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4/25/2019 c15 7Cranky Monkey 699
Name of ramen stand owners are Teuchi and Ayame thou not 100% certain on Teuchi’s spelling
4/22/2019 c3 Guest
Remove all author comments in the story. You can put stuff like (I didn't...) in the bottom. It really destroys the reading flow when you place comments in the middle of the story.
4/24/2019 c53 1Flame Kitsune 15
Like I'm greatly enjoying the story so far but there are more than a few continuity issues that need to be addressed. and changed tp make the story flow better. as well as how it essentially is canon with a few changes here and there that addresses the relationships. And it feels like when plot is happening everyone seems to forget that they're in a relationship with the main character until it conveniently comes up again
4/21/2019 c68 gwb620
Aw poor Hanabi.
4/21/2019 c68 46Animaman
Good chapter, and funny how you pretty much had it where Hanabi has to start explaining a few things to Naruto on what her intentions are, especially with what she was hoping for on their first date. Also nice work on showing how Naruto almost seems to be getting singled out, even all of the respect. Be amazing if at some point, the girls don't end up doing something that brings up bad memories, and remind a couple of what Naruto had to grow without most of his life.
4/21/2019 c68 biginferno
fantastic chapter I really enjoyed it especially the flower shop scene
4/18/2019 c67 Aqua Rules
Woo hoo! Go Shino! I have never read a fic with that happening before. Great one! :D
4/6/2019 c67 Guest
Nee, you forgot that naruto and jiraya were the ones of brig fu to konoha
4/5/2019 c67 Guest
Why is Fu reintroducing herself when she already met Naruto? That makes no damn sense, bro. Two, can we see other girls other than Haku and Hinata? Shit son.
3/30/2019 c67 Guest
but Naruto already knows Fuu when he visited his village
3/31/2019 c3 starburst98
while this story is good you have some serious flow issues. as in, while mostly grammatically correct people talk a little too much like robots. and your descriptions are too "matter of fact"
3/29/2019 c67 Animaman
Well, good chapter, and nice work on showing Shino gaining a personality because of Fu.

Wondering how you plan to show Naruto deal with oppressors, especially if they end up revealing some things that he don't want to have revealed to those close to him, just to give them a taste of what he had to deal with for so long.
3/13/2019 c66 4Monster King
Great job shame you stopped writing the story
3/10/2019 c66 nero
Bro what is the total name list of naruto's harem.
3/8/2019 c66 Guest
Are hinata and haku only the ones who will action with naruto or the other girls will finally take part?
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