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267gunman
While I like the idea of Han being a father figure for Ahsoka, it does seem a little out of character for him.
Could take a while.
And Han taking one Rex and Fives was pretty good, though meeting Ackbar was a little unexpected.
But it might go a long way to help when Han joins the Rebellion as a General later on.
Good work on this. Though it was hard to read in some places.
Write on!
267gunmanWhile I like the idea of Han being a father figure for Ahsoka, it does seem a little out of character for him.
Could take a while.
And Han taking one Rex and Fives was pretty good, though meeting Ackbar was a little unexpected.
But it might go a long way to help when Han joins the Rebellion as a General later on.
Good work on this. Though it was hard to read in some places.
Write on!
2/4/2013 c6 gunman
Not sure who this Jarik is, but I suspect that it's going to be something else to look out for in future for this story.
Jedi are forbidden to have relationships, but now that this new world has opened up for Ahsoka, I guess she can forgo that idea.
This chapter was pretty short, but still an amusing read.
Look forward to the next chapter.
Write on!
Not sure who this Jarik is, but I suspect that it's going to be something else to look out for in future for this story.
Jedi are forbidden to have relationships, but now that this new world has opened up for Ahsoka, I guess she can forgo that idea.
This chapter was pretty short, but still an amusing read.
Look forward to the next chapter.
Write on!
2/4/2013 c5 gunman
Correct me if I'm wrong, but... if her old outfit wasn't provacative enough, even a light blue version of it would attract alot of attention.
A cloak over this would be better. Even a white cloak or a pale gray one would do.
Though, I keep wondering how Lando got the Falcon as 'one' of his ships.
Regardless, its a good way to go for getting the Falcon and all.
Write on!
Correct me if I'm wrong, but... if her old outfit wasn't provacative enough, even a light blue version of it would attract alot of attention.
A cloak over this would be better. Even a white cloak or a pale gray one would do.
Though, I keep wondering how Lando got the Falcon as 'one' of his ships.
Regardless, its a good way to go for getting the Falcon and all.
Write on!
2/4/2013 c4 gunman
I've noticed that while you wrote another version of this chapter, I also noticed that there was some duplicate words in your sentences.
It kinda made the story difficult to read, but all in all it wasn't too bad.
Though, I question just how you are going about this with doing the same chapter over, just with a different outfit.
Regardless, this was still good.
Needs some editing and some polishing, but good.
Write on!
I've noticed that while you wrote another version of this chapter, I also noticed that there was some duplicate words in your sentences.
It kinda made the story difficult to read, but all in all it wasn't too bad.
Though, I question just how you are going about this with doing the same chapter over, just with a different outfit.
Regardless, this was still good.
Needs some editing and some polishing, but good.
Write on!
2/4/2013 c3 gunman
I've nver played Sabacc, or heard of it played, but if that's how Han won the Falcon, it's not a bad way to go.
Though this chapter did seem somewhat light on details, it wasn't bad.
Write on.
I've nver played Sabacc, or heard of it played, but if that's how Han won the Falcon, it's not a bad way to go.
Though this chapter did seem somewhat light on details, it wasn't bad.
Write on.
1/29/2013 c5 Guest
the last one, please! :)
the last one, please! :)
1/28/2013 c5 will zona
This chapter is sweet. I would love to see han fight rex. Keep up the good work.
This chapter is sweet. I would love to see han fight rex. Keep up the good work.
1/26/2013 c1 45QueenYoda
Okay, no offense, but with all the symbols frolicking around on the page, I didn't read more than five words of this chapter. They are a bit confusing. I think I know what your trying to do with them though. You know, there is a line bar up in the place where you store doc's? That line helps seperate time periods, POV's and a lot more. Don't worry, it took me awhile to figure it out, too.
45QueenYodaOkay, no offense, but with all the symbols frolicking around on the page, I didn't read more than five words of this chapter. They are a bit confusing. I think I know what your trying to do with them though. You know, there is a line bar up in the place where you store doc's? That line helps seperate time periods, POV's and a lot more. Don't worry, it took me awhile to figure it out, too.
1/24/2013 c2 267gunman
Not bad. It still seems a little rough and somewhat fast in some places, but its still a good read.
Also, when someone is stunned, they are unconscious, they can't talk. Or did that change somewhere between Episodes 3 and 4?
Anyway, good chapter.
Write on!
267gunmanNot bad. It still seems a little rough and somewhat fast in some places, but its still a good read.
Also, when someone is stunned, they are unconscious, they can't talk. Or did that change somewhere between Episodes 3 and 4?
Anyway, good chapter.
Write on!
1/24/2013 c2 will zona
This chapter is fantastic. Keep up the superb work.
This chapter is fantastic. Keep up the superb work.
1/19/2013 c1 will zona
This chapter is awesome. I love star wars. Keep up the amazing work.
This chapter is awesome. I love star wars. Keep up the amazing work.