7/28/2013 c1 6LilyWhite13
I really enjoyed this fanfic. It's really adorable X3
There are a few grammar and spelling mistakes though.
"Kempai" isn't the term for underclassman. "Kohai" is.
I don't think "hitting the bucket" is the right expression. People usually say "kicking the bucket".
If you want to make a comparison, use "than" rather than "then".
I think there might be spelling errors in the beginning, such as "wen" instead of "when" or "fro" instead of "from".

1/12/2013 c1 145Dlbn
Aw so kawaii. I love how Nisei just sneaks in the window to see him like they're Romeo and Juliet or something XD Nisei and Mimuro are such a cute couple 3 love it!

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