for Bolt: Bolt's Worst Dream Ever8/31/2013 c1 
47KatieMarie999
Well I promised my reviewers a review for a review so I read over this chapter. Bear in mind it's been a really long time since I've seen Bolt (something like 4 years) so I don't remember it as clearly as I could. I think your sentence structure and grammar is great. Your descriptions are good too, they definitely add to the tension of this first scene. The first person narration is a good touch. My only real issue with the story is that I highly doubt it's in character for any of the characters to swear. But that's rather minor. If you aren't already (and it seems that you are) you need to keep on writing. :)
47KatieMarie999Well I promised my reviewers a review for a review so I read over this chapter. Bear in mind it's been a really long time since I've seen Bolt (something like 4 years) so I don't remember it as clearly as I could. I think your sentence structure and grammar is great. Your descriptions are good too, they definitely add to the tension of this first scene. The first person narration is a good touch. My only real issue with the story is that I highly doubt it's in character for any of the characters to swear. But that's rather minor. If you aren't already (and it seems that you are) you need to keep on writing. :)
6/1/2013 c6 1Rtezy
Good Ones , it Almost perfect , you just have to work on the Paragraph . that's it the Other it's almost too good :D
1RtezyGood Ones , it Almost perfect , you just have to work on the Paragraph . that's it the Other it's almost too good :D
6/1/2013 c4 Rtezy
Good , and The super Bark was Super ( HAHAHA ) .and i think you should Repair this part 'Shit! The must of noticed me!' 'Shit ! They must of noticed me ' little detail you miss , but i guess people will understand with or without an Reparation :D
Good , and The super Bark was Super ( HAHAHA ) .and i think you should Repair this part 'Shit! The must of noticed me!' 'Shit ! They must of noticed me ' little detail you miss , but i guess people will understand with or without an Reparation :D
6/1/2013 c3 Rtezy
Nice ... but what two dogs doing in a highway , i though they was in a Petsitter , the must been have an Owner , not a free roam like that . :) sorry if i much complaining , but i'm Perfectionist type of man , i'm will so curious if i don't understand where's the story goes , the only way i could find out , is asking the author . :D
Nice ... but what two dogs doing in a highway , i though they was in a Petsitter , the must been have an Owner , not a free roam like that . :) sorry if i much complaining , but i'm Perfectionist type of man , i'm will so curious if i don't understand where's the story goes , the only way i could find out , is asking the author . :D
6/1/2013 c2 Rtezy
good ones you put an Really detail on the story , i even can played the Scene in my head _... only one thing , I think penny doesn't have dad , as longest i know in Bolt 1 he's never appeared or mentioned in the Real life by her mother or by penny . even if he exist he must be appeared on the Ending , or... my another speculated say Penny mother and Penny dad has DIVORCED long year ago , because no sign that Penny miss her dad , it means she never ACTUALLY met her dad . i just share my opinion , don't be mad Please :)
good ones you put an Really detail on the story , i even can played the Scene in my head _... only one thing , I think penny doesn't have dad , as longest i know in Bolt 1 he's never appeared or mentioned in the Real life by her mother or by penny . even if he exist he must be appeared on the Ending , or... my another speculated say Penny mother and Penny dad has DIVORCED long year ago , because no sign that Penny miss her dad , it means she never ACTUALLY met her dad . i just share my opinion , don't be mad Please :)
6/1/2013 c1 Rtezy
Good intro , but i think you should change from Rated K to T , there's some 'annoying' word and not good for a 'Children' . but the intro pretty good at all , umm one thing , i though Bolt must been doesn't know that Maybele is an actress because before he meet know that he's not a super dog ( You mentioned that Bolt say '' Popular Dog " ) it means Bolt know that he's not a super dog . but i think next chapter will explain everything
Good intro , but i think you should change from Rated K to T , there's some 'annoying' word and not good for a 'Children' . but the intro pretty good at all , umm one thing , i though Bolt must been doesn't know that Maybele is an actress because before he meet know that he's not a super dog ( You mentioned that Bolt say '' Popular Dog " ) it means Bolt know that he's not a super dog . but i think next chapter will explain everything
5/15/2013 c1 3Dinode
The language in this story warrants a T rating, not K plus. Wonder what will happen next in the dream.
3DinodeThe language in this story warrants a T rating, not K plus. Wonder what will happen next in the dream.
4/11/2013 c13 4MotherTrucker4x4
Oh yeah. Don't worry. It's happening right now. I'm writing it up and I will have it posted as soon as I possibly can. Hope you guys like it.
4MotherTrucker4x4Oh yeah. Don't worry. It's happening right now. I'm writing it up and I will have it posted as soon as I possibly can. Hope you guys like it.
4/1/2013 c13 9Lily Shine
Hey keep up the series. Thats right I said make a series. This is kinda funny cause i swear i seen this Roscoe thing before. I don't know where but it seems like maybe i have read it earlier in your story. Question is if this is actually going to happen or not. Great story. Don't stop writing.
9Lily ShineHey keep up the series. Thats right I said make a series. This is kinda funny cause i swear i seen this Roscoe thing before. I don't know where but it seems like maybe i have read it earlier in your story. Question is if this is actually going to happen or not. Great story. Don't stop writing.
3/31/2013 c4 21JimmyRabbit
Okay, this clarifies the idiocy someone had in inventing the gun. What a freaking p**sy weapon! AAACCCHH! I HATE 'EM! I HATE 'EM ALL!
Okay... in this chapter, I'm glad the guy died. He got what he deserved for being a WUSSY! What I didn't know is that Bolt has his powers... is he still dreaming? I think I may have missed that detail.
21JimmyRabbitOkay, this clarifies the idiocy someone had in inventing the gun. What a freaking p**sy weapon! AAACCCHH! I HATE 'EM! I HATE 'EM ALL!
Okay... in this chapter, I'm glad the guy died. He got what he deserved for being a WUSSY! What I didn't know is that Bolt has his powers... is he still dreaming? I think I may have missed that detail.
3/31/2013 c3 JimmyRabbit
Ha ha! "Oh, No. We're gonna help" and the other guy is like "Whoa, whoa, whoa! Hold on a sec!" I laughed when I read that, obviously. Way to jump right into helping, Roscoe... Oh, I that reminds me, I forgot to mention in my story that the Roscoe dog's name came from you. I'll be sure to mention that in one of my future author's notes.
Anywhats, I think I'll read on to see where this story is going still, but I just wanna say I HATE GUNS! I think the world would be better without them, and I agree and disagree with Sam. Guns are bad, but we shouldn't fear guns, what we SHOULD fear is the people who's fingers are on the triggers! ... I don't know why I'm saying this. It was brought up, and I guess it's kind of a sensitive subject. Guns never do anything but destroy, injure, or kill. They're made for destruction... that's why I hate whoever invented them. He deserves hell rubbed in his face.
Anywhats again, I'll read on...
Ha ha! "Oh, No. We're gonna help" and the other guy is like "Whoa, whoa, whoa! Hold on a sec!" I laughed when I read that, obviously. Way to jump right into helping, Roscoe... Oh, I that reminds me, I forgot to mention in my story that the Roscoe dog's name came from you. I'll be sure to mention that in one of my future author's notes.
Anywhats, I think I'll read on to see where this story is going still, but I just wanna say I HATE GUNS! I think the world would be better without them, and I agree and disagree with Sam. Guns are bad, but we shouldn't fear guns, what we SHOULD fear is the people who's fingers are on the triggers! ... I don't know why I'm saying this. It was brought up, and I guess it's kind of a sensitive subject. Guns never do anything but destroy, injure, or kill. They're made for destruction... that's why I hate whoever invented them. He deserves hell rubbed in his face.
Anywhats again, I'll read on...