for Memories of Rin6/26/2022 c2 Unknown
Maybe the ending could be them meeting Rin again which this new way of seeing him and reacting to him while Rin reacts to them?
Maybe the ending could be them meeting Rin again which this new way of seeing him and reacting to him while Rin reacts to them?
1/27/2018 c2 
2Killua Lawliet
I think that you should include their reaction to seeing Rin again if you want to improve the ending
2Killua LawlietI think that you should include their reaction to seeing Rin again if you want to improve the ending
8/14/2016 c2 2Tsubaki Yuzuki
I think you should write about how they changed when they see Rin again. Rin would be really confused and the exwires would apologise and all!
2Tsubaki YuzukiI think you should write about how they changed when they see Rin again. Rin would be really confused and the exwires would apologise and all!
4/12/2016 c2 27TETRACIDE
NOW WAY THAT'S IT!?
Here's how to make it better:::
make them meet rin and show us how exactly they had changed!
27TETRACIDENOW WAY THAT'S IT!?
Here's how to make it better:::
make them meet rin and show us how exactly they had changed!
4/12/2016 c1 TETRACIDE
father fujimoto said "get lots of friends and girlfriends"...
GIRLFRIENDS WITH AN "S"!?
father fujimoto said "get lots of friends and girlfriends"...
GIRLFRIENDS WITH AN "S"!?
3/18/2016 c2 Screw you
Screw you!continue the damn story
Screw you!continue the damn story
7/1/2015 c2 Guest
It was worth the wait. But you could add some parts such as the first day of cram school, or when he first met Mephisto. Also as an extra chapter the afterthoughts of the characters and how they changed their way of thoughts to Rin.
It was worth the wait. But you could add some parts such as the first day of cram school, or when he first met Mephisto. Also as an extra chapter the afterthoughts of the characters and how they changed their way of thoughts to Rin.
3/27/2015 c2 kittymotheangry
I think you should do another chapter with a paragraph or so of every ones individual thoughts about what they had seen. Then bring rin in and have them confess what they had seen or explain how they feel or some thing. I think you could make it very interesting this way and because your really good at writing lol. Kitty ( w )
I think you should do another chapter with a paragraph or so of every ones individual thoughts about what they had seen. Then bring rin in and have them confess what they had seen or explain how they feel or some thing. I think you could make it very interesting this way and because your really good at writing lol. Kitty ( w )
3/25/2015 c2 2casualotaku27
This was great. Maybe do a point of view of the other characters in your next story
2casualotaku27This was great. Maybe do a point of view of the other characters in your next story
3/25/2015 c2 Guest
I think you should also add in the memories of when Rin and Yukio were fighting the hobgoblins in the beginning and Yukio blames Rin.
I think you should also add in the memories of when Rin and Yukio were fighting the hobgoblins in the beginning and Yukio blames Rin.