for Runaways1/2/2014 c1 margaret919
Woah, I was just browsing and saw this was from exactly a year ago. Weird. This was a good start though! :)
Woah, I was just browsing and saw this was from exactly a year ago. Weird. This was a good start though! :)
2/24/2013 c1 Shanca
Well update ! I wanna read more there's a great story waiting to be writing here dying to see how u go about it !
Well update ! I wanna read more there's a great story waiting to be writing here dying to see how u go about it !
1/20/2013 c1 caro1701tiscali.co.uk
Ooooh yeah liking this a lot, you have to write more like immediately...please!
Ooooh yeah liking this a lot, you have to write more like immediately...please!
1/5/2013 c1 
3she.dreams.in.colour
Oh my gosh, I am utterly sorry that I didn't see this earlier! Congratulations on your first fic! :)
With that I say that you have a particularly interesting story line here, and there are so many directions where you can take this. This first chapter is short and very vague as to details that can give the reader and idea of things to come, so I consider it more as a prologue kind of thing, something that does start the story off but holds back on the specifics and merely rouses interest. You certainly have my interest. :)
Looking forward to your next chapters, dear. :)
3she.dreams.in.colourOh my gosh, I am utterly sorry that I didn't see this earlier! Congratulations on your first fic! :)
With that I say that you have a particularly interesting story line here, and there are so many directions where you can take this. This first chapter is short and very vague as to details that can give the reader and idea of things to come, so I consider it more as a prologue kind of thing, something that does start the story off but holds back on the specifics and merely rouses interest. You certainly have my interest. :)
Looking forward to your next chapters, dear. :)
1/2/2013 c1 Black Rose Witch
First you have a good opening here it draws reader in. There paranoia Caroline is going through now was vital for your fist chapter and I think you should have emphasized that a little more because you just ended things to quickly as everything seemed quite rushed. I would honestly recommend that you expand a little more so you can draw in more readers. Your plot description is good which can draw in many readers but if you want to keep them, you’ll need emphasize a lot more since this is your fist story and as your first chapter you have a lot of room to expand. One more thing this is a major DO NOT that I can honestly tell you is very annoying to find when I read peoples story, DO NOT BE REPETITIVE. I doubt that you do this based of this fist chapter but be careful sometimes repetitiveness appears later on especially when writes describes actions like when two characters are interacting with one another or performing and action. It gets annoying to see and it tells your readers two things either there stupid or you just cannot write. With that I do believe you have great potential here and wish you luck.
First you have a good opening here it draws reader in. There paranoia Caroline is going through now was vital for your fist chapter and I think you should have emphasized that a little more because you just ended things to quickly as everything seemed quite rushed. I would honestly recommend that you expand a little more so you can draw in more readers. Your plot description is good which can draw in many readers but if you want to keep them, you’ll need emphasize a lot more since this is your fist story and as your first chapter you have a lot of room to expand. One more thing this is a major DO NOT that I can honestly tell you is very annoying to find when I read peoples story, DO NOT BE REPETITIVE. I doubt that you do this based of this fist chapter but be careful sometimes repetitiveness appears later on especially when writes describes actions like when two characters are interacting with one another or performing and action. It gets annoying to see and it tells your readers two things either there stupid or you just cannot write. With that I do believe you have great potential here and wish you luck.
1/2/2013 c1 7ForbiddenTouch
Kinda short...but I'm hooked on the storyline. Please continue with longer chapters :)
7ForbiddenTouchKinda short...but I'm hooked on the storyline. Please continue with longer chapters :)
1/2/2013 c1 Amelie
Next chapter pls! Hurry hurry! Can't wait 3
Next chapter pls! Hurry hurry! Can't wait 3
1/2/2013 c1 32ForeverDelighted
Intresting. Wish it was a bit longer though, but other than that it's good :)
Looking forward to an update! xx
32ForeverDelightedIntresting. Wish it was a bit longer though, but other than that it's good :)
Looking forward to an update! xx
1/2/2013 c1 Lexi3
This is a good start but this isn't long enough to count as a chapter in my opinion..I have no feel on it yet since nothing really happened...it has potential though!:)
This is a good start but this isn't long enough to count as a chapter in my opinion..I have no feel on it yet since nothing really happened...it has potential though!:)