for deceit8/7/2014 c1 
1KanoWillow
Its pretty good I just realized this was published on my birthday XD XD XD
Keep working hard
1KanoWillowIts pretty good I just realized this was published on my birthday XD XD XD
Keep working hard
7/18/2014 c1 yellow feathers
this is good. but maybe you should use some more comma's? ( a comma is , btw )
this is good. but maybe you should use some more comma's? ( a comma is , btw )
11/22/2013 c1 1Idk-but-space-though
Hey its Alexis on my sis's account. Its really good! Keep up the good work! :)
1Idk-but-space-thoughHey its Alexis on my sis's account. Its really good! Keep up the good work! :)
4/13/2013 c2 3Rapper the red macaw
Ok, this is good, but can you try and break some sentences up. Everything is too close together.
3Rapper the red macawOk, this is good, but can you try and break some sentences up. Everything is too close together.
1/13/2013 c1 24Ricardo the Black Hawk
Wow i like this story. I gotta keep reading.
Try to work on your capitals and try to write who is talking. Not trying to be mean just trying to help.
24Ricardo the Black HawkWow i like this story. I gotta keep reading.
Try to work on your capitals and try to write who is talking. Not trying to be mean just trying to help.