
3/15/2013 c2
4Greatazuredragon
I like this, its original in a good way. looking forward to the next chapther.

I like this, its original in a good way. looking forward to the next chapther.
3/10/2013 c2 Guest
Love it! please update frequently. Thank you
Love it! please update frequently. Thank you
3/8/2013 c2
1hello2000
Line breaks! Have you heard of them? Use them for transition from one scene to another. I got lost while scrolling down, and a little dizzy. Other than that, its good.

Line breaks! Have you heard of them? Use them for transition from one scene to another. I got lost while scrolling down, and a little dizzy. Other than that, its good.
3/7/2013 c2 Kropotkin
The premise of this story is great, and very interesting as many times I have wondered what Kirito would have been like if he was more confident and outgoing, so it is very intriguing to see the choices he is making in this fic.
I understand that this will change much of the story, as most of it revolves around Kirito's forced seclusion as well as his status as a beater, so Iit will be awesome to see the butterfly effect of changes that will happen because of a change in Kirito's personality.
Your grammar is a little inconsistent and doesn't make sense in some parts, but trivial things like that can be fixed with a beta or proofreader.
Other than that I am really enjoying this so far.
Keep up the good work!
The premise of this story is great, and very interesting as many times I have wondered what Kirito would have been like if he was more confident and outgoing, so it is very intriguing to see the choices he is making in this fic.
I understand that this will change much of the story, as most of it revolves around Kirito's forced seclusion as well as his status as a beater, so Iit will be awesome to see the butterfly effect of changes that will happen because of a change in Kirito's personality.
Your grammar is a little inconsistent and doesn't make sense in some parts, but trivial things like that can be fixed with a beta or proofreader.
Other than that I am really enjoying this so far.
Keep up the good work!
3/7/2013 c1
1Starkaster
I had no idea that kendo in Japan at the national level doesn't separate boys and girls in competition! How progressive!

I had no idea that kendo in Japan at the national level doesn't separate boys and girls in competition! How progressive!
3/7/2013 c1
1hello2000
This make for a good back story for ToumaFF's Prince of Swords, you should go check it out if you are stuck, his story is somewhat similar to yours, with Kirito continuing Kendo and the close relationship with Sugu. Carry On!

This make for a good back story for ToumaFF's Prince of Swords, you should go check it out if you are stuck, his story is somewhat similar to yours, with Kirito continuing Kendo and the close relationship with Sugu. Carry On!
3/4/2013 c2 Stormraven
Hi, really like your story. I've read a couple SAO fics, and haven't really seen any that have finished. Great start, very interesting how you are changing Kirito's personality and playing style in-game. Hope to see more from you in the future! Ganbatte!
Hi, really like your story. I've read a couple SAO fics, and haven't really seen any that have finished. Great start, very interesting how you are changing Kirito's personality and playing style in-game. Hope to see more from you in the future! Ganbatte!
3/2/2013 c2 Guest
I love this Kirito. So selfless. Great job.
I love this Kirito. So selfless. Great job.
3/1/2013 c2 Azahra
i really like it :D
its something different and really good written so keep up the good work
i really like it :D
its something different and really good written so keep up the good work
3/1/2013 c2
1KumaXIII
Nice work done here, it is really nicely done, in my personal opinion it is a great job for a reboot kind of fanfic, the characters doesn't seem OOC compared as to how they started in the series, the confidence change in Kirito doesn't feel forced or rushed. Truly a wonderful job for just 2 chapters. I'll keep looking forward to how you develop the characters and the story in this reboot of yours, keep the wonderful job and I hope that you can update quickly.

Nice work done here, it is really nicely done, in my personal opinion it is a great job for a reboot kind of fanfic, the characters doesn't seem OOC compared as to how they started in the series, the confidence change in Kirito doesn't feel forced or rushed. Truly a wonderful job for just 2 chapters. I'll keep looking forward to how you develop the characters and the story in this reboot of yours, keep the wonderful job and I hope that you can update quickly.
2/28/2013 c2
2SilverFlameHaze
...I fucking love it... Forget the "potential" of an epic story, as this along could be a two-shot of the beginning of an epic story. I'm glad it's not. All I can say is that I hope you enjoy writing, because your fans, including myself, are going to enjoy reading.

...I fucking love it... Forget the "potential" of an epic story, as this along could be a two-shot of the beginning of an epic story. I'm glad it's not. All I can say is that I hope you enjoy writing, because your fans, including myself, are going to enjoy reading.
2/28/2013 c1 SilverFlameHaze
...This has the potential of one of those great epic stories! :O Nice job! The only thing I could really see wrong was a few grammar mistakes... And a few mistakes that made it look like the novel, somehow. You know what I'm talking about right? Anyway, Great job. Hope to see more of it in the next chapter.
...This has the potential of one of those great epic stories! :O Nice job! The only thing I could really see wrong was a few grammar mistakes... And a few mistakes that made it look like the novel, somehow. You know what I'm talking about right? Anyway, Great job. Hope to see more of it in the next chapter.
2/28/2013 c1 Guest
You need to touch up on your spelling/grammer. Or get a beta reader to do that for you. Spelling and grammatical mistakes make for an annoying read.
You need to touch up on your spelling/grammer. Or get a beta reader to do that for you. Spelling and grammatical mistakes make for an annoying read.
2/28/2013 c2 this account is null
Plz keep writing! SAO was a nice anime and night novel series but it was a bunch of wasted potential too. I think you can fix that!
Plz keep writing! SAO was a nice anime and night novel series but it was a bunch of wasted potential too. I think you can fix that!