for Naruto: the chakra molder1/3/2015 c14 Guest
Yin chakra and yang chakra weren't invented by a fanfic author it's actually in naruto yin release yang release and yin-yang release
Yin chakra and yang chakra weren't invented by a fanfic author it's actually in naruto yin release yang release and yin-yang release
1/2/2015 c17 
46Animaman
Nice work and curious if Naruto would be crazy enough to try and combine the chains with the rasengan. Anyway, I'm not sure if it already happen, but maybe you should have Sakura try to make some kind of peace with Naruto for all of the things she put him through.
46AnimamanNice work and curious if Naruto would be crazy enough to try and combine the chains with the rasengan. Anyway, I'm not sure if it already happen, but maybe you should have Sakura try to make some kind of peace with Naruto for all of the things she put him through.
1/1/2015 c4 Daedric X
Probably pointless, but I just want to post it in hopes to improve the chance of not having Sakura and Ino in the harem in the following chapter... They're to fangirly. That and throughout the series I'm used to Sakura being a bitch and Sasuke having a 3 feet, 4.5 inches thick pole up his ass. (And in this case, back to the matter at hand, you portrayed Ino as a annoying girl whose curiousity is enough to trespass other people belongings... :/ )
Interesting story nonetheless, albeit a bit annoyed with 'lets go through Naruto's room and find some forbidden stuffs'. Always did like to read a fem. Haku
Probably pointless, but I just want to post it in hopes to improve the chance of not having Sakura and Ino in the harem in the following chapter... They're to fangirly. That and throughout the series I'm used to Sakura being a bitch and Sasuke having a 3 feet, 4.5 inches thick pole up his ass. (And in this case, back to the matter at hand, you portrayed Ino as a annoying girl whose curiousity is enough to trespass other people belongings... :/ )
Interesting story nonetheless, albeit a bit annoyed with 'lets go through Naruto's room and find some forbidden stuffs'. Always did like to read a fem. Haku
1/1/2015 c1 blueeyedhotty
I went to read the new chapters but it said not found and my account says 15 chapters not 17.I don't understand what happened to them.
I went to read the new chapters but it said not found and my account says 15 chapters not 17.I don't understand what happened to them.
1/1/2015 c15 star reader trey
I have a question you do know that the chains that kushina and naruto in your story use can hold demons. So why didn't naruto use it. Ik he not very proficient in it but even when kushina had the nine tails removed and was dying she still managed to hold the nine tails back. So the must be super effective against them. Other than that one point I enjoy your story greatly even when a few mistakes here and there its well written
I have a question you do know that the chains that kushina and naruto in your story use can hold demons. So why didn't naruto use it. Ik he not very proficient in it but even when kushina had the nine tails removed and was dying she still managed to hold the nine tails back. So the must be super effective against them. Other than that one point I enjoy your story greatly even when a few mistakes here and there its well written
11/22/2014 c15 46Animaman
story is okay and in need of an update. anyway, if it's not too late, please add Sakura to the harem because why make it where she is developing feelings for Naruto only not getting to act on them.
46Animamanstory is okay and in need of an update. anyway, if it's not too late, please add Sakura to the harem because why make it where she is developing feelings for Naruto only not getting to act on them.
11/13/2014 c15 Guest
Please update soon great fanfic
Please update soon great fanfic
11/9/2014 c2 2Lotharin CW
This is unbearable, you use the word "Course" WAY too much, your writing style seems rushed; almost like you just want to get it over with and done. On another note, I do like the premise of the story, you seem to have hit up on a good idea. Work on the problems I mentioned, and things can only go better from there.
2Lotharin CWThis is unbearable, you use the word "Course" WAY too much, your writing style seems rushed; almost like you just want to get it over with and done. On another note, I do like the premise of the story, you seem to have hit up on a good idea. Work on the problems I mentioned, and things can only go better from there.
10/21/2014 c15 Guest
Just a small spelling error I found and would like to point out. The word is spelled 'jinchuuriki', if I'm not wrong, although there are many variations to consider as well. I think I'm using the one on the wiki.
Just a small spelling error I found and would like to point out. The word is spelled 'jinchuuriki', if I'm not wrong, although there are many variations to consider as well. I think I'm using the one on the wiki.
10/11/2014 c1 Jose19
I always like when writers come with a unique bloodline in such fics like this because it shows creativity and imagination but I wonder if Naruto also has the Element of Wind as his affinity.
I always like when writers come with a unique bloodline in such fics like this because it shows creativity and imagination but I wonder if Naruto also has the Element of Wind as his affinity.
7/12/2014 c15 thor94
Good chapter and story.
I like naruto relationship with his girls. Even with kyuubi who tease naruto about girlfriends and cra.
How sasuke will react about naruto in 2 month obtained the last yuki, a good cooker and two clan heir in his harem?
Good chapter and story.
I like naruto relationship with his girls. Even with kyuubi who tease naruto about girlfriends and cra.
How sasuke will react about naruto in 2 month obtained the last yuki, a good cooker and two clan heir in his harem?
7/6/2014 c2 Guest
Kushina Uzumaki Namikaze you had a spelling mistake
Kushina Uzumaki Namikaze you had a spelling mistake
7/8/2014 c13 Dontforgettologout.lessontime
SOPA is beyond horrible but I don't know if it effects me (I live in a different Country)?!
SOPA is beyond horrible but I don't know if it effects me (I live in a different Country)?!