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8/7/2014 c1 1KanoWillow
Its pretty good I just realized this was published on my birthday XD XD XD

Keep working hard
7/18/2014 c1 yellow feathers
this is good. but maybe you should use some more comma's? ( a comma is , btw )
11/22/2013 c1 1Idk-but-space-though
Hey its Alexis on my sis's account. Its really good! Keep up the good work! :)
4/13/2013 c2 3Rapper the red macaw
Ok, this is good, but can you try and break some sentences up. Everything is too close together.
1/24/2013 c1 Rapper the red macaw
Dude I like your story but it could do with some work.
1/22/2013 c1 3RIO2Lover100
nice keep it up
1/13/2013 c1 24Ricardo the Black Hawk
Wow i like this story. I gotta keep reading.

Try to work on your capitals and try to write who is talking. Not trying to be mean just trying to help.

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