for Harry Potter and the Four Horsemen1/20/2023 c3 flashingreeneyes
My guess is Pugsly (oops! I meant Pansy) will be the first to be taught a lesson!
My guess is Pugsly (oops! I meant Pansy) will be the first to be taught a lesson!
1/20/2023 c2 flashingreeneyes
James is quite the dick, yeah? Laughable how just ‘crossing paths’ could possibly land a child in Azcaban, especially if he’s claiming that Harry is a squib! He and Dumbass BELONG together. Do they even HAVE a Bridge Night in the Seventh Level of Hell?
James is quite the dick, yeah? Laughable how just ‘crossing paths’ could possibly land a child in Azcaban, especially if he’s claiming that Harry is a squib! He and Dumbass BELONG together. Do they even HAVE a Bridge Night in the Seventh Level of Hell?
1/20/2023 c1 flashingreeneyes
Hmmmm . . . I don’t think Harry SHOULD hold himself back . . . Just sayin
Hmmmm . . . I don’t think Harry SHOULD hold himself back . . . Just sayin
10/26/2022 c15 
1Darknessdawns
Well, now that the story is over I can give my final review. Other than the typos and confusion I came across in the beginning I didn't find any others. It was clearly stated throughout the rest of the piece that Dante/Harry is the older twin. It was also a bit amusing that Lily had two sets. Anyways, I'm not sure how I felt about the ending. It almost felt like the last chapter was from a different story with how much changed. However it was interesting and I was amused by the references. Personally I wish there had been more build up to the ending especially with the turnaround from so many characters. It's just really hard to see why all the sudden forgiveness, especially with how deep the betrayal was. I also would have enjoyed seeing more of the character development of the Horsemen. It's unfortunate that most of that happened off screen. I can understand why, I too wanted to get to the good stuff. However after their return things moved very quickly and I didn't really get the chance to see how each of them changed and grew into their roles. Then to have things make such an abrupt change in direction was a bit disappointing. I had grown to like the dark feel of the piece and things were set up nicely for such a thing. In the end I really wish the war with Voldemort and the whole returning of balance thing had taken longer and been more explored, especially since the whole balance thing seemed to be scrapped with the ending. As it was, I still enjoyed the story and found it interesting. I just wish more of the elements introduced would have been explored and explained more.
1DarknessdawnsWell, now that the story is over I can give my final review. Other than the typos and confusion I came across in the beginning I didn't find any others. It was clearly stated throughout the rest of the piece that Dante/Harry is the older twin. It was also a bit amusing that Lily had two sets. Anyways, I'm not sure how I felt about the ending. It almost felt like the last chapter was from a different story with how much changed. However it was interesting and I was amused by the references. Personally I wish there had been more build up to the ending especially with the turnaround from so many characters. It's just really hard to see why all the sudden forgiveness, especially with how deep the betrayal was. I also would have enjoyed seeing more of the character development of the Horsemen. It's unfortunate that most of that happened off screen. I can understand why, I too wanted to get to the good stuff. However after their return things moved very quickly and I didn't really get the chance to see how each of them changed and grew into their roles. Then to have things make such an abrupt change in direction was a bit disappointing. I had grown to like the dark feel of the piece and things were set up nicely for such a thing. In the end I really wish the war with Voldemort and the whole returning of balance thing had taken longer and been more explored, especially since the whole balance thing seemed to be scrapped with the ending. As it was, I still enjoyed the story and found it interesting. I just wish more of the elements introduced would have been explored and explained more.
10/26/2022 c3 Darknessdawns
So here I am chapter three and I have come across another significant typo. It's listed earlier in the story that Harry and Jason are twins, now here Harry is a week older? How does that happen? Hours, minutes yes. Week, no. And if I haven't miss read things it was also stated that Harry was younger and now older. For the Overall story this is probably a minor thing however it is confusing at this point. As far as the story goes I'm enjoying it so far, typos and all. I honestly can't wait to see where this goes.
So here I am chapter three and I have come across another significant typo. It's listed earlier in the story that Harry and Jason are twins, now here Harry is a week older? How does that happen? Hours, minutes yes. Week, no. And if I haven't miss read things it was also stated that Harry was younger and now older. For the Overall story this is probably a minor thing however it is confusing at this point. As far as the story goes I'm enjoying it so far, typos and all. I honestly can't wait to see where this goes.
10/25/2022 c1 Darknessdawns
ok, I'm a few chapters in and I've noticed a rather glaring typo. The word siblings keeps being used where children should be. Harry and Jason are siblings, but the children of James and Lily. So far that's the only typo I've seen but I've seen it twice so far in the first chapter.
ok, I'm a few chapters in and I've noticed a rather glaring typo. The word siblings keeps being used where children should be. Harry and Jason are siblings, but the children of James and Lily. So far that's the only typo I've seen but I've seen it twice so far in the first chapter.
9/29/2022 c15 Rossitis
Spoilers: Wow, this chapter seems like it is from another story altogether. James’ forgiveness comes too easily and seems quite forced and unearned. Jason’s as well but he at least risked something to earn it, though I don’t believe it enough to have harry completely forgiven him. Just cause james says he’s sorry he deserves forgiveness? After cheating his wife and abusing his children, his daughter included? The writing in the last chapter came up lacking and rushed.
Spoilers: Wow, this chapter seems like it is from another story altogether. James’ forgiveness comes too easily and seems quite forced and unearned. Jason’s as well but he at least risked something to earn it, though I don’t believe it enough to have harry completely forgiven him. Just cause james says he’s sorry he deserves forgiveness? After cheating his wife and abusing his children, his daughter included? The writing in the last chapter came up lacking and rushed.
9/22/2022 c4 ImmortalsDoItForever
How can they not be twins? If Lily was mother to both, and carried them at the same time, they are twins. Did you perhaps mean they aren't identical twins, but fraternal? That is certainly possible.
How can they not be twins? If Lily was mother to both, and carried them at the same time, they are twins. Did you perhaps mean they aren't identical twins, but fraternal? That is certainly possible.
9/12/2022 c15 2subhogue
Great story, 10/10 read, would recommend. To avoid spoilers I won't go into specifics here. I will say I don't 100% like everything about the end, but most of that is personal preference and it is a good ending overall!
2subhogueGreat story, 10/10 read, would recommend. To avoid spoilers I won't go into specifics here. I will say I don't 100% like everything about the end, but most of that is personal preference and it is a good ending overall!
8/23/2022 c15 Guest
Awesome story!
Awesome story!
6/26/2022 c15 2A10riddick
Also what would have been interesting is that Hunter could have asked if they could once in a while take up the mantel of horsemen every now and then now that the curse of hatred has been broken! But at the same time made it where the death rider can't take the seals from the others.
Another option is that all 4 unlock a demonic form like Harry/ Dante did but not at the cost of their souls since it is Hunterthe is the new first one.
I thought that Harry was going to pull a Johnny Blaze where he keeps the curse but uses it against Mestophilies and give the other three their seals back.
Would have loved to see some Neville/Luna moments if they were going to be a pairing!
2A10riddickAlso what would have been interesting is that Hunter could have asked if they could once in a while take up the mantel of horsemen every now and then now that the curse of hatred has been broken! But at the same time made it where the death rider can't take the seals from the others.
Another option is that all 4 unlock a demonic form like Harry/ Dante did but not at the cost of their souls since it is Hunterthe is the new first one.
I thought that Harry was going to pull a Johnny Blaze where he keeps the curse but uses it against Mestophilies and give the other three their seals back.
Would have loved to see some Neville/Luna moments if they were going to be a pairing!
6/26/2022 c15 A10riddick
Great story!
Loved it!
I have one question though is that how did James get into the trouble to begin with? Why would he want to do what Kassie wanted? Was he forced or was he of free will? How did he even end up with the other lady to begin with?
Great story!
Loved it!
I have one question though is that how did James get into the trouble to begin with? Why would he want to do what Kassie wanted? Was he forced or was he of free will? How did he even end up with the other lady to begin with?