for Yesterday's Regrets7/25/2014 c1 
5Alunabelle Night Shadow
I absolutely adore this! I hope you write more one-shots about Orland in the future.
5Alunabelle Night ShadowI absolutely adore this! I hope you write more one-shots about Orland in the future.
12/28/2013 c1 2Toorinh
I'm no professional reviewer or anything, but I just happened stumble across this story and loved it. My heart kinda breaks at the thought of how lonely Orland must feel. Though, I can't hate Leonel cause he's too cute for hating. Anyways, loved the story!
2ToorinhI'm no professional reviewer or anything, but I just happened stumble across this story and loved it. My heart kinda breaks at the thought of how lonely Orland must feel. Though, I can't hate Leonel cause he's too cute for hating. Anyways, loved the story!
1/4/2013 c1 6Sir Gigous
I'm glad I didn't capitalize upon that request I sent you. Your rendition of the idea proved far superior to any futile attempt I could've mustered. But more on that later, I suppose.
Greetings and salutations. I'm Sir Gigous, here to review your one-shot.
I'm disappointed to find I never reviewed the previous entry in this series of one-shots, considering how much I enjoyed it. Regardless, I found this story just as entertaining as the last. Despite having a drastically different tone in terms of the overarching plot, I still felt it to be written equally well, if not slightly more simplistic in terms of the actual writing. That's part of the charm, though-the tale's terse nature conveys the emotions of the characters better than any periphrasis script could have, and indeed made me empathize with Orland all the more. However, perhaps I should analyze this story in a bit more detail.
Concerning the actual writing quality, the story was brief in nature yet well written at the same time. Your grammar, while not quite impeccable, was still very strong, with the story containing only a few minor issues that most would probably disregard as inconsequential. The narrative flow was consistent, never dragging or feeling particularly rushed, and I felt the word choice, while certainly allowing room for improvement, was very strong as well. In my opinion, the aspect most lacking would be that of the narrative's details, as the scenes presented are rarely described utilizing more than the most preliminary of information, but considering this affected the story's enjoyability very little, I wouldn't be too concerned about the issue at present.
Similarly, I feel the characterization of Orland and Aria were very accurate to the source material, even if I question Aria's persistence in her pursuit of Orland. If I were to nitpick, I'd mention that Aria feels rather banal in terms of her personality, as her defining characteristic were rather unoriginal and seemed to almost lack a distinct nature. However, as was stated, she still made for an enjoyable character, as did Orland, whom you certainly wrote accurately.
The plot, while certainly conventional, was developed in an adept fashion. Establishing the premise swiftly, I felt you could've further developed Orland's childhood relationship with Aria to help justify her continual pursuit of him, but otherwise I have no complaints.
Overall, this was a great story, and one which, in my opinion, every aspiring Rune Factory author should strive to meet in terms of quality. It isn't often I find the emotions of the narrative communicated in such an efficient method, and I look forward to any future entries in this exceptional series.
6Sir GigousI'm glad I didn't capitalize upon that request I sent you. Your rendition of the idea proved far superior to any futile attempt I could've mustered. But more on that later, I suppose.
Greetings and salutations. I'm Sir Gigous, here to review your one-shot.
I'm disappointed to find I never reviewed the previous entry in this series of one-shots, considering how much I enjoyed it. Regardless, I found this story just as entertaining as the last. Despite having a drastically different tone in terms of the overarching plot, I still felt it to be written equally well, if not slightly more simplistic in terms of the actual writing. That's part of the charm, though-the tale's terse nature conveys the emotions of the characters better than any periphrasis script could have, and indeed made me empathize with Orland all the more. However, perhaps I should analyze this story in a bit more detail.
Concerning the actual writing quality, the story was brief in nature yet well written at the same time. Your grammar, while not quite impeccable, was still very strong, with the story containing only a few minor issues that most would probably disregard as inconsequential. The narrative flow was consistent, never dragging or feeling particularly rushed, and I felt the word choice, while certainly allowing room for improvement, was very strong as well. In my opinion, the aspect most lacking would be that of the narrative's details, as the scenes presented are rarely described utilizing more than the most preliminary of information, but considering this affected the story's enjoyability very little, I wouldn't be too concerned about the issue at present.
Similarly, I feel the characterization of Orland and Aria were very accurate to the source material, even if I question Aria's persistence in her pursuit of Orland. If I were to nitpick, I'd mention that Aria feels rather banal in terms of her personality, as her defining characteristic were rather unoriginal and seemed to almost lack a distinct nature. However, as was stated, she still made for an enjoyable character, as did Orland, whom you certainly wrote accurately.
The plot, while certainly conventional, was developed in an adept fashion. Establishing the premise swiftly, I felt you could've further developed Orland's childhood relationship with Aria to help justify her continual pursuit of him, but otherwise I have no complaints.
Overall, this was a great story, and one which, in my opinion, every aspiring Rune Factory author should strive to meet in terms of quality. It isn't often I find the emotions of the narrative communicated in such an efficient method, and I look forward to any future entries in this exceptional series.