Instead of labelling her as the she-cat that Whitepaw loves.
Also, sometimes your conversations do get a little confusing...
Keep writing,
-Robinpaw/Rain
1/2/2013 c1 Robinpaw
Great first chapter!
This story sounds like it has a lot of pro use, so keep it up!
I have always personally thought of white- and sky- as sorta femine, but its been used heaps of times for males, so, that seems to be just my personal opinion.
Anyway, keep writing!
1/2/2013 c1 3Grucy
This is a really good start. And if it's anything like your other story I'm sure I'll love it!

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