for equivalent1/21/2014 c1 
70keep my issues drawn
ohmygod so i'm like a year late reading this ahh i'm sorry
this is so good! i loved your characterisations of dom and lysander and just the similarities and differences bit was really good and perfectly defined their relationship
this was so fab like ly being part of the family really, and him wanting to stay in england whilst dominique just wanted adventures and ahh
this was so good, thank you! (i'm sorry it took me so long to find this)
70keep my issues drawnohmygod so i'm like a year late reading this ahh i'm sorry
this is so good! i loved your characterisations of dom and lysander and just the similarities and differences bit was really good and perfectly defined their relationship
this was so fab like ly being part of the family really, and him wanting to stay in england whilst dominique just wanted adventures and ahh
this was so good, thank you! (i'm sorry it took me so long to find this)
2/3/2013 c1 aydentheamicable
Length doesn't matter when you can so perfectly sum up a relationship (a beautiful one at that) while still giving out awe inducing lines such as "they live on a set of scales, only adding to their lives what the other can handle" and many more. I relate to Dominique as someone who doesn't do much adventuring and loves the idea of it, as an escape from all the pressure of the teenage life. And Lysander is in a lot of ways what anyone would want in a partner. He completes Dominique like nobody else can and it really is these opposites that make the bond so much stronger and the relationship so much more believable and lovable. I can't comment too much when on the subject of characterization but I will say that you could definitely tell Lysander was Luna's son which is exactly what you want in a story such as this one (except for not taking Care of Magical Creatures which I found a little out of place). And the formatting in its self makes up for a little smaller word count. Incorporating the definitions isn't something you see a lot of but I really loved it and thought it really set the stage for what was going to come. The variety of sentence length was really pleasing and though the lack of capitals does throw me off a little bit, there is nothing glaringly obvious except for the extra two words that make up equivalent. I wouldn't usually mention something so small but when it's the very last word, you do notice it a bit more and it's not always the best way to end such a great story. Overall, you pack a very sweet punch with this little guy and totally hooked me when it comes to Lysander and Dominique!
Length doesn't matter when you can so perfectly sum up a relationship (a beautiful one at that) while still giving out awe inducing lines such as "they live on a set of scales, only adding to their lives what the other can handle" and many more. I relate to Dominique as someone who doesn't do much adventuring and loves the idea of it, as an escape from all the pressure of the teenage life. And Lysander is in a lot of ways what anyone would want in a partner. He completes Dominique like nobody else can and it really is these opposites that make the bond so much stronger and the relationship so much more believable and lovable. I can't comment too much when on the subject of characterization but I will say that you could definitely tell Lysander was Luna's son which is exactly what you want in a story such as this one (except for not taking Care of Magical Creatures which I found a little out of place). And the formatting in its self makes up for a little smaller word count. Incorporating the definitions isn't something you see a lot of but I really loved it and thought it really set the stage for what was going to come. The variety of sentence length was really pleasing and though the lack of capitals does throw me off a little bit, there is nothing glaringly obvious except for the extra two words that make up equivalent. I wouldn't usually mention something so small but when it's the very last word, you do notice it a bit more and it's not always the best way to end such a great story. Overall, you pack a very sweet punch with this little guy and totally hooked me when it comes to Lysander and Dominique!
1/31/2013 c1 8AleAC23
I love it, short but lovely.
The way you describe each one is nice, opposite and equivalent, made one for each other
8AleAC23I love it, short but lovely.
The way you describe each one is nice, opposite and equivalent, made one for each other
1/28/2013 c1 Icbfloggingon
But you know who I am...
That sounds creepy.
Always beautiful my darling.
'He's brave and she's scared but he's quiet and she's loud.'
OMGASDFDGHGJFKJHKLKJGDCAEBRH F;TYELNJDGBEQHGHINY that is quoteworthy. like 'if people were rain, i was a drizzle and she was a hurricane' quoteworthy.
stay beautiful! :)
But you know who I am...
That sounds creepy.
Always beautiful my darling.
'He's brave and she's scared but he's quiet and she's loud.'
OMGASDFDGHGJFKJHKLKJGDCAEBRH F;TYELNJDGBEQHGHINY that is quoteworthy. like 'if people were rain, i was a drizzle and she was a hurricane' quoteworthy.
stay beautiful! :)