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9/23/2015 c1 4jadeblackheart4
I cant wait for more!
4/28/2015 c1 59jaylene.olebar.3
keep itup!
5/30/2014 c1 1Chise Sakamoto
Cool! Add in something about putting a unit in tutus!
4/27/2013 c1 36Rrit
I like the thought be hind all this but the fact that they let the kids shoot guns, and do the opstical course that they technically wouldn't be even tall enough for seems unreal and crack!fic-y along with Tom being there.

But I can see how it would go along with the story.

The diouloge in the parenthesis was hard to follow, I would go over that and re-define who's speaking.

The game that you where going on about in the beginning, I think that I would be easier to just write.

Update soon, I'm excited to see where this is going :)


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