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10/31/2018 c6 Guest
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1/15/2018 c4 Guest
A pretty interesting story.
11/12/2013 c3 Dead Turtle
Man, what an interesting start! Waiting for more!
4/25/2013 c2 77Aquatic-Idealist
Never played Earthbound, but I understand the basic concept. You can thank the internet for that.

Well, after reading both chapters I feel that some element of humor has been lost. To this reader, humor is what made Lucky Star watchable. I'm a character-lover and to be frank the cast of Lucky Star acts like typical teenage girls (yes I'm an old man :)). It's been a few years since I seriously dabbled in Lucky Star related material, so my conception of the characters might not be as accurate, but for one thing Kagami seems to take charge a bit too eagerly (I was under the impression that although Kagami served as the 'second-in-command' of her party Konata, in spite of Konota's NEET nature, took the reigns.)

Your intention of adding a male character into the mix is interesting, and your portrayals of the parents thus far is ok. Sorry, this reader is not that enamored with your fanfic, but I'm sure you'll find some audience. I guess I'm in the wrong demographic now? LOLLOLLOL

Good luck with your writing!

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