for There are questions that must never be answered8/19 c160 The Dude Himself
This story is fantastic! It is a shame it hasn’t been updated in a while. Toero’s quote - “every creation is as strong as its foundation” - applies to your writing efforts. You created a wonderful foundation for this story and greatly expanded on it. I hope to see some day that this story gets updated!
10/10 I loved it
This story is fantastic! It is a shame it hasn’t been updated in a while. Toero’s quote - “every creation is as strong as its foundation” - applies to your writing efforts. You created a wonderful foundation for this story and greatly expanded on it. I hope to see some day that this story gets updated!
10/10 I loved it
5/31/2023 c160 Zaccai
Just binge read this over a few days, I really like the influence of your OC on all the characters and I especially like Naruto and hinata being able to express anger and aggression. I think this is the first hinata I’ve read lashing out at Hiashj for his crappy parenting, and doing it in a way that doesn’t come across as bashing. some grammar and spelling improvements could be made but your errors aren’t super jarring, it’s pretty easy to know what you were meaning. Love the story and hope you continue it!
Just binge read this over a few days, I really like the influence of your OC on all the characters and I especially like Naruto and hinata being able to express anger and aggression. I think this is the first hinata I’ve read lashing out at Hiashj for his crappy parenting, and doing it in a way that doesn’t come across as bashing. some grammar and spelling improvements could be made but your errors aren’t super jarring, it’s pretty easy to know what you were meaning. Love the story and hope you continue it!
9/29/2021 c5 Guest
Overall grammar isn't bad except for a few spellings but man you need to work on dialogues. They sound so bland. Also use your articles correctly.
Overall grammar isn't bad except for a few spellings but man you need to work on dialogues. They sound so bland. Also use your articles correctly.
3/26/2021 c1 Bryan Rivera
Hey I would like to thank you for trying to help me that was my first story so I’ll suck right now I’m working on a longer one like 300 words
Hey I would like to thank you for trying to help me that was my first story so I’ll suck right now I’m working on a longer one like 300 words
3/1/2021 c158 NoNameUchiha
You seem to be doing a good job juggling multiple character and storylines.
Keep up the great work!
You seem to be doing a good job juggling multiple character and storylines.
Keep up the great work!
2/27/2021 c157 
3TheBossBovaTannin
At first I was like, is Toero gonna get in bed with Tenten, but the more I read, the more it didn't seem to be work, and based on what I've been reading, you seem to enjoy the freedom such an unused character and concept gives you, I mean I never would've seen Danzo teaching Naruto, but there's a certain edge in that that can't be overlooked.
My money is on Toero getting into bed with either Ringo, Ino, or some other Kunoichi we won't expect
3TheBossBovaTanninAt first I was like, is Toero gonna get in bed with Tenten, but the more I read, the more it didn't seem to be work, and based on what I've been reading, you seem to enjoy the freedom such an unused character and concept gives you, I mean I never would've seen Danzo teaching Naruto, but there's a certain edge in that that can't be overlooked.
My money is on Toero getting into bed with either Ringo, Ino, or some other Kunoichi we won't expect
2/5/2021 c1 232Lord22
So I read this first chapter. The writing is pretty good, however at times I was confused as to whose perspective I was reading from.
That said, however, I think the core problem is that the chapter feels like a retread of canon. There were only a few differences, and the archer helping them against Orochimaru doesn't really change the outcome of the Chunin Exams at all.
It might have worked better if the new character was introduced in a more natural fashion. Like if Sakura ran into him before the exams or something and then he came to help them later.
232Lord22So I read this first chapter. The writing is pretty good, however at times I was confused as to whose perspective I was reading from.
That said, however, I think the core problem is that the chapter feels like a retread of canon. There were only a few differences, and the archer helping them against Orochimaru doesn't really change the outcome of the Chunin Exams at all.
It might have worked better if the new character was introduced in a more natural fashion. Like if Sakura ran into him before the exams or something and then he came to help them later.
2/2/2021 c18 3Mokushiyami
Great story so far love how it's developing. Also this error made me laughSasuke grabbed her chest breathing heavily."
Sasuke you naughty boy...
3MokushiyamiGreat story so far love how it's developing. Also this error made me laughSasuke grabbed her chest breathing heavily."
Sasuke you naughty boy...
2/1/2021 c155 BlackDragonShinigami
one hunfred and fifty fukkin five chapters. i ve enjoyed this story so much. cant wait for more
one hunfred and fifty fukkin five chapters. i ve enjoyed this story so much. cant wait for more