1/16/2018 c1 GoddessKalina
Like the plot
But i could bearly get through it
For one as atated in another review you need to use Enter more
Second, i had to read alot of parts muliple times to understand them due to lack of punktuation
third, remember to Capitalise the first words in names
And last, this is just me pointing out something i saw from when i read the summary it's Altaïr, or at least Altair not altiar.
This is not to be mean but to point uot what you can improve.
Have a nice day

7/19/2013 c2 3Kenka
okay this is pretty hard for me to read because all the dialog is jumbled in one big paragraph you have to be more liberal on the use of the 'ENTER' button, trust me it will make things so much easier for the reader.