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2/19/2013 c1 Kane
First, DON'T Stop writing on this story it would be far to great a loss, for it's potential is just THAT immense...

As for the the chapter itself, well there were some plips here and there slightly made me wonder about their such as a instance were you wrote "It" in reference to the Larvae when instead it should have been It's (though I am not 100% sure about that) and some other instances were you used the wrong tenses here and there but it's nothing a beta reader shouldn't be able to help you with...

As for where you want to go with this well, will Eragon eventually join the Swarm as well?

2/19/2013 c1 21edboy4926
Interesting intro
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