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8/20/2013 c3 11WaddlesThePenguin
Shouldn't it be "Boys, Carmen," instead of "Boys and Carmen"?
6/30/2013 c9 Me
Nice use of dramatic irony with the werewolf. Tut tut Onesiepenguin. Celestial Secrets is great. You are good with code. Lucy is cool. Jupiter Boom is awesome! Is Lucy growing closer to Tom or Jason? So much drama!
6/22/2013 c9 WaddlesThePenguin
I didn't know you could only review once so I'll review 2 chapters
7: good chapter. I loved the library scene. Lucy is a comedy gold mine.
8: there are a couple of mistakes eg "he might as well of..." should be "he might as well have (or well've)...'. I'm predicting that Jason will develop feelings for Lucy and her for him too for a bit. That would be dramatic and interesting to see toms reaction. But content is what matters most and it was a good chapter
5/1/2013 c1 fictioncreator7898
i like the plot but there are a few errors
4/21/2013 c8 Anonymous
Hi really funny. That thing Jason did is so cool! I love Lucy. Clever how you fitted in normal teenage/young adult problems into an adventure story. Can't wait for the next chapter
4/20/2013 c8 Me
Best chapter yet so funny. I love Lucy! She's so funny. Like an old english cockney. Clever idea with the letter. Love the scene on the ship. Can't wait to see the next Dawn Saga. Was that Venus Burst thing psynergy? Or has some evil spirit possessed him? Ooh! Maybe it was a weapon skill! Can't wait for the next chapter! And to see Matt get embarrassed! LOL! Bye.
4/14/2013 c8 2del-del-acc
Great as always o
I like the part where Jason change the words on the letter.
Oh yeah, I don't know how to say this, but perhaps you should just use "Enter" instead of "SHIFTEnter". It's very hard for me to read. Hope this makes sense

Anyway, can't wait to see more!
4/9/2013 c8 11WaddlesThePenguin
Hi this is SYRUP. I signed up so I've changed to SYRUPFACE.
I'm writing a dragon quest ix fanfiction called 'celestial secrets'.
It's about the other party members' point of view.
Will post another review once the 1st chapters up and running!
4/7/2013 c8 4Solar Boy Aaron
Is Veridi supposed to be a KId Icarus reference? Good chapter, I can't wait to hear Jason scold Matthew :)
4/5/2013 c7 Syrup
How did they get Ra on the boat? I thought he didn't like water
4/5/2013 c6 2del-del-acc
Oh well. This is GREAT! Need a repetition? This is GREAT! GREAT!
Um... I learn many new vocabularies from this. And thanks for the fighting scene, I now have a little illustration to write a fighting scene for my story.
Again, This is GREAT!
4/4/2013 c7 Me
Good chapter. Can't wait for the next. Cool horses.
4/4/2013 c7 Syrup
Yes I am crazy and so is he.
4/3/2013 c7 Anonymous
Love the chapter. The houses sound so cute and awesome. I spotted Ra the Egyptian sun God and Khonsu the Egyptian moon God. Good mythology! Syrup says that you're crazy. Is that true? He seems crazy enough, does he really annoy you that much? I agree with Tutien99 about the Zeus not being out of place, but Thor does seem better. Loving the story! Can't wait for the next update! Bye!
4/3/2013 c7 Syrup
So I AM older than u baby bro. Teehee I like irritating him Anonymous it's actually kinda fun. We're both CRAZY and our mams a bit wacko too so it's all good fun. Crazy is the new normal as my gf says

Fingers crossed our little brother will be wacky too
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