for Naruto: the chakra molder4/6/2013 c4 
7Starter
Please let Haku be in Naruto's Harem, and Kurenai! Oh and Ayame! Oh and Samui too!
7StarterPlease let Haku be in Naruto's Harem, and Kurenai! Oh and Ayame! Oh and Samui too!
4/6/2013 c3 Starter
The word to describe it is written awkwardly and not 'acwardly' still as I say it's a good story, but try to limit Ino and Sakura so that they remain faithful to Sasuke.
The word to describe it is written awkwardly and not 'acwardly' still as I say it's a good story, but try to limit Ino and Sakura so that they remain faithful to Sasuke.
4/6/2013 c2 Starter
You know, after reading your story I think the way you try using the word 'course' is in the context of 'of course'. Which I believe you unfortunately misused it, hopefully it'll change in the future. Also another minor error is the word skipping was changed into skiiping, and though was changed into thought; personally I believe the second one is due to microsoft word's auto correct. awesome story though
You know, after reading your story I think the way you try using the word 'course' is in the context of 'of course'. Which I believe you unfortunately misused it, hopefully it'll change in the future. Also another minor error is the word skipping was changed into skiiping, and though was changed into thought; personally I believe the second one is due to microsoft word's auto correct. awesome story though
4/6/2013 c1 Starter
Good story and I from the summary I can see you gave Naruto something quite original, just a minor problem in the story; especially your last two paragraphs. Your beginning word is unreasonable; 'Course'? are you suggesting it as something along the lines of through the course of Naruto's killing spree or something else? Still a good start for your story
Good story and I from the summary I can see you gave Naruto something quite original, just a minor problem in the story; especially your last two paragraphs. Your beginning word is unreasonable; 'Course'? are you suggesting it as something along the lines of through the course of Naruto's killing spree or something else? Still a good start for your story
4/6/2013 c2 22SSJ3 Kyuubi Gohan
Oh no please tell me there won't be any naru/hina or naru/saku *crosses fingers in hope*
22SSJ3 Kyuubi GohanOh no please tell me there won't be any naru/hina or naru/saku *crosses fingers in hope*
4/5/2013 c2 poleno
Moron.. First u state that Kakashi has no chakra, and than he spawns shadow clones and fire and water jutsu...
Moron.. First u state that Kakashi has no chakra, and than he spawns shadow clones and fire and water jutsu...
4/5/2013 c4 Listern
This story has it's intresting moments, at least someone is finally doing the chakra molding idea.
This story has it's intresting moments, at least someone is finally doing the chakra molding idea.
3/24/2013 c3 One Warrior 86
Okay here we go. As far as the overall story goes its not a bad concept, though the chains have been done quite a few times so you are going to have to do a really good job with them to impress anyone with them although it seems like he can create other things out of his chakra which hasn't been done nearly as much so that's a positive. Something I would like to point out is something that should not be used when Aburame talk unless it is like a special circumstance where they are explaining something or figuring something out. Just stating a fact isn't something that can be done logically is all I mean.
Okay here we go. As far as the overall story goes its not a bad concept, though the chains have been done quite a few times so you are going to have to do a really good job with them to impress anyone with them although it seems like he can create other things out of his chakra which hasn't been done nearly as much so that's a positive. Something I would like to point out is something that should not be used when Aburame talk unless it is like a special circumstance where they are explaining something or figuring something out. Just stating a fact isn't something that can be done logically is all I mean.
3/23/2013 c3 Sage-Of-Pure-Rage
From the looks of this chapter hinata in the harem well I hate her to the point were I dream of her dieing :( oh well good story but I can't read this no more
From the looks of this chapter hinata in the harem well I hate her to the point were I dream of her dieing :( oh well good story but I can't read this no more
3/23/2013 c2 Sage-Of-Pure-Rage
I'm not sure if you trying to keep the harem a surprise or not but plz pm and let me know if hinata in the harem or not cause if she is ill have to stop reading
I'm not sure if you trying to keep the harem a surprise or not but plz pm and let me know if hinata in the harem or not cause if she is ill have to stop reading