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2/26/2022 c88 thor94
fun chapter.
Liked the four wall reference to the manga and anime.
The buffon orochimaru spoken is definitely jiraiya, at least with naruto. In fact kishimoto turned sensei into useless buffons only when they trained naruto.
How to explain the 3 years and 1 student ending in genin to only genin when the same ninja was able to do a few months and 3 students ending in nothing to jonin
2/26/2022 c1 7nasapeepolover116
also I thought that chakra chains were actually a bloodline just it was actually pretty rare in the clan
2/26/2022 c1 nasapeepolover116
nvm
2/26/2022 c2 nasapeepolover116
I liked it but I'm almost 100 percent sure kakashi knew that Naruto is Minato's son he was just to in greif or something
2/26/2022 c88 4Monster King
Awesome work
2/9/2022 c9 13Trace Reading
yeah this one has thoroughly succumbed to No Original Thoughts no Jutsu.

and seriously. Run through your chapters, purge all the mid-paragraph author's notes, and then reupload them. Same with the shit at the top saying 'blah blah this is human this is thoughts this is demon'
2/6/2022 c1 flamberge egg
Yo, okay, stop putting author's notes in the middle of everything.

Also? Japanese naming convention rarely if ever hyphenates the family name. Prestigious families would take precedence over command-level military service, ergo, Kushina if she didn't choose to adopt the Namikaze name to make her marriage visible would more than likely encourage Minato to take on the Uzumaki name instead.
2/8/2022 c6 Trace Reading
Too many author's notes interrupting things. Also. Proofreading. These chapters need some serious work to be brought up to snuff.
2/6/2022 c4 Trace Reading
Kushina being a swordfighter with some fucky-looking sword cliche CHECK.
2/3/2022 c6 1ErwinG'Arc
Hah... I was hoping to see no main girl here. Oh well. It's good while it lasts I guess. Thanks for the story tho, keep up the great work.
2/3/2022 c3 13Trace Reading
wasted my review note last chapter but yeah, the CRA? What a silly fanon cliche that is. Nope, clans and families go extinct all the time, there's no bloodline so special that it can't be wiped out. No bloodline so unique or indispensable that it justifies anyone getting a harem.
2/3/2022 c2 Trace Reading
nobody. can see. without pupils.

stop that.
2/1/2022 c87 Borello
good work and really funny with inoichi.
2/1/2022 c6 Sminly
Ok the sentence where Naruto talks about the big happy family...yeah the start of that paragraph is jumbled with in complete sentences...I also saw a couple more places but they were minor...also have been reading since 2018 keep up the good work
2/1/2022 c4 BoredAsUsual34
i see ya a naruhina fan and find their reletionship interesting... i can't really understand that since if ya look at it objectively it seems she basically stalked naruto for the whole part of naruto and most of shippuden hiding how she felt being to shy and naruto being so goddamned dense still crushing on sakura for so goddamned long doesn't make sense either hell he should have gotten over his crush on sakura during the 3 year training/ not really learing much besides basic shit while jiraya is to busy with his research to properly train him as best as he can just look at his skill set in the start of shippuden shadowclone rasengan( not really fully mastered since he has to use a shadow clone to make a rasengan) the basic academy justu and the infamous talk no jutsu aka plot amor and his outfit isn't fit for stealth or anything just makes him a target. anyway sry for my rant there about canon naruto skill set, don't get me started on his damned personality which i belive fully is just a mask that he used for to fking long that it became his personality permenantly, and if he wasn't so dense he could have gotten any girl that showed an interest in him like shion or someone else hell ino would be a good choice. so all in all hinata only got lucky that she was around when he stopped being so damned dense and the other girls had found someone else so to me it proved that if ya stalked someone for long enough and only hope for the best without doing much effort then ya can still get ya man
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